Tearz (tearz) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
We are awaiting two items for arrival.
One of them was ordered avera month ago, but it hasn't been delivered.
Please advise their expected delivery date respectively.

修正後
We are awaiting two items for arrival.
One of them was ordered about a month ago, but it hasn't been delivered.
Please advise their expected delivery date respectively.

元の翻訳
Since November, I have not been able to log in Amazon EU Seller account.
I don't recall if I changed my ID or password. My seller account has been suspended, but I would still need to take care of the buyers inquiries. My fund has been put on hold, as well.
Nevertheless, I no longer receive a single e-mail and have no idea of the current status at all. How could I be able to log in again?
I sent an e-mail once, but no response.

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Since the beginning of November, I have not been able to log into my Amazon EU Seller account.
I don't recall if I changed my ID or password. My seller account has been suspended, but I would still need to take care of the buyers' inquiries. My fund has been put on hold as well.
Nevertheless, I no longer receive a single e-mail and have no idea of the current status at all. How could I be able to log in again?
I sent an e-mail once, but no response came back from you.

元の翻訳
Since November, I have not been able to log in Amazon EU Seller account.
I don't recall if I changed my ID or password. My seller account has been suspended, but I would still need to take care of the buyers inquiries. My fund has been put on hold, as well.
Nevertheless, I no longer receive a single e-mail and have no idea of the current status at all. How could I be able to log in again?
I sent an e-mail once, but no response.

修正後
Since November, I have not been able to log in to Amazon EU Seller account.
I don't recall changing my ID or password. My seller account has been suspended, but I would still need to take care of the buyer's inquiries. My fund has been put on hold, as well.
Nevertheless, I no longer receive a single e-mail and have no idea of the current status at all. How can I log in again?
I sent an e-mail once, but no response.

元の翻訳
LanguageWire では常にクライアントと翻訳者両方に次のレベルへ到達できるようサービスを提供しています。AGITO翻訳のような自社ツールの改善や新規機能の追加も常に怠りません。従って現在いくつかの新規トレーニングプログラムをクライアントと翻訳者が弊社ツールを通じて最大限活用できるよう設定している最中です。

AGITO TranslateでNative Instruments の業務を手がけてこられたお客様に、「AGITO Translate – TM およびSegmentation Handling for Advanced Users（上級ユーザー向けセグメンテーションハンドリング）」というトレーニングセッションへご招待したいと思います。

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LanguageWire では常にクライアントと翻訳者両方に次のレベルへ到達できるようサービスを提供しています。AGITO翻訳のような自社ツールの改善や新規機能の追加も常に怠りません。従って現在いくつかの新規トレーニングプログラムをクライアントと翻訳者が弊社ツールを通じて最大限活用できるよう設定している最中です。

AGITO TranslateでNative Instruments の業務を手がけてこられたお客様を、「AGITO Translate – TM およびSegmentation Handling for Advanced Users（上級ユーザー向けセグメンテーションハンドリング）」というトレーニングセッションへご招待したいと思います。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your support.
Thanks to your cancellation process on eBay, the full amount was refunded from "PayPal".
Although your instruction was to pay through "propay", I do not settle a payment anything other than "PayPal.
I bidded the item because it said "PayPal" is available for payment, we are sorry but please let me cancell your order this time.
Thank and best regards,

修正後
Thank you for your support.
Thanks to your cancellation process on eBay, the full amount was refunded from "PayPal".
[Thank you for cancelling the eBay .....]↵
Although your instruction was to pay through "propay", I do not settle a payment anything other than "PayPal.
[...I do not make payment using anything aside from/ apart from 'PayPal'↵
↵
I bidded (<--not a word) the item because it said "PayPal" is available for payment, we are sorry but please let me cancell (<--spelling) your (<--not your it's MY) order this time.↵
[I bid on the item as it said that 'PayPal' was available as a payment method,
Thank and best regards,

