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When you receive an order from a customer, please report the customer information to TC and obtain a TC approval, before making an order to the US.
The report and approval are done through J's intranet.
You should contact at TC by inputting the information onto the exclusive Excel sheet on the intranet.
Please report to TC by the end of each month by filling out the payment price items in the Excel sheet which are used in 1.

At this moment, the form of transaction for the orders done at G is obvious and the import invoices are made from all the exclusive tools of TC. In this case, the import invoices are revised at TC.

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When you receive an order from a customer, please report the customer information to TC and obtain a TC approval, before placing the order to the US.
The report and approval are done through J's intranet.
You should contact TC by inputting the information onto the exclusive Excel sheet on the intranet.
Please report to TC by the end of each month by filling out the payment price items in the Excel sheet which is used in 1.

At this moment, the form of transaction for the orders done at G [?] is obvious [Word choice] and the import invoices are made from all the exclusive TC tools. In this case, the import invoices are reviewed at TC.

元の翻訳
They arranged my hair simply and put 3 hair accessories on my hair! After putting Kimono on, it's time for a photo shoot! I was so excited about being shot and making many poses in Asakusa! Please have a look at pictures I attached! We had free time until 5 so had a stroll in Asakusa. However, tourists looked at us, they wanted take our pictures like paparazzi, so we were in many pictures with people from many countries for their souvenirs.
It was the best experience ever. I would love to do it with my friends again! You should try it at least once, as it is a rare opportunity to take pictures of you wearing Kimono at this price!

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They arranged my hair simply and put 3 hair accessories on my hair! After putting Kimono on, it's time for a photo shoot! I was so excited about being shot and making many poses in Asakusa! Please have a look at pictures I attached! We had free time until 5 so we had a stroll in Asakusa. However, tourists looked at us, they wanted take our pictures like paparazzi, so we were in many pictures with people from many countries for their souvenirs.
It was the best experience ever. I would love to do it with my friends again! You should try it at least once, as it is a rare opportunity to take pictures of you wearing Kimono at this price!

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It was raining, windy and cold, we got on a bus but were told the aerial tram may be cancelled. However, as soon as the bus arrived, it stopped raining, so the aerial tram departed (it seemed to be a special service). On the way to the top, it was exciting when we changed to a cable car. Although It was so windy and I felt I would be blown away, I enjoyed the view with about 120 degree which was bright like the day time. I liked it.

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It was raining, windy and cold, we got on a bus because we were told the aerial tram may be cancelled. However, as soon as the bus arrived, it stopped raining, so the aerial tram departed right away (it seemed to be a temporary operation). On the way up to the mountain top, it was powerful and exciting that we changed to a cable car. Although It was so windy and I felt I would be blown away, I enjoyed about the 120-degree view that was bright like the daylight. I liked it.

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荷物は発送されました。DHLが追跡番号をメールであなたに送っているはずです。既にsupport@dares.jpのアドレス宛に受け取りましたか？

このメールアドレスを確認してください。このアドレスに送るようにしてあります。もしDHLにメールアドレスを送らなくてはいけない場合、お知らせください。

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荷物は発送しました。DHLが追跡番号をメールであなたに送っているはずです。既にsupport@dares.jpのアドレスから受け取りましたか？

このメールアドレスを確認してください。そこに送るのにこのアドレスを使っています。この件でもしDHLにメールアドレスを送らなくてはいけない場合、お知らせください。

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A big typhoon is coming closer to Japan. In Hiroshima, it will be in this evening when the typhoon gets closer.
I think it would be fine for your flight on the 15th as the typhoon will be away from Japan.

When you arrive in Japan and figure out the cell number, please give me a mail.
Miss. S, a woman in charge of translation, will call you. Then, please discuss about your schedule on the 18th and the 19th.

Psychederhythm is situated in Ebisu. They are very happy to have us there.

It is a long trip for you, but we hope you have a safe trip.

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A big typhoon is coming closer to Japan. In Hiroshima, it will be in this evening when the typhoon gets closer.
I think it would be fine for your flight on the 15th as the typhoon will be away from Japan.

When you arrive in Japan and figure out the cell number, please give me a e-mail.
Miss. S, a woman in charge of interpretation, will call you. Then, please discuss about your schedule on the 18th and the 19th.

Psychederhythm is situated in Ebisu. They are very happy to have us there.

It is a long trip for you, but we hope you have a safe trip.

