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Many children came to the musical at the day I went. The musical can be enjoyable with couples, family and friends.
The stage set and the direction had a modern part and the musical was different from what I watched before. The stage set was elaborated but I think various scenes were directed well to use modern skills for images and so on. Difficult scenes to express on the stage were also represented well with various devices.
Where were many beautiful scenes and funny scenes of the stage set.

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Many children came to the musical on the day I went. The musical can be enjoyable with couples, family and friends.
The stage set and the direction had a modern part and the musical was different from what I watched before. The stage set was elaborated but I think various scenes were directed well to use modern skills for images and so on. Difficult scenes to express on the stage were also represented well with various devices.
Where were many beautiful scenes and funny scenes of the stage set.

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I have never seen the musical that makes me this happy. Young performers' dynamic performance and singing are of course (Female audience loved how young performers striped themselves.) , Veteran performers' sophisticated performance and singing are fantastic! Story is simple (But I recommend you to watch a movie first.) and it uses well-known song, Hit Dance Number from ABBA, so there's no awkward feeling unlike some historical musical. At the finale, all the performers come out and everyone stands up and go crazy with ABBA's Number. I will go again on my next business trip.

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I have never seen a musical that makes me this happy. Young performers' dynamic performance and singing are of course (Female audience loved how young male performers stripped themselves.) , Veteran performers' sophisticated performance and singing are fantastic! Story is simple (But I recommend you to watch a movie first.) and it uses well-known song, Hit Dance Number from ABBA, so there's no awkward feeling unlike some historical musical. At the finale, all the performers come out and everyone stands up and go crazy with ABBA's Number. I will go again on my next business trip to London.

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A/ I am sorry to be late in replying.
I listed a doll again today. We hope that you consider it.

B/A box that is in the picture is attached to this item.
3 boxes are attached in total.

C/The current price of the item in Japan is 60 dollars for A
and 55 dollars for B.
We can hardly find both of them in the market.
The shipping charge is around 12 dollars.
This probably is the lower price for this item.
If you still consider purchasing it, please let me know.
(I request the fee for me separately.)

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A/ I am sorry to be late in replying.
I listed the doll again today. We hope that you consider it.

B/A box that is in the picture is attached to this item.
3 boxes are attached in total.

C/The current price of the item in Japan is 60 dollars for A
and 55 dollars for B.
We can hardly find both of them in the market.
The shipping charge is around 12 dollars by air.
This probably is the lowest price for this item.
If you still consider purchasing it, please let me know.
(I request a handling fee for me separately.)

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Is there a Japanese interpreter in Vung Tau Vietnam?
If is there anyone who can do it, please tell us how much it costs.
Are the holidays going to start on February 8th?

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Is there a Japanese interpreter in Vung Tau Vietnam?
If is there anyone who can do it, please tell us how much it costs per day.
Are the holidays in Vietnam going to start on February 8th?

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I heard from the ＊＊＊ teacher that you will be leaving Japan at February.
There are some notification for leaving the dorm.

First, please let us know the exact date you are moving out the dorm.
Second, please be understand that the cancellation of gas, electronic and water is necessary.
For the avoidance of any trouble, please make sure the cancellation procedures be down before your leaving.

At the day you return the key, please pass the key to other resident, or leave it to the postbox of room No. 104.

If you have any question of the notification, please contact us.

The manager ＊＊ and the staffs, we are very glad to support your studying abroad.

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I heard from the ＊＊＊ teacher that you will be leaving Japan in February.
There are some notification for leaving the dorm.

First, please let us know the exact date you are moving out of the dorm.
Second, please understand that the cancellation of gas, electronic and water is necessary.
For the avoidance of any trouble, please make sure the cancellation procedures are completed before your leaving.

At the day you return the key, please pass the key to other resident, or leave it to the postbox of room No. 104.

If you have any question of the notification, please contact us.

The manager ＊＊ and the staffs, we are very glad to support your studying abroad.

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Mr./Ms. *** said that you will leave Japan in February.
We would like to tell you some information before leaving the dormitory.

First of all, please tell us the schedule leaving the dormitory as soon as possible.

You have to cancel on gas, electricity and water supply, so please take the proceedings.
We want you to take them surely because avoiding troubles later.

When leaving, you have to give the key to the resident in another room or put the key in No. 104 mail box.

If you have some questions, please contact us.

Our President *** and we are very pleased to help your learning here.

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Mr./Ms. *** said that you will leave Japan in February.
We would like to give you some information before leaving the dormitory.

