Larry Huang (guaiyetta) — もらったレビュー

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■TOKYO DESIGNERS WEEK
October 25th, 2014 (Saturday) ~ November 3rd, 2014 (holiday/Monday)
Venue: Tokyo Aoyama, front of Jingu Gaien Picture Gallery

More information in TDW official website: http://www.tdwa.com/

Listen:

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■TOKYO DESIGNERS WEEK
October 25th, 2014 (Saturday) ~ November 3rd, 2014 (holiday/Monday)
Venue: Tokyo Aoyama, at the front of Jingu Gaien Picture Gallery

For the details, please check at TDW official website: http://www.tdwa.com/

Trial listening:

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Boy: "Do you like dancing?"
Muratomi: "Dance? Is it like bonodori?"
Boy: "No!! I mean break dance!!!"

I was super sleepy but I was shocked when I heard the phrase "break dance".
Then I answered immediately: "I like break dance!! I want to have a try!!"

In a way like that, Muratomi started his survival game.

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Boy: "Do you like dancing?"
Muratomi: "Dance? Is it like bonodori?"
Boy: "No!! I mean breakdance!!!"

I was super sleepy but I was shocked when I heard the phrase "breakdance".
Then I answered immediately: "I like breakdance!! I want to have a try!!"

In a way like that, Muratomi started his survival game.

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Sendai Zebio Arena

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Zebio Arena, Sendai

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Hiroshima green arena

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Hiroshima Green Arena

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Tokyo Japan Budokan

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Nippon Budokan, Tokyo

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URATA NAOYA「Still Remember/Love Is Blind」 music card already start to sell in UN SHOP!

URATA NAOYA「Still Remember/Love Is Blind」 music card already start to sell in UN SHOP!

「AAA ARENA TOUR 2014 -Gold Symphony-」is being limited sell at the venue.

URATA NAOYA「Still Remember/Love Is Blind」music card.

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URATA NAOYA「Still Remember/Love Is Blind」 music card already start to sell in UN SHOP!

URATA NAOYA「Still Remember/Love Is Blind」 music card already start [tense, s-v agreement] to sell in UN SHOP!

「AAA ARENA TOUR 2014 -Gold Symphony-」is being limited sell [tense, parts of speech confusion] at the venue.

URATA NAOYA「Still Remember/Love Is Blind」music card.

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Already start to sell in UN SHOP!

Click here to purchase↓

★Picture A
http://shop.mu-mo.net/a/item1/?jsiteid=UNSH&seq_exhibit_id=125562

★Picture B
http://shop.mu-mo.net/a/item1/?jsiteid=UNSH&seq_exhibit_id=125563&categ_id=6758

URATA NAOYA (AAA)
「Still Remember / Love Is Blind」

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Sale in UN SHOP have started!

Click here to purchase↓

★Picture A
http://shop.mu-mo.net/a/item1/?jsiteid=UNSH&seq_exhibit_id=125562

★Picture B
http://shop.mu-mo.net/a/item1/?jsiteid=UNSH&seq_exhibit_id=125563&categ_id=6758

URATA NAOYA (AAA)
「Still Remember / Love Is Blind」

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We sell product for both ladies and men.
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Nowadays, could I try to sell without stock and order from your shop if the product can be sold?
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How do you think about it?
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When I figure out what kind of product sells well, I will have it in stock afterwards.
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I already checked your website.
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Does the website contain all the products able to sell at present?
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Please send me the list or catalog of the all the selling products if there is one.
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It will be a good reference when opening a shop in Japan.
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It's important that you can provide me a stable product supply as I want to purchase from your shop continuously.
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Also could you please offer me a discount rather than the standard pricing?

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We sell products for both ladies and men.
Nowadays [usage], could we try to sell without stock and order from your shop if products sell?
What do you think about it?
When we figure out what kinds of product sell well, we will have them in stock afterwards.
I have already checked your website.
Does it contain all the products available at present?
Please send us the list or catalog of the all the products if there is one.
It will be a good reference when we open a shop in Japan.
It's important that you can provide us a stable product supply as we want to purchase from your shop continuously.
Also could you please offer us a discount rather than the standard pricing?

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As for the product, it took some time in Nagoya Port and finally arrived yesterday.

Although it's in the middle of the inspection, we have checked some of the products.
Even though there are still a little problems, we think the quality has quite a lot improvement.
We appreciate for your hard work.
As the inspection is not over, we will contact you after that.

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As for the product, it took some time in Nagoya Port but has finally arrived yesterday.

Although it's in the middle of inspection, we have checked some of the products.
Even though there are still a little problems, we think the quality has improved quite a lot.
We appreciate your hard work.
As the inspection is not over yet, we will contact you after that.

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Thank you for your purchase.
We don't know how much customs duty your country will charge if we delivery the product from Japan.
Also it is impossible to prepay the tax in Japan.
Therefore, we will refund the extra tax you paid.
Could you please send me a image of the receipt?
Instead, please delete the negative comment you wrote.
The refund from Amazon is under processing now.
Thank you for your cooperation.

