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元の翻訳
I sent you the package from Japan by EMS on 20th of January. So the package must have been arrived to you by now.

The return fee costed me 2200 yen (16.43 Euro), so please send me the payment of return fee as well. The receipt of the return fee is attached to the item.

Please make the payment of both item and the return fee as soon as possible.

Best regards,

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I sent you the package from Japan by EMS on the 20th of January. So the package must have been delivered to you by now. (alternatively: must have arrived at your place by now.)

The return shipping cost me 2200 yen (16.43 Euro), so please send me the payment for the return shipping as well. The receipt of the return shipping is attached to the item.

Please make the payment for both item and the return shipping as soon as possible.

Best regards,

元の翻訳
I asked you to proofread a thesis in English a few days ago.
Regarding the magazine rejected, I received a comment from a reader and then
I added some corrections to the original one. May I ask you to proofread the corrected part again? I can pay you the additional fee. I would like you to work on it as soon as possible. I appreciate your cooperation.

I attached the one after you proofread a few days ago and the one that was corrected this time. The corrected part is written in red ink.

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I asked you to proofread [edit] an article[manuscript] in English a few days ago.
Regarding the journal that rejected the manuscript, I received comments from a reviewer so
I added some corrections to the original one. May I ask you to proofread the corrected part again? I would like you to work on it as soon as possible even if it costs additional fee. I appreciate your cooperation.

I attached the manuscript you edited last time and the one that I added corrections this time. The corrected part is shown in red.

元の翻訳
The Japanese Post told us that assurance is not applicable for this package, not even a single yen.
But, in Japan, it is easy to find a brand new hard case for around 200$ so if the price is less than 200$, it is okay for us to buy the hard case that you want for you. Could you send us a picture and the url of the case you want?
We are waiting for your reply.

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Japan Post told us that insurance is not applicable for this package, not even a single yen.
But, in Japan, you can buy a brand new hard case for around $200 so if the price is less than $200, we will purchase a hard case you want at our expense. Could you send us a picture and the url of the case you want?
We are waiting for your reply.

元の翻訳
We could not take only 1 page of the history by some cause. we "corrected" it.

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We could not take only 1 page of the history by some cause. we "corrected" it.

元の翻訳
OK I see. I will order as soon as it become available.
By the way, is AAA also unavailable now?
And, when will BBB offer for sale? Please let me know the time schedule.

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OK I see. I will order as soon as it becomes available.
By the way, is AAA also still unavailable?
And, when will BBB be offered for sale? Please let me know when it will go on sale.

元の翻訳
2週間前、ジャーナル・サイエンス誌に新しい研究が発表された。テレビ視聴と暴力の関係性についての新たな根拠を示すものだった。心理学者のG.Johnson氏と、その研究チームは、707 組の家族の子供たちを17年間も追ってきた。研究者たちは、1日１時間以上テレビを観る子供は、成長するにつれ、他の子供に対して、より攻撃的で暴力的な態度をとりやすくなることを突き止めた。Johnson氏によると、暴力的な番組を映すテレビと、子供の攻撃的な態度との因果関係は計り知れない程密接であることが判明した。

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2週間前、サイエンス誌に新しい研究が発表された。テレビ視聴と暴力の関係性についての新たな根拠を示すものだった。心理学者のJeffrey G. Johnson氏と、その研究チームは、707 組の家族の子供たちを17年間にわたって追跡してきた。研究者たちは、1日１時間以上テレビを観る子供は、成長するにつれ、他の子供よりも、より攻撃的で暴力的な態度をとりやすくなることを突き止めた。Johnson氏によると、暴力的な番組を映すテレビと、子供の攻撃的な態度との因果関係は計り知れない程密接であることが判明した。

元の翻訳
First of all, please kindly submit a damage report to the nearest postal office where the delivery was made.
There were no damages on the product when we inspected it during the time of the shipping.
If EMS can provide the compensation, then we will issue you a refund needed for the repair expenses.
We cannot refund $200 if there is compensation.

We want to resolve this problem as soon as possible.
Please kindly contact us once you have submitted the damage report.
We will immediately request for the insurance with the Japan post.

修正後
First of all, please kindly submit a damage report to the nearest post office that made the delivery.
There were no damages on the product when we inspected it at the time of the shipment.
If EMS can provide the compensation, then we will issue you a refund needed for the repair expenses.
We cannot refund $200 if there is no compensation.

