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備考: 体験談

日本語

雨が降り、風邪が吹き，寒く、ロープウエイが停まるかも知れないという事で発車したバスに乗車。ところがバスが着いたとたんに雨がやみ、すぐ着発（臨時という事らしい）で山頂へ途中ケーブルカーに乗り換えが迫力あり。風が強く吹き飛ばされそうな感じでしたが１２０度程度の視界は真昼のように感じられる明かり。良かったよ。

英語

It was raining, windy and cold, we got on a bus but were told the aerial tram may be cancelled. However, as soon as the bus arrived, it stopped raining, so the aerial tram departed (it seemed to be a special service). On the way to the top, it was exciting when we changed to a cable car. Although It was so windy and I felt I would be blown away, I enjoyed the view with about 120 degree which was bright like the day time. I liked it.

レビュー ( 1 )

tearzはこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2014/10/18 12:36:27

元の翻訳
It was raining, windy and cold, we got on a bus but were told the aerial tram may be cancelled. However, as soon as the bus arrived, it stopped raining, so the aerial tram departed (it seemed to be a special service). On the way to the top, it was exciting when we changed to a cable car. Although It was so windy and I felt I would be blown away, I enjoyed the view with about 120 degree which was bright like the day time. I liked it.

修正後
It was raining, windy and cold, we got on a bus because we were told the aerial tram may be cancelled. However, as soon as the bus arrived, it stopped raining, so the aerial tram departed right away (it seemed to be a temporary operation). On the way up to the mountain top, it was powerful and exciting that we changed to a cable car. Although It was so windy and I felt I would be blown away, I enjoyed about the 120-degree view that was bright like the daylight. I liked it.

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