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The other day I went to the Shirahone hot spring in Nagano.

Nagano has majestic scenery and the traditional Japanese inn had delicious food with excellent hospitality, not to mention the wonderful cloudy hot spring bath. I was really able to relax.

Now its time to get back to working hard :)

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The other day I went to Shirahone Onsen (hot springs) in Nagano prefecture.

Nagano has magnificent scenery and the traditional Japanese inn had delicious food with excellent hospitality, not to mention the wonderful cloudy hot spring bath. I was really able to refresh myself.

Now it's time to get back to working hard. :)

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But, as for this time, I shipped out the products by EMS products to two days after the deposit. I even explained all the circumstances and what was going on to the buyer. So this feedback is completely inappropriate. I requested the buyer to change the feedback, but I haven't received the answer yet. I was selling my products on ebay diligently, but I lost my account credit a lot because of this wrong feedback. If the buyer doesn't change the evaluation, I have no choice but to ask for the ebay's support. I'd like you to delete the feedback with the right decision for my sale in the future, please.

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However, this time I shipped out the products by EMS two days after the deposit. I even explained all the circumstances and what was going on to the buyer. Therefore this feedback is completely inappropriate. I requested that the buyer change the feedback, but I have yet to receive a reply. I was selling my products on eBay diligently, but my account lost a great deal of credibility due to this wrongful feedback. If the buyer doesn't change the evaluation I have no choice but to ask for eBay's support. I'd like you to make an appropriate decision and delete the feedback for the sake of my future sales.

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One unit was quickly defective, thus I am requesting reimbursement.
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The following two points occurred.

・I could not turn the electricity on the unit off or on
・I could not hear the voice guidance

There has already been a product shipment to the customer, ↵
however if those units are also found to be defective early on will you be able to handle reimbursement for them?
I await your reply.

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One unit was dead on arrival, so I am requesting reimbursement.
The following two problems occurred.

・I could not turn the electricity on the unit off or on
・I could not hear the voice guidance

Some products have already been shipped to the customer, but if those units are also found to be dead on arrival on will you be able reimburse me for them?
I await your reply.

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We have send out guide letters to all the customers indicating that "Our store has already performed the user registration of the serial number of the guitar. Please ensure that you do not perform a duplicate registration." and reminded them directly by calling them through phone. We ensure that 100% of the serial numbers cannot be registered in Taylor so can you kindly ship the remaining guitars? If we cannot ship the guitars and immediately issue us a refund, then we will lack the funds and won't be able to do business. If we can secure the funds, then we can purchase the other guitars from you.

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We sent out guidance letters to all customers indicating: "Our store has already performed user registration of the guitar's serial number. Please ensure that you do not perform duplicate registration." We also reminded them directly by telephone call. We ensure that 100% of the serial numbers cannot be registered with Taylor so could you kindly ship the remaining guitars? If you cannot ship the guitars, and cannot immediately issue us a refund, then we will be lacking in funds and won't be able to do business. If we can secure the funds, then we can purchase other guitars from you.

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KY custom made in 2011.
It comes with serial no. #*, guarantee card, and owner's card.
It's a rare guitar with top, side, back all made from a single mahogany plate.

Goto's open back white knob peg, a long saddle that adjusts octaves.↵
Old-style bridge, thick neck grip.
The previous owner had only 1 custom made by KY.
Please consider buying it soon as there is only one in the world! ↵

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This is a 2011 K.Y custom model.
It comes with a serial no. #*, guarantee card, and owner's card.
It's an extremely rare guitar with the top, side, and back all made from veneered mahogany.

It has a Goto open back white knob peg, long saddle for adjusting octaves, old-style bridge, and thick neck grip.
It is the only K.Y ordered and made for the previous owner.
Please consider buying it soon as there is only one in the world!

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al85502

She wear a big ribbon with a colorful swimsuit as inner wear!

With whole body's coordinate in gingham check, she chooses all red bag!

