Tearz (tearz) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
It is way too straight forward, and wish it was put more in a native English expressions. This translation is far from acceptance."

Well then, from next time by offering a hearing session ahead of time and actively improving the item by proposing like "This line needs to stand out so instead of the direct translation we could come up with an alternate catch copy!", or "How about incorporating rewriting work for the better-to-read English?"

These are important feesbacks, but turning these claims into opporutunities is what the sales rep can do who receive those claims from the customers for real.

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This was what the customer said: "It is way too literal. I wish it was translated more naturally. This translation is far from acceptance."

From here on, conduct a consultation with the customer beforehand with statements to gradually improve your product such as: "This line needs to stand out so instead of a literal translation, we could come up with an alternate catch copy!" or "How about incorporating a rewriting project to make it easier to read?"

This is an important feedback. However, turning these claims into opportunities is the job of a sales rep who receive claims from directly speaking with the customers.

元の翻訳
How do you do?

This is A, a Japanese seller with annual revenue of JPY 500 million at Amazon US.

Congratulations for your holding the event this time. I bet you are in the midst of the busyness.

In fact, only today have I found out about this event. I really wanted to participate, but I could not make my schedule available for next week.

Nevertheless, I understand this event is going to be a very valuable one for the sellers. Hence I was wondering if there is anyway I could purchase the text, which is going to be distributed to the participants with pay since I am not unable to make it?

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How do you do?

This is A, a Japanese seller with annual revenue of JPY 500 million at Amazon US.

Congratulations for your holding the event this time. I bet you are in the midst of the busyness.

In fact, only today have I found out about this event. I really wanted to participate, but I could not make my schedule available for next week.

Nevertheless, I understand this event is going to be a very valuable one for the sellers. Hence I was wondering if there is anyway I could purchase the text, which is going to be distributed to the participants, with pay since I am unable to make it?

元の翻訳
How do you do? I am Yamada and have purchased your A in the past.
I am planning to sell A at our webstore in Japan.
I was wondering if you could sell them to me at the wholesale price? Kindly advice the minimum lot number for order.
Also, if you happen to know any retailers that sells the main part of the item for less, would you please provide the information?
Your reply would be appreciated. Thank and best regards.

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How do you do? I am Yamada and have purchased your A in the past.
I am planning to sell A at our webstore in Japan.
If you could sell them to me at the wholesale price? Advice the minimum lot number for order.
Also, if you happen to know any retailers that sell the main part of the item for less, would you please provide the information?
Your reply would be appreciated. Thank and best regards.

元の翻訳
Hello,
Thank you for your contact.
I am sorry to bother you, but could you please return the item to me?
I will issue you a refund for the return shipment upon receipt of the item.

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Hello,
Thank you for your contact.
I am sorry to bother you, but could you please return the item to me?
I will remit you a refund for the returned one upon receipt of it.↵
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The following is the address to which the item will be returned.

元の翻訳
Your item has been shipped via USPS.
Please replace the items accordingly.

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Your item has been shipped via USPS.
Please replace the item with the former one accordingly.