Tearz (tearz) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
When you check-in at 19:30,please make the payment with cash. The payment will include the deposit which will return when you check-out only if there is no damage in the room.
I am now living in Tokyo, Japan. I am looking forward to see your visiting.

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When I check-in at 19:30, I will make the payment with cash. I will keep the room clean, so please repay me the depost if there is no problem.
I live in Kyoto, Japan. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
商品を受け取れません
お客様商品コードは１０字必要です。

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商品を受け取ることができません。
税関のお客様商品コードは１０文字必要です。

元の翻訳
I'll bid. Do you have the items shortened? I'm looking forword your reply.

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I'll bid. Is it hemmed up? I'm looking forward to your reply.

元の翻訳
I will bit. Is it Hemmed up? I'm looking forward to your reply.

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I will bit. Is it hemmed up? I'm looking forward to your reply.

元の翻訳
Dear ○○

Hello.

I understand I don't have to pay any more.
Moreover, thank you for your discount.
I'm looking forword to receiving item.
I look forword to your continued support.

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Dear ○○

Hello.

I understand, so I don't have to pay any more.
Moreover, thank you for your discount.
I'm looking forword to receiving the item.
I look forword to your continuing support.

元の翻訳
Dear [Mr. ○○/Ms. ○○],

i see. So, i don't have to pay any more?
Thank you for the discount.
I am looking forward to the arrival of the product.

Thank you very much.

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Dear Mr./Ms. ○○,

I see. So, I don't have to pay any more, correct?
Thank you for the discount, too.
I am looking forward to receiving the product.

Thank you very much.

元の翻訳
#william
I am relieved to know its possible.
As you mentioned, I would like to have the extra butter in 20g x2.
I'll respond again after confirming with my customer.
I will also be waiting for the responce from BIG BERTHA.

#dave gruby
I'm sorry, I can deal with you only by mail, since I cannot speak English.
If this is okay, I can ask my Japanese customers what they would want.

#will
I am sorry to hear its already sold...
I do not mind about the loft, so please inform me if you have a chance to obtain it again.

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#william
I am relieved to know it's possible.
As you mentioned, I would like to have the extra putter as 20g x2.
I'll respond again after confirming with my customer.
I will also be waiting for your response regarding BIG BERTHA.

#dave gruby
I'm sorry, I can deal with you only by mail, since I cannot speak English.
As I have Japanese customers, I could ask them what they would want.

#will
I am sorry to hear it's already been sold...
I do not mind about the loft, so please inform me if you have a chance to obtain it.

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#william
I was very relieved when I heard that you would be able to assist me.
As I have said, I would like an additional 20g X 2.
As soon as I have confirmed with the customer I will contact you.
I am awaiting a reply from BIG BERTHA.

#dave gruby
I am sorry I don not speak English, if possible could we please conduct our business via email.
I take care of many Japanese customers, so I can ask what they would like.

#will
I was sad to hear that they had sold out, not much that can be done about that.
The Loft will not make it in time so, if you get any in I would appreciate if you could contact me.

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#william
I was very relieved when I heard that you would be able to assist me.
As I have said, I would like an additional 20g X 2. ←　「パターの重量」の訳抜け
As soon as I have confirmed with the customer I will contact you.
I am awaiting a reply from BIG BERTHA.←　誤訳。BIG　BERTHAからの返信を待っているのではない。

#dave gruby
I am sorry but I do not speak English. If possible could we please conduct our business via e-mail.　←　原文に忠実に訳しましょう。
I take care of many Japanese customers, so I can ask what they would like.

#will
I was sad to hear that they have been disposed, not much that can be done about that. ←　誤訳。「売却」は「売り切れ」という意味ではないので、きちんと調べること。
The loft will not make it in time so, if you get any in I would appreciate if you could contact me. ←「ロフトは問いませんので」の部分が誤訳。「問いません」は「間に合いません」という意味ではない。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your mail.
As you said, you will move out no later than Nov 16. I would appreciate if the house can be emptied sooner.
Should you have any queries, please feel free to contact me.

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Thank you for your e-mail.
As you said, you will move out no later than Nov 16. I would appreciate if the house can be emptied sooner.
Should you have any queries, please feel free to contact me.

元の翻訳
The customer is considering purchansing IP-PBX and hope to decide after comfirming the two estimates between PBX and IP-PBX.
So for now it is not the change to IP-PBX.
He want to have IP-PBX's estimate to comapare each other.