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Thank you for your purchase.
We don't know how much customs duty your country will charge if we delivery the product from Japan.
Also it is impossible to prepay the tax in Japan.
Therefore, we refund all customers the tax you paid additionally.
Could you please send me an image of the receipt?
Instead, please delete the negative comment you wrote.
The refund will be processing from Amazon right now.
Thank you for your cooperation.

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・Purchase directly by PayPal
・Unit amount: 50
・Price: 72 dollars

Is the information enough as above?
Please let us know how long the payment period is.

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・Purchase directly via PayPal
・Lot amount: 50 pcs
・Price: 72 dollars

Do the above condictions suffice the requirement?
Please let us know how much time you need for the leadtime.

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・Purchase directly by PayPal
・Unit amount: 50
・Price: 72 dollars

Is the information enough as above?
Please let us know how long the payment period is.

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・Purchase directly via PayPal
・Lot amount: 50
・Price: 72 dollars

Is the information above enough [word choice]?
Please let us know how long the payment period [納期] is.

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I want to inform you below items about my purchase which will be sent today.
If the delivery driver need to make a call before he delivery the goods, please tell him to call the below phone number instead of the one I wrote in the order. Thank you.
I will be able to receive the delivery from 9am to 5am in weekdays. If the delivery time is within that time period, a phone call before is considered unnecessary.
Thank you for the arrangement.

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I want to inform you below items about my purchase which will be sent today.
If the delivery driver need to make a call before he delivers the goods, please tell him to call the below phone number instead of the one I wrote in the order. Thank you.
I will be able to receive the delivery from 9am to 5am on weekdays. If the delivery time is within that time period, a phone call before is considered unnecessary.
Thank you for the arrangement.

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I checked and found that it was able to play the Vevo video in my own website. (Even though I was using old version script.)↵
Will error occur causing by country? It will be better if the videos of Vevo can be played successfully.

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I checked it ony my side and found that I didn't have any problems with playing Vevo videos on my own website. (Even though I was using an old version of the script.) It's possible the error doesn't happen in some countries. It will be better if it was possible to play the Vevo videos.

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I checked and found that it was able to play the Vevo video in my own website. (Even though I was using old version script.)
Will error occur causing by country? It will be better if the videos of Vevo can be played successfully.

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I checked and found that I was able to play the Vevo video on my own website (though I use an old version script).
Wouldn't an error occur depends on countries? It will be better if the videos of Vevo can be played successfully, right?

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Thank you for your contact.

I have to take a flight at 18:00 on November 11(Friday) to Heathrow.
It will be glad if we could have a meeting at 13:00.
Please let me know your schedule about that.

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Thank you for your contact.

I have to take a flight at 18:00 on November 11(Friday) to Heathrow [mistranslation].
It [wrong subject] would be glad if we could have a meeting at 13:00.
Please let me know your schedule.

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Thank you for your reply.
I appreciate your arrangement.

However, your recommended price is higher than purchasing via eBay.
We are looking forward to build a long-term cooperation with you so could you please offer a discount?

Thank you so much.

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Thank you for your reply.
I appreciate your arrangement [usage].

However, your recommended [usage] price is higher than purchasing [not parallel] via eBay.
We are looking forward to building a long-term cooperation [word choice] with you so could you please offer me a 思い切った discount?

Thank you so much.

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申し訳ございません。

私のメールプログラムに例のメッセージは受信していません。

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すみません。

私のメールソフトにそのメッセージは受信していません。

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#myus

There are some questions about True Price.

It is right that the width, length, height of True Price are 108 inch and the expense of one box order will be counted by the actual weight?

Also, in the case more than one box, except the object of True Price it will be a 25% more expense charge, it is correct?

For example, it would be several boxes when all the products are shipping together, if only the True Price product, could it be shipped separate into one box a time and then one by one?

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#myus

There are some questions about True Price.

It is right that the width, length, height of True Price must be on or below 108 inch in total and packed in 1 box for its shipment to be determined by weight?

Also, in the case more than one box, except the object of True Price it will be a 25% more expense charge, it is correct?

For example, it would be several boxes when all the products are shipping together, if only the True Price product, could it be shipped separate into one box a time and then one by one?

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Thanks for your message.

I didn't know that your country has a friend relationship with Japan before.
I used to go fishing as well but the place I live now is not near a sea or pool so that I don't fish a lot.
However when my holiday comes I will go fishing during a whole day. I usually fish black bass.

I am sure that the sea in your place is beautiful and the fish are pretty.
Please enjoy fishing in Tenryu as the place you mentioned before in the message.

Hope you get there and have great fun.

Thank you.

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Thanks for your message.

I didn't know that your country has a friend relationship with Japan before.
I used to go fishing as well but the place I live now is not near a sea or pool so that I don't fish a lot.
However when my holiday comes I will go fishing during a whole day. I usually fish black bass.

I am sure that the sea in your place is beautiful and the fish are pretty.
Please enjoy fishing with Tenryu as the place you mentioned before in the message.

Hope it will be with you soon and have great fun.

Thank you.