She chooses eye glasses of relatively big black frames!

And she wear sexy dress with a hat as clothes like men!

She wear red checkeredk shirt as sporty clothes!↵

She is the fashionista having her original brand.

She designs the colaboration's article as Kiko Mizuhara for OPENING CEREMONY

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al85502

She is wearing a big ribbon with a colorful swimsuit as inner-wear.

She choses an entirely red bag to go with her whole outfit coordinated in gingham check.

She chooses glasses with big, sparkly black frames.

She stylishly adds to this with a sexy dress, but paired with a hat to give a mannish appearance.

A red checkered shirt gives a sporty appearance.
She is a "fashionista," with her own original brand.

She is designing items for a collaboration called "Kiko Mizuhara for Opening Ceremony"

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al73405

Insert a puff sleeve T-shirt into a skirt arranged like a corset!

We have jumper skirts which costs ¥3,990 designed by WEGO.
Enjoy a little rock style, fitting with a pair of platform rubber sole.
Amo's plain clothes are full of pasrtel colors which have attracted a lot of girls oriented to Harajuku! They have an attractive figure and style as if you wewe like a doll!

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al73405

A puff-sleeved T-shirt is inserted into a skirt and arranged like a corset.

The jumper skirt is from WEGO and sells for ¥3,990.
It's matched with a pair of thick-rubber-sole shoes for a bit of a rock style.
Amo's clothes are full of pastel colors that are loved by many girls whole like Harajuku style, creating a figure and style just like that of a doll.

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To apologise for the mistake this time, ↵
I will ship by EMS express mail.↵
I estimated it will arrive in the United States in about 3 to 5 days.

I am sorry for any inconveniences and thank you for your understanding.

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To apologize for the mistake. I will ship by EMS express mail. I estimate it will arrive in the United States in about 3 to 5 days.

I am sorry for any inconvenience and thank you for your understanding.

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To the person in charge,

I am considering the purchase of this coat.

The page listing the item states that DHL or EMS delivery will be provided free of charge for purchases above $300.↵
I have added more than $300 worth of items into the cart and selected the delivery company but I do not see the discount.
Please advise on how I should be making the order.

Please also advise whether DHL or EMS will be able to deliver the items to Japan faster.

Thank you.


I'm sorry but I will be cancelling this order.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am considering buying this coat.

The page listing the item states that DHL or EMS delivery will be provided free of charge for purchases of $300 or more. I put $300 or more worth of items into the cart and selected the delivery company but I do not see the discount.
Please advise on how I should prepare the order.

Please also advise whether DHL or EMS will be able to deliver the items to Japan faster.

Thank you.


I'm sorry but I will be cancelling this order.

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If we take the previous page in to account, to improve the reach ratio, the Edge Rank must be improved. To improve the Edge Rank, engagement with each user, in other words, improving of Post Active Rate is needed.

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If we take the previous page into account, to improve the reach ratio the Edge Rank must be improved. To do this, engagement with each user, in other words, improving the Post Active Rate, is needed.

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Thank you for ordering the product from us this time.↵
Did you get it without any troubles?↵
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Didn't it have any defectives?↵
If it did, please let us know.

If that is no defectives, could you send a review to the site?

We read all comments from all the customers and are looking forward to getting your review.

Your order was below,

Order No.
Product name

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Thank you very much for ordering from us. Did you your order from Amazon arrive without any troubles? Were there any problems? If there were, please e-mail us to let us know.

If there are no problems, we would appreciate it if you could place a simple review.

We read all comments from all the customers and all our staff here are sincerely looking forward to receiving your review.

Your order was as below.

Order no.:
Product name:

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It has been a while.
I have been busy but I'm having a good time.

I've been trying to send mails a couple of times, but after few hours it come back as a error and that's happening quite often. ↵
I've been trying to send this email a couple of time now.
Is it possible if I can contact you on facebook because that is more certain?

