Celeste Scott (fuyunoriviera) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Hello.
Thank you for purchasing from me.
I regret to inform you that the item you ordered is very popular which will result in a delayed shipment.
The expected shipment date for the item is anywhere between late November 2014 to early December 2014. I realize this is a long time to wait and will offer you a refund if you wish.
Please contact me if you would like your money back.
I am very sorry for making you wait so long, but I am unable to do anything about the current situation.
In any case, I will make sure to keep in contact until the transaction has been finalized, regardless of what you decide.
Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need anything.

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Hello.
Thank you for purchasing at my shop.
I regret to inform you that the item you ordered is very popular, which will result in a delayed shipment.
The expected shipment date for the item is anywhere between late November 2014 to early December 2014. ↵
I realize this is a long time to wait, so I will offer you a refund if you wish.
I apologize for the trouble, but would you please contact me if you hope to get your money back?
I am very sorry for making you wait long, but I am unable to do anything about the current situation.
In any case, I will make sure to keep contact with you until the transaction has been finalized.
Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need anything.

元の翻訳
We are currently planning and implementing the following management system in order to solve the aforementioned problems.
- A review of our price management system.
*Problematic programs have been detected and are currently undergoing revision.
- A complete stop of new product registration until the above program errors have been fixed the prices of items currently in stock have been revised.
- Routine checks if there are any inconsistencies between the data that has actually been uploaded and the set price of applicable products when uploading a new CVS file.

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We are currently planning and implementing the following management system in order to solve the aforementioned problems.
- A review of our price management system.
*Problematic programs have been detected and are currently being revised.
- New product registration is now put on hold and will not resume the process until the above program errors have been fixed and the prices of items currently in stock have been revised.
- Routine checks if there are any inconsistencies between the data that has actually been uploaded and the set price of applicable products when uploading a new CVS file.

元の翻訳
こんにちは。

注文をキャンセルしてみたら、「セラーは発送の準備をしていますので、注文の取り消しは保証いたしかねます」というメッセージがありました。

この場合はどうすればいいのでしょうか。

もう一度確認していただけませんか。

よろしくお願いします。

修正後
こんにちは。

注文をキャンセルしようとしたら、「セラーは発送の準備をしていますので、注文の取り消しは保証いたしかねます」というメッセージがありました。

この場合はどうすればいいのでしょうか。

もう一度確認していただけませんか。

よろしくお願いします。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message. The foundation is by a brand called HappyMake which was produced by a famous Japanese beautician Teruko Kobayashi. It was mainly sold through home shopping programs. The package may have been limited edition.
Here is the webpage for your reference.

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Thank you for your message. The foundation is by a brand called HappyMake which was produced by a famous Japanese beautician Teruko Kobayashi. It was mainly sold through home television shopping programs. The package may have been limited edition.
Here is the webpage for your reference.

元の翻訳
Thank you for the message.
Your item may be lost or held by customs for inspection as it was sent overseas.
I will refund you the item price.
I am very sorry that this happened.
Please contact me if the item does eventually reach you.
Thank you.

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Thank you for the message.
Your item may be lost or held by customs for inspection as it was sent overseas.(海外発送なので「it was sent overseas」とされたのだと思いますが、この場合、受け手側にたって、...it was shipped from overseasではないでしょうか？)
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I will refund you the price of the item.
I am sincerely sorry for the inconvenience this may have caused you.
Please kindly contact me when you receive the item.→書き手は「もし」と書いていますが、when のつもりだと思います。
Thank you.

元の翻訳
Please tell the the tracking number of the package you just sent,

Also, I had a cancellation from a customer because a package from you was sent too late.
I will be sending the item stated below back to you, so please give me a refund.
I would like you to pay for the return shipping.

Please let me know what you have in stock before I place orders so this doesn't happen again.
Would you be able to send me an Excel spread sheet every week detailing what you have in stock of every size and color of the items listed below?

I think our business transactions will proceed more smoothly if I know what you have in stock.
Thanks.

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Please tell me the the tracking number of the package you just sent,

Also, I had a cancellations from customers because a packages are taking too long to deliver.
I will be sending the item stated below back, so please give me a refund.
I would like you to pay for the return shipping also.

Please contact me about what you have in stock before I place orders so this kind of thing doesn't happen again.
Would you be able to send me an Excel spread sheet every week with what you have in stock of every size and color of the items listed below?

I think our business transactions will go smoother for both of us if I know what you have in stock.
Best regards.

元の翻訳
A mechanical horse
That carrot's not what you think it is
Budgerigars made out of wool felt
It's up in the air!
Where's my food?
Grin
How to turn raisins back into grapes
Taking care of the baby
An apple paperweight
A bracelet with a collar
Leave it to me!
Gathering in the shadows on a hot day
When only half an apple is peeled
A fancy container
Walking with your right foot first
A cat broach
Polar bears made out of woof fleece
In the mood to relax
Cherry blossom latte art
He's wearing earmuffs, but not on his ears
A strawberry roll cake
Showtime for tails
I made a sandcastle
I'm going to land!
A sacred place inside a cave
I've never tasted anything like this before
Ice coffee ice

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A mechanical horse
That carrot's not what you think it is
Parrot made out of wool felt
It's floating!
Where's my food?
Grin
How to turn raisins back into grapes
Currently raising children
An apple paperweight
A bracelet with a collar
Leave it to me!
Gathering in the shadows on a hot day
Half of the apple is peeled
A fancy container
Walking with your right foot first
A cat broach
Polar bears made out of woof fleece
Wanting to better yourself
Cherry blossom latte art
He's wearing earmuffs, but not on his ears
A strawberry roll cake
Showtime for tails
I made a sandcastle
I'm going to land!
A sacred place inside a cave
I've never tasted anything like this before
Coffee flavored ice

元の翻訳
Also, I would like to ask you if it is possible to change the URL of the products page to a "short URL" and use that. We would appreciate it if you could consider how to do this as we would be unable to know how many times the URL has been clicked on if it were a standard URL. If that is difficult to do, a standard URL is also fine.

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Also, I would like to ask you if it is possible to change the URL of the product's page to a "short URL" and use that. With a normal URL, we cannot keep track of how many times the link has been clicked, so we would really appreciate it if you could look into this for us. If it is too much effort, however, a standard URL will work just fine.

元の翻訳
Hello. I would like to purchase 5 of the pink ones. Do you have in stock? Thank you in advance.

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Hello. I would like to purchase 5 of the pink one. Do you have them in stock? Thank you in advance.