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Mr. XX

Good Day

I am terribly sorry to bother you on your busy schedule, however I would like to check if you had yet to receive the invoice that was sent previously?

I am troubled as it cannot be shipped from Florida to Japan.

Although it is a hassle, but please kindly help me out.

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Mr. XX

Good Day

I am terribly sorry to bother you on your busy schedule, however I would like to check if you had yet to receive the invoice that was sent previously?

I am troubled as it cannot be shipped from Florida to Japan.

I know it is a hassle, but please kindly help me out.

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★TOKYO GIRLS' STYLE Official Fan Club「Astalight*」
Those who register for B Course (Fees required) or those that upgrade on the 20 Dec, 30 Dec at the Live hall, you would be able to buy the items at the B Course Member Price (2,600 Yen), so do kindly make your purchases!

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★TOKYO GIRLS' STYLE Official Fan Club「Astalight*」
Those who register for B Course (Fees required) or those that upgrade on the 20 Dec, 30 Dec at the Live hall would be able to buy the items at the B Course Member Price (2,600 Yen), so do kindly make your purchases!

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I would like to change my rating as soon as possible.
I am also prepared to make refunds immediately.

I had paid the custom taxes.

And, there was a message from ebay saying that you would want to send the succesfully bidded product ove/
What do you think about this?
It is a popular item.
Please kindly reply.

From my thinking,
The wrongly sent product would be treated as my gift.
I wouldn't mind even if you were to sell it.
And, I would like to quickly settle this as soon as possible.

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I would like to change my rating as soon as possible.
I am also prepared to make refunds immediately.

I had paid the custom taxes.

And, there was a message from ebay saying that you would want to send the successful bid product over.
What do you think about this?
It is a popular item.
Please kindly reply.

What I am thinking is that,
The wrongly sent product would be treated as my gift.
I wouldn't mind even if you were to sell it.
And, I would like to quickly settle this as soon as possible.

元の翻訳
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Contact Details
AVEX MArketing Pte Ltd
0120-850095（Weekdays Only 11:00～18:00）

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Contact Details
Avex Marketing Inc.
0120-850095（Weekdays Only 11:00～18:00）

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※Please do not camp overnight at the venue as it would disturb the neighbours. If one were to be found camping at the venue overnight, the event would be cancelled.
※The transportation fees and living fees for that day would not be funded by us.
※If there were any accidents during the preparations, natural disasters, transportation strikes or any other inevitable reasons, and determined to be unable to be held, the performance would be cancelled.
※The performance programe might change with reference to the member's situation. For your kind understanding

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*Please do not camp overnight at the venue as it would disturb the neighbors. If one were to be found camping at the venue overnight, the event would be cancelled.
*The transportation fees and living [?] fees for that day would not be funded by us.
*If there were any accidents during the preparations, natural disasters, transportation strikes or any other inevitable reasons, and determined to be unable to be held, the performance would be cancelled.
*The performance program may change due to the members' situation. For your kind understanding [incomplete]

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■Blu-ray, DVD
在會場購買『Cheeky Parade PREMIUM LIVE「THE FIRST」』的藍光或DVD的顧客贈送獲得海報！　
海報將是其中一下列出之一：
　★超級限量版・全員親筆簽名的「THE FIRST」海報
　★『Together』宣傳海報

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■Blu-ray, DVD
在會場購買『Cheeky Parade PREMIUM LIVE「THE FIRST」』的藍光影片或DVD的顧客，皆可獲贈海報作為禮物！　
海報將採隨機方式贈送以下其中一種：
　★超級限量版・全員親筆簽名的「THE FIRST」海報
　★『Together』宣傳海報

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As there is an error in A's method, the payment is unable to be made.
As the payment for the product is sent from the bank, please kindly tell me the bank account number.
Thank you.

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As there is an error in A's method, the payment is unable to be made.
Please kindly let me know your bank account number as I will pay for the product through the bank.
Thank you.

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Hello A & B

Last week I had promised to send over the slides for partner application, but as I was too busy I had yet to do so.

I am really sorry for having you wait for so long. Please kindly wait a while longer.

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Hello A & B

Last week I had promised to send over the slides for partnership application, but as I was too busy I have not been able to prepare the slides.

I am really sorry for having you wait for so long. Please kindly wait a while longer.

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I have contacted you on 3 July whereby when the items were delivered, the right shoes of size US9 was missing.
With regards to that, I have accidentally mailed saying that I have received the item.
(It is the forwarding service company that made the delivery. Due to the communication error, they sent out the wrong mail.)
However, in actuality it has yet been delivered, to confirm this time round I would be the one contacting.
When the missing shoe was shipped out, the tracking number for the item was not given.
Kindly tell me the tracking number in order to confirm the status of the item.

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I have contacted you on 3 July whereby when the items were delivered, the right shoe of size US9 was missing.
With regards to that, I have accidentally emailed saying that I have received the item.
(It is the forwarding service company that made the delivery. Due to the communication error, they sent out the wrong email.)
However, in actuality it has yet been delivered, to confirm this time round I would be the one contacting.
When the missing shoe was shipped out, the tracking number for the item was not informed to me.
Kindly tell me the tracking number in order to confirm the status of the item.

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After receiving the A-to-z Claim from the customer, the account health had deteriorated.
if the A-to-z claim was cancelled, will the account health revert back to its original?
Or, A-to-z Claim Rate being recorded down, and the account health would not get better?

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After receiving an A-to-z Claim from a customer, our account health has deteriorated.
If the A-to-z claim is cancelled, will the account health revert back to its original state?
Or the A-to-z Claim Rate record will remain and the account health will not get better?

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I had read the post on Facebook
I have a proposal, if you are receiving the contract for the agency in Japan, I would wish to order 10000 dollars.↵
Should I send the amount over to you first?

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I have read the post on Facebook
I have a proposal. If I obtain a distributor agreement with you in Japan, shall I order of around 10000 dollars, and make a payment to you first?↵

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I had read the post on Facebook
I have a proposal, if you are receiving the contract for the agency in Japan, I would wish to order 10000 dollars.↵
Should I send the amount over to you first?

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I saw your post on Facebook.
I have a proposal, if I can get distributor agreement in Japan, I would like to place an order of about 10,000 dollars. Shall I send the payment to you first?.

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So I would like to order 5 additional of the same product.↵
6 numbers in total.
By the way, is it possible to ship to Japan?
Please kindly inform me of the shipping fees if it is possible.

Thank you for your help.

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I would like to make an additional order for 5 of the same product. The order would be 6 of them in total including the original order.
By the way, is it possible for you to ship them to Japan?
Please kindly inform me of the shipping fees if it is possible.

Thank you for your help.

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Alipay Walletは帳付けとボイスメッセージングを８．２の更新に追加します。

Alipayは中国通信販売の巨大な組織Alibabaグループの納金系列会社で、携帯のアップリAlipay Walletの８．２を経った２ヶ月前の更新を改めて更新します。新たなる更新はお客の日常向けの変換で、新たな面輪はこちら：

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Alipay Walletは8.2へのバージョン更新に際し、帳簿機能とボイスメッセージ機能を追加しました。

Alipayは中国eコマースにおける最大手Alibabaグループ内の決済業務を扱う関連会社で、携帯のアプリAlipay Walletについて、前回のバージョンリリースから2か月後に最新バージョンとなる8.2をローンチしました。今回の更新による機能追加は、よりユーザーの日常生活に踏み込んだものとなっており、新機能は下記のようなものである：