Also, I would like ■.↵
Can you check if there are any stock?
Please tell me if there are any stock other than this as well.

Regards

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Hello, it's been a while since we've been in touch.
I have been busy but I'm doing well.

I tried to e-mail you a couple of times, but after a few hours it would come back as an error. This has happened quite often. I've tried to send this email a couple of times.
Is it possible for me to contact you through Facebook since that's more reliable?

I would also like ■. Could you please check if there are any in stock?
If there is any stock other than this, please also let me know.

Thank you very much.

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This is a spoon.↵
It looks like a candy.↵
It's made from acrylic.↵
There's a bubble to make it look even more like a candy.↵
It can also be used as a stir stick.↵
It creates an atmosphere.

Small fishes are arranged on a dining table.↵
This is a chopstick rest.↵
It's made from aluminum cast metal.↵
There's five of them.↵
Let's arrange small fishes on the dining table.

Sit on a fluffy bread.↵
This is a tatami chair.↵
It's shaped like a sliced bread.↵
You can adjust it for five degrees.↵
The fabric is fluffy.↵
It's fit with soft materials.↵
There's also a type that looks like toasted bread.

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This is a spoon. It looks like candy. It's made of acrylic. A bubble is put in to make it look even more like a candy. It can also be used as a stirring stick. It creates a certain atmosphere.

Small fish are lined up on a dining table. This is a chopstick rest made of aluminum cast metal. There are five of them. Line up small fish on the dining table.

Sit on fluffy white bread. This is a tatami chair shaped like a slice of bread. You can adjust it to five angles of folding. The fabric is fluffy and stuffed with soft materials. Another type that looks like toasted bread is also available.

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As course in college will be ended after the first week of November, I can work as full time starting from the second week.

I have been worked for 10 months in Apple Premium Reseller as a part time.↵
My score of ASTO kept with over 9000 marks. I did Apple products selling mainly. Also, I did clearing work for iPhone’s water leakage and screen breakage.

As it is my first time to come to Canada in August, I have no confidence about my speaking. To utilize my 3 years’ experience in Japan, I will try hard. As I did Taekwondo during my University time, I am confident with my strength.

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My college will end by the first week of November, so I am able to work full-time starting the second week of the month.

I worked part-time for 10 months at an Apple Premium Reseller in Japan. I maintain an Apple Sales Training Online (ASTO) score of 9,000 points or higher. I mainly sell Apple products and exchange iPhones that have gotten wet or had their screens cracked.

I am arriving in Canada at the start of August and I have no confidence in my English speaking skills. I will make the most of my three years of working experience in Japan and exert my best effort. I did taekwondo in college so I have confidence in my physical fitness.

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College would end by the first week of November, so I would be able to work full-time starting the second week.
I worked 10 months as a part-timer in Japan's Apple premium reseller. I am maintaining an ASTO scoring of 9000 points and above. I'm mainly selling apple products and replacing iPhone that got wet with water and or has a cracked screen.

I am arriving to Canada at the start of August and I have no confidence in speaking. I would give out my effort and make use of the experience that I have working in Japan for 3 years. I am confident with my physical fitness because I did Taekwondo in college.

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My college will end by the first week of November, so I am able to work full-time starting the second week of the month.
I worked part-time for 10 months at an Apple Premium Reseller in Japan. I maintain an Apple Sales Training Online (ASTO) score of 9,000 points or higher. I mainly sell Apple products and exchange iPhones that have gotten wet or had their screens cracked.

I am arriving in Canada at the start of August and I have no confidence in my English speaking skills. I will make the most of my three years of working experience in Japan and exert my best effort. I did taekwondo in college so I have confidence in my physical fitness.

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Well then, I will cancel the order ○○ and change it to ○○.
The brand name and volume are as follows.

Regarding the ×× product, I cannot purchase it if it is $140 because the lowest price in eBay is $129.95.

Can you offer it lower than $129.95?

And also, do you have stockpile of ○○?

Well then, my final orders are the following.

