Hitomi Gruenberg (h-gruenberg) — もらったレビュー

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You can return the merchandise even you don't like the color. Please note that the shipping cost for the return will be customer's responsible. There will be no any other cost other than that once you send us back the merchandise with all the accessories. Please also be informed that we might charge you if there are any missing parts, scratches or in case of clear sign of usage on the return item.

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You can return the merchandise even if you don't like the color etc. Please note that the customer will be responsible for the return shipping cost. There will be no any other cost other than that once you send us back the merchandise with all the accessories. Please also be informed that we might charge you if there are any missing parts, scratches or in case of clear sign of usage on the return item.

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This user got in trouble before because he posted the stolen script.
Of course the item got canceled.
Icons and fonts have copyright, you know.
Even kids know those stuffs.
You stole all kind of stuff besides icons and fonts as well.
You are a thief.
There are so many bugs when I look at the preview though.
It’s not few, I believe this author’s skill is not enough to fix the bug problem.

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This user got in trouble before because he posted another stolen script.
Of course the listed item got canceled.
Icons and fonts have copyright, you know.
Even kids know those stuff.
You stole other kinds of stuff besides icons and fonts as well.
You are a thief.
There are so many bugs when I look at the preview though.
It’s not just a few, I believe this author’s skill is not good enough to fix them.

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Thank you for your reply.
So, please cancel the order since I will return the item.
I'll let you know the tracking number later.

I'd like you to ship out since I want to return this item.
Please pack nicely with care and let me know the tracking number when you ship out.

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Thank you for your reply.
So, please cancel the order since I will return the item.
I'll let you know the tracking number later.

I'd like you to ship out the replacement since I want to return this item.
Please pack it nicely with care and let me know the tracking number when you ship out.

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Thank you for your reply.
So, please cancel the order since I will return the item.
I'll let you know the tracking number later.

I'd like you to ship out since I want to return this item.
Please pack nicely with care and let me know the tracking number when you ship out.

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Thank you for your reply.
So, please cancel the order since I will return the item.
I'll let you know the tracking number later.

I'd like you to ship the item since I want to return it.
Please pack carefully and let me know the tracking number after shipment.

元の翻訳
Thank you for the message.
Isn't it arrived yet since we've already shipped the merchandise out.
We will check it as well.
We will refund your payment if it's not arrived.

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Thank you for the message.
Isn't it arrived yet since we've already shipped the merchandise out.
We will check it as well.
We will refund your payment if it's not arrived.↵
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Haven't it arrived yet since we've already shipped the merchandise out.↵
We will refund your payment if it doesn't arrive.

元の翻訳
もし Sony BCTRVトラベルチャージャーをそのままお使いになるようでしたら、それぞれの商品に対しまして、15%づつ値引きさせていただきます。15%の値引きでご賛同いただけるようでしたら、その旨ご連絡くださいませ。すぐにお客様のクレジットに戻します。

もしこの内容にご不満でしたら当店の方にご返品くださいませ。全額返金いたします。

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もし Sony BCTRVトラベルチャージャー（黒）をそのままお使いになるようでしたら、それぞれの商品に対しまして、15%づつ値引きさせていただきます。15%の値引きでご賛同いただけるようでしたら、その旨ご連絡くださいませ。すぐにお客様のクレジットに戻します。

もしこの内容にご不満でしたら当店の方にご返品くださいませ。全額返金いたします。

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(mu-mo)

When you download earthier a song, truetone full version (R) or truetone(R) of “Cross-Movie (Ghost Stories in School- a cursed spirit of language)- Ver.” and enter, you might win a poster with autograph(B2 size) at Mu-mo.(total 5 people)

*picture of the poster will be “Cross-Movie (Ghost Stories in School- a cursed spirit of language)- Ver.”
Application period: 5/21st (Wed) to 5/27th (Tsu)
http://q.mu-mo.net/tgs_apf/

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(mu-mo)

When you download either the single, truetone full version (R) or truetone(R) of “Cross-Movie (Ghost Stories in School- a cursed spirit of language)- Ver.” and enter, you might win an autographed poster (B2 size) at Mu-mo.(total 5 people)

*picture of the poster will be “Cross-Movie (Ghost Stories in School- a cursed spirit of language)- Ver.”
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Application period: 5/21st (Wed) to 5/27th (Tues)
http://q.mu-mo.net/tgs_apf/

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Don’t you wanna have dangerous and thrilling affair with good-looking guys?

Is the person who you’ll fall in love a butler or your boss?
◆story◆
One day, you (who are ordinary citizen) will turn into celebrity all of the sudden.
You’ll fall in love with the guys like a butler and your boss after they keep hitting on you.
◆how to play◆
This app. is love drama app. which you are desired by all the good-looking guys and you’ll find the very special one for you then you’ll grow love with him.
◆dramatic image◆
There are so many images that heat the story up.