元の翻訳
YN-560IIIの卸売価格は単価$54.10となります。
こちらは（工場渡）の輸出入手続き のためその他の費用は含まれておりません。

それからYN-560IIIを単価US$71.00以上で販売した際、60日間8%の払い戻しを受けることができます。
YN-560IIIを100個後注文頂いた場合、払い戻し金額は$432.80となり、その後60日以内の発注金額から差し引かれます。

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YN-560IIIの卸売価格は単価$54.10となります。
こちらは（工場渡）の輸出入手続き のためその他の費用は含まれておりません。
Pls noteが訳されていません。
それからYN-560IIIを単価US$71.00以上で販売した際、60日間8%の払い戻しを受けることができます。
この訳文だと７１ドルで販売した場合は払い戻しを受けることになります。原文はabove 71です。↵
クレームにつながる訳です。通貨の表記もUS＄と単なる＄で統一されていません。↵
↵
YN-560IIIを100個後注文頂いた場合、払い戻し金額は$432.80となり、その後60日以内の発注金額から差し引かれます。↵
後注文など原文にはありません。

元の翻訳
Thank you for offering K10U!
I will make the most of it for future opportunities.
I, however, have not received K10U as of yet.
I am in charge of NIJ's Product Specialist, but since I do not have K10U, as the current status I have been asking artists to wait for sending me their support requests. Therefore your prompt arrangement on this is appreciated.
Also, I have been requesting for the provision of KKS49, and I was wondering if this request has reached to you already?
It would be okay if you could arrange KKS49 only for me.

I should be able to complete my job by the end of Wednesday.

修正後
Thank you for offering K10U!
I will make the most of it for future opportunities.
I, however, have not received K10U as of yet.
I am also in charge of NIJ's Product Specialist, but since I do not have K10U, as the current status I have been asking artists to wait for sending me their support requests. Therefore your prompt arrangement on this is appreciated.
Also, I have been requesting for the provision of KKS49, and I was wondering if this request has reached to you already?
It would be okay if you could arrange KKS49 only for me.

I should be able to complete my job by the end of Wednesday.

元の翻訳
1. I could search it for you if you could let me know the image of the item you wouuld like or the web page address of the movie on YouTube. I have A, B, etc. if you are looking for those sold in 90s. Please let me know if you are interested.
2. What do you mean by "A"? Sorry that I am not familiar with English. It would be helpful if you could let me know what "A" is by sending me a photo.
3. If it is okay with you, would you please return the item via SAL with a tracking number? I will repay you via eBay after the item is delivered here. The return shipping fee you will be covering will be repaid to you from PayPal.

修正後
1. I could search for it for you if you could let me know the image of the item you would like or the web page address of the movie on YouTube. I have A, B, etc. if you are looking for those sold in 90s. Please let me know if you are interested.
2. What do you mean by "A"? Sorry that I am not familiar with English. It would be helpful if you could let me know what "A" is by sending me a photo.
3. If it is okay with you, would you please return the item via SAL with a tracking number? I will repay you via eBay after the item is delivered here. The return shipping fee you will be covering will be repaid to you by PayPal.

元の翻訳
商品の記載内容に関して私は問題を3つ抱えていました。重要なものからそうでないものの順番で下記に記しました。
①フードのロック機能が大変ボロボロ担っているためしっかりとロックされません。単純にレンズとフードを振ると落下します。スリングでカメラを露出させて持ち運ぶ時に大変困ります。私が歩いただけで落ちそうになると思うので事が重大になるまでおそらく気づかないでしょう。
②「若干の埃」とあなたは言及しましたが、このレンズに付着している埃の量は尋常ではなく、複数のレンズ素子にも付着しています。以前の所有者がどのようにレンズの手入れをしていたかはわかりませんが、予想していた以上にひどいです。