The shipping address is the address the same as before, the one stated below.
Please ship it as soon as possible. Thanks you very much.

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If that's the case, I will cancel my order of ○○ and change it to ○○.
The product name and quantity are as follows.

Regarding the ×× product, I cannot purchase it if it is $140 because the lowest price on eBay is $129.95.

Can you offer it for lower than $129.95?

And also, do you have ○○ in stock?

So my final order is as follows.

The shipping address is the same as before, the one stated below.
Please ship it as soon as possible. Thanks you very much.

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The product that I ordered on August 7 came damaged. It was found at the inspection before shipping to a customer. Looks like we can still sell it if the damaged part could be repaired. Could you send me the repairing kit and the part so that I can fix it myself? If that is not possible, please add A to the current order and ship it free.

We would start selling B as soon as we obtain the photo and its specifications.↵
We were missing two screws to attach a receiver. Luckily I had the screws in my hand.

Could I order one C please. Please ship it by Monday.↵

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The product that I ordered on August 7 came damaged. This was discovered upon inspection before shipping to a customer. It looks like we can still sell it if the damaged part can be repaired. Could you send me the repair tools and replacement part so that I can fix it myself? If that is not possible, please add an A free to the current order.

We will start selling B as soon as we determine its photos and specifications. For the B that arrived the other day was missing two screws to attach the receiver. Luckily we had these screws on hand from an unusable B, but...

I would like to order one C. Please ship it by Monday.

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A I purchased on 7th of Aug was damaged. ↵
The damage was found at shipping inspection when I received order.↵
It seems to be no problems to sell after replacement of the damaged area. ↵
Do you think it is possible for me to repair if you could send me dedicated tools and spares for repair? ↵
If it is not possible, I would like you to send A for free with my other orders this time.

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Regarding B, we will start selling it after we decide images of B and it's details. ↵
The B I received the other day was missing two threads which are to be connected to receiver. ↵
We had extra thread B, so we could handle thought.

I will order C, abd would like you to send it by Monday. ↵

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The A I purchased on August 7 was damaged. The damage was found upon my inspection of the shipment after I received the order. It seems it will be no problem to sell the item after replacing the damaged area. If I can replace the damaged area I can sell it. If you could send me dedicated tools and spare parts for the repair would this be possible? If not, I would like you to please send A at no cost with this next order.

Regarding B, we will start selling it after we decide on its photos and detailed specifications. The B I received the other day was missing two screws for installing the receiver. We had extra screws from an unusable B, so it seemed to be no problem, but this really isn't an ideal fix.

I will order one of C, and would like you to ship it by Monday.

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Hello. Can the handle of the item be expanded rather than handle in picture?
I'm waiting for your reply.

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Hello. Can the handle of the item be extended longer than what is shown in the picture?
I'm waiting for your reply.

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Thank you for your message.↵
I'm the seller of the merchandise below.

I have the merchandises in three colors, red, white and black.↵
You said you are interested in purchasing them.↵
Can you pay with PayPal or bank transfer from a Japanese bank?
Please let us know how much you are willing to pay including the shipping cost.↵
If we can agree, we'll ship them by EMS as soon as we receive the payment from you.

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Thank you for your message. I'm the seller of the merchandise below.

I have the item in three colors: red, white and black. You said you are interested in purchasing them. Can you pay with PayPal or by bank transfer from a Japanese bank?
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Please let us know how much you are willing to pay including the shipping cost. If we can agree, we'll ship them by EMS as soon as we receive the payment from you.

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Cap body: Peripherally Belted SNC structure
Interior design:System Interior Design (cold and dry interior/ you can adjust with options - patent)
Helmet shield:Super Adsis I Shield (LRS standard equipment)

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Cap body: Peripherally belted SNC (PB SNC) structure
Interior design: System interior (cold/dry interior, adjustment possible with options [patented])
Helmet shield: Super AdSis I Shield (LRS standard equipment)