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Don’t you want to have dangerous and thrilling affairs with good-looking guys?

Is the person who you’ll fall in love with a butler or your boss?
◆Story◆
One day, you (who are an ordinary citizen) will turn into a celebrity all of the sudden.
You’ll fall in love with guys like a butler and your boss after they keep hitting on you.
◆How to play◆
This app is a love drama app in which you are desired by all the good-looking guys and you’ll find the very special one for you then you’ll grow love with him.
◆Dramatic image◆
There are so many images that heat the story up.

元の翻訳
・Install film pack correctly.
・Pull the tab straight out.

・make sure the temperature when you are proceeding.
・please follow the time about when you can strip negative part from positive part listed chart below.
You can get the best result when it's 25℃.
・For the best result, we recommend to keep it in warmer if the room temperature is below 15℃.

・We included the file regarding of temperature for procedure guide.

・don't use the film if you drop it.
・please keep your developing roller clean always.
・be careful for color temperature of light sauce.
・correct reflected color
・keep all the films cooler place below 10℃.

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・Install the film pack correctly.
・Pull the tab straight out.

・make sure the temperature when you are proceeding.
・please follow the time about when you can strip negative part from positive part listed chart below.
You can get the best result when it's 25℃.
・For the best result, we recommend to keep it in warmer if the room temperature is below 15℃.

・We included the file regarding of temperature for procedure guide.

・don't use the film if you drop it.
・please keep your developing roller clean always.
・be careful for color temperature of light sauce.
・correct reflected color
・keep all the films cooler place below 10℃.

元の翻訳
It's a musician group consists with 8 guys who are all taller than 180cm.
SOLIDEMO is a made-up word combined SOLID(cool) and EMO(emotional =sissy) togather means coolest sissy guys.
They are named SOLIDEMO because they possess cool dignity side, but on the other hand, sometime show emotional side by singing sissy love song.

They did major devue with a single "THE ONE" on Apr. 16th 2014 to conquer our goal "Made in Japan Artest will be active in all over Asia".

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It's a musician group consisting of 8 guys who are all taller than 180cm.
SOLIDEMO is a made-up word combining SOLID(cool) with EMO(emotional =sissy) together, which means "coolest sissy guys."
They are named SOLIDEMO because they possess not only cool dignity side, but also shows emotional side sometimes by singing sissy love song.

They did major debut with a single "THE ONE" on Apr. 16th 2014 to achieve our goal "Made in Japan Artists will be active in all over Asia".

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Eメールをありがとうございます。ブラケットが当方のファシリティに届かず、保険もかけていなかったのでクレームを上げることも出来きず、MyUSのアカウントをキャンセルしたいとのこと大変残念です。何か当店の方でお客様のお気持ちを変えることが出来ることがありますでしょうか？サービスの向上と将来のあなたのシッピングパートナーとなれるよう日々努力をしております。
ですのでどうか何か私どもに出来ることがありましたらどうか申してください。

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Eメールをありがとうございます。ブラケットが当方のファシリティに届かず、保険もかけていなかったのでクレームを上げることも出来きず、MyUSのアカウントをキャンセルしたいとのこと大変残念です。何か当店の方でお客様のお気持ちを変えることが出来ることがありますでしょうか？サービスの向上と将来のあなたのシッピングパートナーとなれるよう日々努力をしております。
ですのでどうか何か私どもに出来ることがありましたらどうかおっしゃって（申し出て）ください。

元の翻訳
日本におもちゃを送るため、ペイパルより請求書をそちらにお送りさせていただきました。また、請求書はEメールでもお送りしております。ebayに記載されていたそちらの発送先住所の変更ができませんでした。ebayのほうから私に送られてきた住所、ポートランド,オーランドの住所です。
下記が私がいただいた日本の発送先住所になります。：

ペイパルより直接、支払いのための請求書が送られてまいります。そちらで支払ってください。発送は『生産国へ返された中古おもちゃ』扱いにて日本に送ります。
こうすることで日本の税関で税金を支払わなくて済みます。今までその方法で送って税金を支払った人はおりません。

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日本におもちゃを送るため、ペイパルより請求書をそちらにお送りさせていただきました。また、請求書はEメールでもお送りしております。ebayに記載されていたそちらの発送先住所の変更ができませんでした。ebayのほうから私に送られてきた住所、オレゴン州ポートランドの住所です。
下記が私がいただいた日本の発送先住所になります。