We want to resolve this problem as soon as possible.
Please kindly contact us once you have submitted the damage report.
We will immediately file an insurance claim with Japan Post.

元の翻訳
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ご注文いただきありがとうございます。お客様に最高レベルのサービスを提供するために、お客様が弊社ウェブサイトにてご注文された商品について確認したいことがございます。今回お客様が使用されたクレジットカードで決済が正常に処理されませんでした。このメールを受信されましたら、早急にご連絡いただきますようお願いします。正しいカード番号を確認次第、迅速に配送致します。中部時間　午前９時～午後６時　月曜日～金曜日の時間帯に224-233-1259までお電話願います。

元の翻訳
しかし、実際のところカルナータカ州の州都であるバンガロールではモバイルインターネットは非常に遅く、3G接続さえ珍しい。

インド中央政府は、1000兆INR（15.7兆USドル）の甚大な予算を投資し「デジタルインディア」という大掛かりの企画を立ち上げた。インドの津々浦々で手頃な価格で高速インターネットを提供するのはその大きな約束だ。

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しかし、実際のところカルナータカ州の州都であるバンガロールでさえもモバイルインターネットは非常に遅く、3G接続さえ珍しい。

（meanwhile:その一方で）インド中央政府は、1兆INR（157億米ドル）の甚大な予算を投資し「デジタルインディア」という大掛かりな企画を立ち上げた。インドの津々浦々で手頃な価格で高速インターネットを提供するのはその大きな約束だ。

元の翻訳
本日ご確認させていただいたところ、商品は今ドイツ関税にありますので、もうすぐお届きになると思います。
またお知らせ致します。

修正後
本日ご確認させていただいたところ、商品は今ドイツ税関にありますので、もうすぐ届くと思います。
またお知らせ致します。

元の翻訳
Silicone has a broad range of uses and is used for various purposes ranging from grease/oil to cosmetic products. Organic silicone involves less volatilization of low-molecule siloxane in its operating environment and forms acidic silicone on the contact surface of the switch. In order to make this acidic silicone a non-conductor of electricity for the switch, limitations are placed on the product composition of switches as well as the manufacturing process.

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Silicone has a broad range of uses and is used for various purposes ranging from grease/oil to cosmetic products. Organic silicone involves less volatilization of low-molecule siloxane in its operating environment and forms acidic silicone on the contact surface of the switch. In order to make this acidic silicone a non-conductor of electricity for the switch, limitations are placed on the product composition of switches as well as the manufacturing process.↵

元の翻訳
I will investigate that matters.
A post offices are closed at present.
Please be understanding of give an answer after Monday.
In either case , we have a registered clarification.
We are truly sorry for inconvenience.
And we will deal with that problem until very end.
If you don't mind, inquire a local post office .
It may be solved smoothly .
Thank you in advance.

修正後
I will investigate that matters.
A post offices are closed at present.
Please be understanding of give an answer after Monday.
In either case , we have a registered clarification.
We are truly sorry for inconvenience.
And we will deal with that problem until very end.
If you don't mind, inquire a local post office .
It may be solved smoothly .
Thank you in advance.

元の翻訳
This product is currently in the warehouse and since I do not have it at hand, then I cannot provide you with a new photograph.
The details are listed in the product page.

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This product is currently in the warehouse and since I do not have it at hand, I cannot provide you with a new photograph.
The details are listed in the product page.

元の翻訳
This manuscript is reviewing about Lap theraph,but Please After You peruse article of book or internet site, You put this effect.

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This manuscript is reviewing about wrap therapy,but Please After You peruse article of book or internet site, You put this effect. [the second half of the sentence does not make any sense]

元の翻訳
We've already reported to Japan Post that the package was damaged and the key was missing when we received it. You have reported about the damage to UK Royal Mail as well, right? Japan Post wouldn't do anything about if a buyer doesn't claim first. Once you have done it, Royal mail might contact you. If they do, please tell them the package was damaged. We hope to solve this problem as soon as possible. Thank you in advance for your cooperation.

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We've already reported to Japan Post that the package was damaged and the key was missing when we received it. You have already reported about the damage to UK Royal Mail as well, right? Japan Post wouldn't do anything about it unless the buyer files a claim first. Once you have done it, Royal Mail might contact you. If they do, please tell them the package was damaged. We hope to solve this problem as soon as possible. Thank you in advance for your cooperation.