Tearz (tearz) — 付けたレビュー

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改善してほしい点についてフィードバックを送ってくれるといいと思う。例えば、君の方が知っていることとか、僕のしたことがどうたったか教えてくれたりとか。

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あなたからフィードバック修正リクエストを送ってもらう必要があると思います。そういうことについてはあなたの方がご存知だと思うので、どうしたら良いか教えてください。

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了解しました。３００ドル返金する必要はありません。もしご厚意に甘えさせていただけるのであれば、２００ドルを返金して頂いて、そのお金をカメラの修理代金の一部にしようと思います。よろしくお願いします！

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了解しました。３００ドル返金する必要はありません。もしご厚意に甘えさせていただけるのであれば、２００ドルを返金して頂いて、そのお金をカメラの修理代金に充当しようと思います。よろしくお願いします！

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As you know, exchange rate of US dollars and Japanese yen is drastically changing and Japanese yen has dropped more than 10% since we started business. Will you review the price?

Based on the current exchange rate, item AA almost makes no profit.
Please kindly reconsider the price.

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As you know, exchange rate between US dollars and Japanese yen has been drastically changing and Japanese yen has dropped more than 10% since we started business. Will you review the trade price?

Based on the current exchange rate, item AA generates almost no profit.
Please kindly reconsider the price.

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It is not necessary to return the camera. As inconvenience may have been caused due to here's mistake on checking, USD300 will be refunded to you. The refund is our apology on the broken camera.

Once you confirmed the refund, I'm sorry to trouble you, but would you please help to revise the rating to positive? I look forward to receiving your reply.

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It is not necessary to return the camera. As inconvenience has been caused due to here's mistake on checking, USD300 will be refunded to you. The refund is a sign of our apology on the broken camera.

Once you confirmed the refund, I'm sorry to trouble you, but would you please help to revise the rating to positive? I look forward to receiving your reply.

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I am indebted.

Can I buy the white spatula which is attached to your company's product "AAA" adhesive?
It looks like the following photograph(s).

My best regards.

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Thank you for your support as always.

Can I buy the white spatula which is attached to your company's glue "AAA"?
It looks like the following photograph(s).

My best regards.

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Thank you always.

Will you sell me the white "Tracing spatula" which comes with your glue "AAA"?
I attached the photo, please refer to it.

I'm sorry bother you but appreciate your help in advance.

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Thank you as always.

Will you please sell me the white "Tracing spatula" which comes with your glue "AAA"?
Please refer to the attached photo.

Thank you for your support in advance.

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My child did a mischief. I'm afraid, but please cancel the bit. I'm very sorry.

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My child got into mischief. I'm sorry, but please cancel the bit. My apologies.

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My child pranked me. I'm very sorry, but could you please cancel my bid? Thank you very much.

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My child played a prank on me. I'm very sorry, but could you please cancel my bid? Thank you very much.

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The ordered item has already been shipped to America though air.
The item estimated arrival date which reach your place should be 2nd Dec.

When the item is passed to you, you can refuse it and in reverse it will send back to me.

Once i received the return item, i will handle the refund as soon as possible.
The refund amount will be the item price which deducted the $12 delivery cost.

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The ordered item has already been shipped to America by air.
The item's estimated arrival date I believe would be around 2nd Dec.

When the item is delivered to you, please refuse it and it will be sent back to me.

Once I received the return item, I will proceed with the refund as soon as possible.
The refund amount will be the item price after $12 deduction for the delivery cost.

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Thank you for bidding 2 items . Would you mind i combine them and ship to you?
Please send an invoice which have the total amount of the 2 biddings to me.

Looking forward to hearing from you . Thank you so much.

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Thank you for bidding 2 items . Would you mind my shipping them together to you?
I will send you an invoice which have the total amount of the 2 biddings to me. <-- 「１個分の送料」が抜けています。

Looking forward to hearing from you . Thank you so much.

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Thank you for your acceptance.
As the product has already returned and reached, kindly please immediately amend the return reason.
Please understand, the amount of transfer will be the balance after deducted the delivery cost.

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Thank you for your acceptance.
As the product has already been returned and reached, please kindly amend the reason for return immediately.
Please understand, the amount of transfer will be the balance after deducted the delivery cost.