元の翻訳
心配することは何もないですよ。あなたのメールアドレスを送ってくれれば、写真と商品の箱を送りますよ。ご存じのとおり私たちはアウトレット店で、会社から見切り品を買っています。メールアドレスを送ってくれれば、在庫品をお見せできますし、スカイプで話すことも可能です。あなたが私に送ってくれたリンクは、私がイーベイでたくさん売ってる時計と全く一緒のもののリンクです。そしてショッピングセンターで売るために購入するお客さんがたくさんいます。
ご希望なら、ペイパルで支払でもいいし、希望する方法でいいです。海外からのお客さんとの関係は壊したくないのです。ご希望であれば、サンプルを送ることもできますし、そうすれば、商品が１００％本物であるとわかっていただけると思います。

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心配することは何もないですよ。あなたのメールアドレスを送ってくれれば、写真と商品の箱をお送りします（よ）。ご覧のとおり［orおわかりのように］、私たち［or弊社］はアウトレット店（なの）で、企業から見切り品を購入しています。メールアドレスをお送りいただければ、在庫品をお見せします［orご案内いたします］し、スカイプを利用されていらっしゃるなら、直接お話しすることも可能です。なお、あなたが私に送ってくれたリンクが、私がeBay上で取り扱い、ショッピングセンターで販売するために購入していくバイヤーに対して多数販売している時計と全く同じ商品のリンク先［or（ウェブ）ページ］であることに間違いありません。
ご希望であれば、ペイパルの決済でも、保険でカバーされる方法［orあなたが保険に加入している方法］ならどちらでも結構です。海外のバイヤー（の方）との関係を壊したくはありません。ご希望であれば、サンプルをお送りいたしますので、（そうすれば、）商品が１００％本物である［orオリジナル商品である］ということをお分かりいただけると思います。

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If you will sign a contract with another Japanese company, please let me know.
I have to stop immediately the article appeared on magazine and the press release.
However, please not that the article appreared on the magazine on October 15 won't be able to stop.
Our company, as a distributor, will deal with the article appeared on the magazines on October 15.
If you would also like us to stop the press release and the article appeared on the magazine, please contact us.
If you are still in the process of consulting with the other Japanese companies and think our company can still work for you, we would like to keep our research and sales activities in the current way.

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If you sign a contract with another Japanese company, please let me know.
I have to stop immediately the article to be appeared in [article missing] magazine and the press release.
However, please not [verb missing] that the article appreared [tense confusion] [spelling] on the magazine on October 15 won't be able to stop.
Our company, as a distributor, will deal with the article to be appeared in the magazines [singular vs. plural] on October 15 [awkward].
If you would also like us to stop the press release and the article in the magazine, please contact us.
If you are still in the process of consulting with other Japanese companies and think our company can still work for you, we would like to keep our research and sales activities in the current way.

元の翻訳
To solve the problem mentioned above, we will make our shipment system back to the one before, and will extract the customers' addresses by each customer on Amazon.
By doing so, the undelivered product rate will improve dramatically and the Order Defect Rate will go down below 1% which is our target.
At the same time, we will add the explanations mentioned below and help understand the package is sent by an international shipment.

If you think about anything that we should include into our reform measures, please let us know.
Also, would you be able to reactivate our Amazon account accordingly?

Thank you for your cooperation.

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To solve the problem mentioned above, we will make our shipment system back to the one before, and will extract the customers' addresses by each customer on Amazon.
By doing so, the undelivered product rate will improve dramatically and the Order Defect Rate will go down below 1%, which is our target.
At the same time, we will add the explanations mentioned below and help understand the package is sent by an international shipment.

If you think of anything that we should include in our reform measures, please let us know.
Also, would you be able to reactivate our Amazon account accordingly?

Thank you for your cooperation.

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I would like to split the package (Package ID：00-682-3193) and try to do this procedure online, but I have received an e-mail to notify that it's impossible.
What is the problem here?
If I can't spilt the package, could you please tell me the reasons for that?
If it's possible, please go through the procedure for me immediately.
I don't mind paying $15 for the designated fee.

Please make some arrangements as soon as possible.

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I would like to split the package (Package ID：00-682-3193) and try to do this procedure online, but I have received an e-mail notifying me that it's impossible.
What is the problem here?
If I can't spilt the package, could you please tell me the reasons for that?
If it's possible, please go through the procedure for me immediately.
I don't mind paying $15 for the designated fee.

Please make the arrangements as soon as possible.

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Would you be able to give me the big date of 4 main images which scroll down on the home page of the website (if you have an original date before edited) , the picture and the logo date which is shown on the picture (i.e. Supreme Attention TO DETAIL).

Thank you for your cooperation.

Would you mind if we put the picture of Kane family on the Japanese site as producers of the video?

It will be the one at the kick starter, though.

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Would you be able to give me the big [word choice] date [spelling] of 4 main images which scroll down on the home page of the website (if you have an original date [spelling] before edited) , the picture and the logo date [spelling] which is shown on the picture (i.e. Supreme Attention TO DETAIL etc.).

Thank you for your cooperation.

Would you mind if we put the 白黒 picture of the Kane family on the Japanese site as producers of the video?

It will be [tense] the one at Kickstarter, though.