修正後
商品の記載内容に関して私は問題を3つ抱えていました。重要なものからそうでないものの順番で下記に記しました。
下記に記した　は変な日本語です。↵
重要なものからそうでないものの順番で、もっと簡潔な日本語があるはずです。機械訳ですか？↵
↵
①フードのロック機能が大変ボロボロ担っているためしっかりとロックされません。単純にレンズとフードを振ると落下します。スリングでカメラを露出させて持ち運ぶ時に大変困ります。私が歩いただけで落ちそうになると思うので事が重大になるまでおそらく気づかないでしょう。
↵
ボロボロ担って?　ロック機構が擦り切れてロックがかからないという意味です。↵
レンズを振るとフードが落ちるです。↵
②「若干の埃」とあなたは言及しましたが、このレンズに付着している埃の量は尋常ではなく、複数のレンズ素子にも付着しています。以前の所有者がどのようにレンズの手入れをしていたかはわかりませんが、予想していた以上にひどいです。↵
言及しましたが、...機械翻訳ですか？

元の翻訳
支払った金額のままで請求書を頂いても問題ありませんし、追って税金も支払います。そのほかに私が困っているのは、フランスのクロノポストから事務手続きをするだけで、EMSを使用すると21ユーロもかかってしまうという点です。

修正後
支払った金額のままで請求書を頂いても問題ありませんし、追って税金も支払います。そのほかに私が困っているのは、フランスのクロノポストから事務手続きをするだけで、EMSを使用すると21ユーロもかかってしまうという点です。↵
problem in はhaving とpaying の両方にかかっています。機械翻訳の典型でしょうか。↵
問題ないと言っているのに、on top of that を”そのほかに”と訳すのも前後の文章から明らかに変です。↵

元の翻訳
支払った金額のままで請求書を頂いても問題ありませんし、追って税金も支払います。そのほかに私が困っているのは、フランスのクロノポストから事務手続きをするだけで、EMSを使用すると21ユーロもかかってしまうという点です。

修正後
支払った金額のままで請求書を頂いても問題ありませんし、追って税金も支払います。何より私が困っているのは、フランスのクロノポストから事務手続きをするだけで、EMSを使用すると21ユーロもかかってしまうという点です。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your patience. It is revived to our modern times by the best possible Japanese creators based upon the latest theory. This beautiful mold with the best perfection is perfectly appropriate for not only decorating a room, but also placing where many people get together, as well as a school material, displayed at a museum, or a guift. The precision of its detail has excelled the range of figurine, and we would like to offer it to you as an art piece. Please buy it now. The first 10 customers who purchased this item by November 30 will be entitled for an additional gift.

修正後
Thank you for your patience. It is revived to our modern times by the best possible Japanese creators based upon the latest theory. This beautiful mold with the best perfection is perfectly appropriate for not only decorating a room, but also placing where many people get together, as well as a school material, displayed at a museum, or a gift. The precision of its detail has excelled the range of figurine, and we would like to offer it to you as an art piece. Please buy it now. The first 10 customers who purchased this item by November 30 will be entitled for an additional gift.

元の翻訳
It is Japanese public holiday today, so this translation task cannot get completed by the end of today.

Here is the October invoice.
The bank account for the transfer is listed here, so please kindly check to see if it has no issues.
As for the new bank account, I will let you know on a seperate note.

Also,

currently I have been in touch with Ryo with regard to the translation striving for its content improvement.
I hope to hold a better discussion about it at the meeting held on 7th, thank you.

Your continuing support and understanding are appreciated.

修正後
It is a Japanese public holiday today, so this translation task cannot get completed by the end of today.

Here is the October invoice.
The bank account for the transfer is listed here, so please kindly check to see if it has no issues.来月から他の銀行口座への入金をお願いします。
大事な文章が訳されていません。↵
As for the new bank account, I will let you know on a separate note.

Also,

currently I have been in touch with Ryo with regard to the translation striving for its content improvement.
I hope to hold a better discussion about it at the meeting held on 7th, thank you.

Your continuing support and understanding are appreciated.