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The customer is considering purchansing IP-PBX, and hope to decide after comfirming the estimate of IP-PBX for making the final decision between PBX and IP-PBX.
So at this stage it is not changing to IP-PBX.
He is requesting for IP-PBX's estimate for products comparison and investigation.

元の翻訳
こんにちは。おめでとうございます。

イーベイからの請求書は届きましたでしょうか？　私共が海外に商品を販売する際には、イーベイが海外出荷プログラムを通じて発送を行います。お支払いはお済みでしょうか？　ボーナスギフトをお送りいたします！

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こんにちは。おめでとうございます。

イーベイからの請求書は届きましたでしょうか？　私共が海外に商品を販売する際には、イーベイが海外出荷プログラムを通じて発送を行います。お支払いが済んでいることをご確認下さい。ボーナスギフトをお送りいたします！

元の翻訳
こんにちは。おめでとうございます。eBayからインボイスが届きましたか？国際市場に商品を販売する際、eBayが国際発送プログラムを取り扱います。支払いがなされることをご確認ください。ボーナス・ギフトを送らせていただきます。

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こんにちは。おめでとうございます。eBayからインボイスが届きましたか？弊社は国際市場で商品を販売する際、国際発送プログラムはeBayが対応しています。支払いがされていることをご確認ください。ボーナス・ギフトを送らせていただきます！

元の翻訳
こんにちは。おめでとうございます。eBayからインボイスを受け取りましたか。国際販売をするときにはeBayのグローバル シッピング プログラムが出荷を取り扱います。支払いをする確認をしてください。ボーナス ギフトを送ります。

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こんにちは。おめでとうございます。eBayから請求書をお受け取りになりましたか。弊社は海外でも販売しており、eBayの国際配送プログラムが出荷を取り扱います。お支払いがきちんとされていることを御確認ください。ボーナスギフトをお送りします！

元の翻訳
Thank you for your contact.
I have verified the contents.
Currently, Ryo and I are making adjustment for the meeting.
We aare looking forward to solving the current issue in this meeting.
Thank you for your cooperation.

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Thank you for your contact.
I have verified the contents.
↵
Currently, Ryo and I are making adjustment for the meeting.
We are looking forward to resolving the current issue in this meeting.↵

Thank you for your cooperation.

元の翻訳
Thanks for contact.
The content has been confirmed.

Now I'm scheduling a meeting with Ryo.
We prepare to solve current problem with the meeting.

Thanks.

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Thanks for the contact.
The content has been confirmed.

Now I'm scheduling a meeting with Ryo.
We plan to resolve current problems in this meeting.

Thanks.

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting us.
I have confirmed the content.

I am currently in a meeting with Ryo to discuss the alterations.
We will determine actions for the problematic points in this meeting.

Thank you.

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Thank you for contacting us.
I have confirmed the content.

I am currently working with Ryo on a meeting coordination.
We will resolve the current issues in this meeting.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
Recently I can't upload photos by using the e-mail address for twitter.
I can upload on Flicker, but can't still upload on twitter.
I want to know when this problem will be fixed.

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Recently I can't upload photos by using the e-mail address for twitter.
I can upload on Flicker, but can't post on twitter.
I want to know when this problem will be fixed.

元の翻訳
荷物を送付いただいたようですが、荷物に明記された、もしくは、同封の請求書に書かれた価格を具体的に教えてください。

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荷物を送付いただと理解しておりますが、荷物に明記された、もしくは、同封の請求書に書かれた価格を具体的に教えてください。

元の翻訳
この装置の入力の電圧と周波数はいくらでしょう。装置の操作方法を教えて下さい。その他必要な点がありますか。

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この装置の電圧と周波数はいくらでしょう。それがどう作動するのかを教えて下さい。その他追加点はありますか？

元の翻訳
装置における電圧と周波数の総量はいくらですか。それは、どのように作用しますか。なにか付け足すことはありますか。

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装置における電圧と周波数の数値はいくらですか。それはどのように作動しますか？なにか付け足すことはありますか？

元の翻訳
ユニットの電圧とヘルツはいくつ？どうやって操作するの？何か付け加えることができる？

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ユニットの電圧と周波数の数値はいくつですか？どうやって作動するのでしょうか？何か付け加えることはできますか？