元の翻訳
様へ
このようなトラブルが発生して申し訳ありません。あなた様がその商品を受け取り、私から何かしらの賠償をするということでいかがでしょうか？商品は既に最低価格で、私のほうにはほとんど利益がありません。近頃は送料も高く、私のビジネスにとっても厳しいことを理解していただけると幸いです。

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様へ
このようなトラブルが発生して申し訳ありません。あなた様がその商品をそのままお持ちになり、私から何かしらの補償をするということでいかがでしょうか？商品は既に最低価格で、私のほうにはほとんど利益がありません。近頃は送料も高く、私のビジネスにとっても厳しいことを理解していただけると幸いです。

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I am very sorry to hear that the item you received is broken.
I will stock the same item soon. it would be great if you could wait for it.
I will send it to you as soon as I receive it.

Would you be able to go to a near-by post office with the item which is broken, and fill out a damage report?
After filling it out, could you send me the receipt number and the scanned document?
By you doing so, It allows us to proceed the procedure quickly to claim the insurance with the Japan Post Office.

Thank you for your cooperation.

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I am very sorry to hear that the item you received is broken.
I will stock the same item soon. it would be great if you could wait for it.
I will send it to you as soon as I receive it.

Could you please go to a near-by post office with the item which is broken, and fill out a damage report?
After filling it out, could you send me the receipt number and the scanned document?
By you doing so, It allows us to proceed the procedure quickly to claim the insurance with Japan Post.

Thank you for your cooperation.

元の翻訳
私共のアカウント部門よりお知らせです。あなた様の未払い残高は明日支払いがされます。

もし数日以内にあなた様のアカウントで何も確認できない場合は、ご連絡ください。

そして、今回ご迷惑をおかけしたこと、大変申し訳ありませんでした。あなた様から最初にお問い合わせをいただいたときに解決できず大変申し訳ありません。対応が遅れた理由は、アカウント部門で大きな人事異動があったことです。数人の人が去り、新しいメンバーが働いている状態です。

辛抱強くお待ちいただきありがとうございます。このようなことが２度と起こらないよう、最大限の努力をいたします。

よろしくお願いいたします。

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私共のアカウント部門(会計課）よりお知らせです。あなた様の未払い残高は明日支払いがされます。

もし数日以内にあなた様のアカウント(口座）で何も確認できない場合は、ご連絡ください。

そして、今回ご迷惑をおかけしたこと、大変申し訳ありませんでした。あなた様から最初にお問い合わせをいただいたときに解決できず大変申し訳ありません。対応が遅れた理由は、アカウント部門(会計課）で大きな人事異動があったことです。数人の人が去り、新しいメンバーが働いている状態です。

辛抱強くお待ちいただきありがとうございます。このようなことが２度と起こらないよう、最大限の努力をいたします。

よろしくお願いいたします。

元の翻訳
私共のアカウント部門よりお知らせです。あなた様の未払い残高は明日支払いがされます。

もし数日以内にあなた様のアカウントで何も確認できない場合は、ご連絡ください。

そして、今回ご迷惑をおかけしたこと、大変申し訳ありませんでした。あなた様から最初にお問い合わせをいただいたときに解決できず大変申し訳ありません。対応が遅れた理由は、アカウント部門で大きな人事異動があったことです。数人の人が去り、新しいメンバーが働いている状態です。

辛抱強くお待ちいただきありがとうございます。このようなことが２度と起こらないよう、最大限の努力をいたします。

よろしくお願いいたします。

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私共の会計部門よりお知らせです。あなた様の未払い残高は明日支払いがされます。

もし数日以内にあなた様のアカウントで何も確認できない場合は、ご連絡ください。

そして、今回ご迷惑をおかけしたこと、大変申し訳ありませんでした。あなた様から最初にお問い合わせをいただいたときに解決できず大変申し訳ありません。対応が遅れた理由は、会計部門で大きな人事異動があったことです。数人の人が去り、新しいメンバーが働いている状態です。

辛抱強くお待ちいただきありがとうございます。このようなことが２度と起こらないよう、最大限の努力をいたします。

よろしくお願いいたします。

元の翻訳
We would like to buy directly from you, not through eBay.
We are happy to hear that you can buy directly from the manufacture.

Would you be able to sell us this product at a whole sale price?

We are interested in other products you sell.
We would like you to sell them at whole sale prices.

Would you be able to buy from other manufactures, such as XX or XX?
Could you buy these products below?

We would like to build a long-term business relationship with you.
Do you have an online shop?
If so, please let us know.

Thank you for your cooperation.

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We would like to buy directly from you, not through eBay.
We are happy to hear that you can buy directly from the manufacturer.

Would you be able to sell us this product at a wholesale price?

We are interested in other products you sell.
We would like you to sell them at wholesale prices.

Would you be able to buy from other manufacturers, such as XX or XX?
Could you buy these products below?

We would like to build a long-term business relationship with you.
Do you have an online shop?
If so, please let us know.

Thank you for your cooperation.