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From the market of the advertise expenses about 200 billion yen, it targets to got the 200 million yen as 0.1% of the share in 3 years.

The source authority : Dentsu "Japanese advertising expenses 2012"

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From the market of the advertise expenses about 200 billion yen, it aims to obtain 200 million yen as 0.1% of the share in 3 years.

Reference: Dentsu Inc. "Advertising Expenditure Reports 2012"

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From the market that has about 200 billion yen production costs on advertising,
we aimed to gain the 0.1% share which worth 200 million yen.

Reference: Dentsu Inc. "Japan's Advertising cost in 2012"

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From the market that has about 200 billion yen production costs on advertising,
we aimed to gain the 0.1% share which is worth 200 million yen.

Reference: Dentsu Inc. "Advertising Expenditure Reports 2012"

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お客様、〇の注文のについてです。↵
弊社に１回電話して頂けませんか。

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お客様、〇の注文に関してご確認のため、一度お電話頂けますでしょううか。

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お客様、〇で私たちと連絡して商品を確認いただけませんか。

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お客様、〇でのご購入について確認させて頂きたく、お電話を頂けますでしょうか。

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Good day!
Thank you for your reply.
We apologize to have given an inconvenience as you have not received an item this time.
We will process this business by refunding.
We hope that you understand us.

Good day!
Thank you for supporting us all the time.
Regarding the business as is described below, we are going to handle by refunding.
We appreciate your understanding.

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Good day!
Thank you for your reply.
We apologize to have caused an inconvenience as you have not received an item this time.
We will issue you a refund.
Thank you for your kind understanding.

Good day!
Thank you for supporting us all the time.
Regarding the below transaction, we would like to issue you a refund.
We appreciate your understanding.

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Hellow,
Thank you for your reply.
I am very sorry for the inconvenience that the item hasn't arrived this time.
I would like to refund for the trade this time.
Thank you very much for your cooperation in advance.

Hellow,
Thank you for your support every time.
I would like to refund for the trade below.
Thank you for your cooperation in advance.

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Hello,
Thank you for your reply.
I am very sorry for the inconvenience that the item hasn't arrived this time.
I would like to refund for the transaction this time.
Thank you very much for your cooperation in advance.

Hello,
Thank you for your support every time.
I would like to refund for the transaction below.
Thank you for your cooperation in advance.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your inquiry.
Please check the attached images. In addition to them, we display Mamiya products. Therefore please take a look at the product list as well. If you need any other products, please feel free to contact us. We will check the availability.
Best regards,

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Thank you for your inquiry.
Please check the attached images. In addition to them, we list Mamiya products. Therefore please take a look at the product list as well. If you need any other products, please feel free to contact us. We will check the availability.
Best regards,

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Could I get the invoice of what I bought from you?
We'll be ready for shipping to Japan after gatheringthe items in the warehouse in Florida.
But we'll need the invoice.

We can't make a document for shipping to ship without the invoice.
Would you email me with the invoice including the information below?
I need your help.

I'm sorry for this inconvenience.
Thank you.

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Could I have the invoice of xx's I bought from you? ←　商品名をxxと指定されているときはｘｘと英訳しましょう。
We'll ship for Japan after gathering the items at the warehouse in Florida.
We'll need the invoice then.　←　「その際に」の対訳は正確に。

We can't make a document for shipping to ship without the invoice.
Would you email me with the invoice including the information below?
I need your cooperation.　←　Helpと協力の違いを確認なさってみてください。

I'm sorry for this inconvenience.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
①12/1 ［Mon］0：00～12/7 ［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/8[Mon]]
②12/9 ［Tue］0：00～12/14［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/15[Mon]]
③12/16［Tue］0：00～12/21［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/22[Mon]]
④12/23［Tue］0：00～12/28［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/22[Mon]]

Details of application method↓
fmosaka.net/sdd/

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①12/1 ［Mon］0：00～12/7 ［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/8[Mon]]
②12/9 ［Tue］0：00～12/14［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/15[Mon]]
③12/16［Tue］0：00～12/21［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/22[Mon]]
④12/23［Tue］0：00～12/28［Sun］23：59 [Result Announcement：12/29[Mon]]

Details of application method↓
fmosaka.net/sdd/

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Hiroshima green arena

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Hiroshima Green Arena