ペイパルより直接、支払いのための請求書が送られてまいります。そちらで支払ってください。発送は『中古おもちゃを元の国へ返送』扱いにて日本に送ります。
こうすることで日本の税関で税金を支払わなくて済みます。今までその方法で送っておもちゃの税金を支払った人はおりません。

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fr5117

1ヶ月前そちらに戻った『バット・ケイヴ』の件で何度もご連絡を差し上げております。
税関で40ユーロを追加で支払うことを受け入れられませんでした。
払い戻しのことに関しまして、なんの情報もいただいておりませんが、いつ頃になりますでしょうか？↵
すぐにでもご連絡をいただけますでしょうか？
よろしくお願いします。

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fr5117

1ヶ月前そちらに返送された『バット・ケイヴ』の件で何度もご連絡を差し上げております。
税関に40ユーロを追加で支払うことを認めることができませんでした。
払い戻しのに関しまして、なんの情報もいただいておりませんが、いつ頃払い戻しの処理をしていただけるのかについて早急にご連絡をいただきたいと思っています。↵

よろしくお願いします。

元の翻訳
fr5117

1ヶ月前そちらに戻った『バット・ケイヴ』の件で何度もご連絡を差し上げております。
税関で40ユーロを追加で支払うことを受け入れられませんでした。
払い戻しのことに関しまして、なんの情報もいただいておりませんが、いつ頃になりますでしょうか？
すぐにでもご連絡をいただけますでしょうか？
よろしくお願いします。

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fr5117

1ヶ月前そちらに戻った『バット・ケイヴ』の件で何度もご連絡を差し上げております。
私が税関で40ユーロを追加で支払うことは認められません。
払い戻しのことに関しまして、なんの情報もいただいておりませんが、払い戻しはいつ頃になりますでしょうか？
すぐにでもご連絡をいただけますでしょうか？
よろしくお願いします。

元の翻訳
Restoration of rights

I'd like to make sales at B once again.
I'd resubmit my sales plan.
Would you please consider my offer?
I won't let you down ever so please give me one more chance.
I'll take care of any matters to death to be the best sales person from now on.

points of improvement
(improvement of performance decline)

*Rate of ineffective Orders
1) inventory control thoroughly
We will increase the number of people for inventory control from one to three to prevent from the situations that we can not ship out due to stock out.
We will perform inventory adjustment every day.

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Restoration of Rights

I'd like to have a permission to make a sale at B once again.
I'd resubmit my sales plan.
Would you please consider my offer?
I won't let you down ever so please give me one more chance.
I'll take care of any matters to death to be the best sales person from now on.

Points of Improvement
(Improving performance decline)

*Rate of Ineffective Orders
1) Thorough Inventory Control
We will increase the number of people for inventory control from one to three to prevent from a situation where we can not ship out due to stock out.
We will perform inventory adjustment every day.

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I have a couple questions and requests.

1. Once I open "menu" on my mobile it never closes. Is it supporsed to be this way?
2. Is there any function that I can post any comments from my mobile?
3. When I access from my mobile, does it change automatically to mubile version site?

1. Any function that we can choose if Admin pick display or pending any pictures or so that users posted.
2. I want to insert a title on the posted article on social media like twitter.
3. I want you to make ABC site link to an old article.
I don't think that is good when people touch the ABC link on the latest page, nothing happen.

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I have a couple of questions and requests.

1. Once I open "menu" on my mobile it never closes. Is this default?
2. Is there any function that I can post from my mobile?
3. When I access from my mobile, does its layout change automatically to mobile site's version?

1. Any function that we can choose if Admin pick display or pending any pictures or so that users posted.
2. I want to insert a title on the posted article on social media like twitter.
3. I want you to make ABC site link to an old article.
I don't think that is good when people touch the ABC link on the latest page, nothing happen.

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I have a request even though I know it might be hard for you to do so.

I'd like you to make "play video" on the first page for PC version.
I'm guessing you are not able to do so right now because the width of homepage is too narrow for that at this moment.
You might have to change the layout.
But there might be some people who say "don't change anything".

About "NextPost", I think it's better to link to an old posting page.
I concerned that it was very slow to start viewing GIF.
It's also better for viewers if they can see "Admin Panel".
I'd like to know that I can give people a permission to post comments.

Thank you!

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I have a request even though I know it might be hard for you to do so.

I'd like to be able to play videos from the PC version on the homepage.
I'm guessing you are not able to do so right now because the width of homepage is too narrow for that at this moment.
You might have to change the layout.
But there might be some people who say "don't change anything".

About the "NextPost" link, I think it's better if it links to old posts.
I'm also concerned that it takes a long time to load GIF images.
I would also like to see the Admin Panel.
I'd like to know that I can give people a permission to post comments.

Thank you!