First of all, please tell us the schedule leaving the dormitory as soon as possible.

You have to cancel on gas, electricity and water supply, so please take the proceedings.
We want you to take them surely because avoiding troubles later.

When leaving, you have to give the key to the resident in another room or put the key in No. 104 mail box.

If you have some questions, please contact us.

Our President *** and we are very pleased to help your learning here.

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It will took about 50 minutes from the town area before getting to the diving point.
The instructor did the driving until we arrived.
In the middle of the drive in, we had a briefing with the local participants. The conversation was in English only
but I think, the listening comprehension was not a problem.
We climbed up the ladder, and finally it's the entry point!! Everywhere you see, it's the deep blue waters!
The visibility was from 300 feet (91 meters)
But, I felt the stiffness cold of the water temperature of zero degrees.

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It will take about 50 minutes from the town area before getting to the diving point.
The instructor did the driving until we arrived.
In the middle of the drive in, we had a briefing with the local participants. The conversation was in English only
but I think, the listening comprehension was not a problem.
We climbed up the ladder, and finally it's the entry point!! Everywhere you see, it's the deep blue waters!
The visibility was from 300 feet (91 meters)!
But, I felt the stiffness cold of the water temperature of zero degrees Celsius.

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It was a best day.
It was a all day tour and we were very worried that it might spoil that day but it was totally fine and end up as a best day. The tour guide who also was a driver, was not too friendly and
very nice. We could see that the tour guide prioritize a satisfaction of travellers and took lots of photos at popular spots. On the way back, the tour guide said that it would be late and asked each traveller where they wish to be dropped off. It was a very nice tour. Thank you.

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It was the best day.
It was an all day tour and we were very worried that it might spoil that day but it was totally fine and ended up being the best day. The tour guide who also was a driver, was not too friendly and
very nice. We could see that the tour guide prioritize the satisfaction of travelers and took lots of photos at popular spots. On the way back, the tour guide said that it would be late and asked each traveler where they wish to be dropped off. It was a very nice tour. Thank you.

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Hi,
I will tell you an account number one year later when I open the cooperate account.
Please don't forget that I have purchased the Lion EA's double license.

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Hi,
I will tell you the account number one year later when I open the cooperate account.
Please don't forget that I have purchased the Lion EA's double license.

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I have sent you several emails to explain that I couldn't arrange the guitar in a same specs because of my lack of management. Have you checked them? I sent emails to the email addresses that are registered on ebay and PayPal and I even made a phone call but I was told it was a wrong number. Also, I contacted both ebay and PayPal to let them know that I'm unable to get in touch with you. Have you heard from them?

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I have sent you several emails to explain that I couldn't arrange the guitar in the same specs because of my lack of management. Have you checked them? I sent emails to the email addresses that are registered on ebay and PayPal and I even made a phone call but I was told it was a wrong number. Also, I contacted both ebay and PayPal to let them know that I'm unable to get in touch with you. Have you heard from them?

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Dear my friend.

The freight is 30203 yen. Since t is rather expensive, i think that packing separately is rather cheap.
In this case, the freight may be 10538 yen. If you could accept the price, I can send to you　the estimate of total price.
(This price may be changed by the store. In the case ,i tell you)
Would you tell me your telephone number?I want to send this baggage perfectly.

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Dear my friend.

The freight is 30203 yen. Since it is rather expensive, I think that packing separately should be cheaper.
In this case, the freight may be about 10538 yen. If you could accept the price, I can send to you the estimate of total price.
(This price may be changed by the store. In the case ,I tell you)
Would you tell me your telephone number?I want to ensure you receive the package.

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The travel fee will cost about ¥30,000 including the lodging expense and transportation. Also, I am planning to pay ¥10,000 this month and the next month as a reward. As the goods are supposed to arrive the next month, I will not order this time.
Surely I would like to place an order when the goods are available.

Thanks,

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The travel fee will cost about ¥30,000 including the lodging expense and transportation. Also, I am planning to pay ¥10,000 this month and the next month as a reward. As the goods are supposed to arrive next month, I will not order this time.
Surely I would like to place an order when the goods are available.

Thanks,

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Hello,I ordered two of 〇〇,and one of them arrived.
Could you send me the other one?
Please tell me the tracking number.

If you haven't send it yet,could you hurry up?
Please contact me.

Thank you.

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Hello,I ordered two of 〇〇,and one of them arrived today.
Have you sent the other one?
Please tell me the tracking number.

If you haven't send it yet,could you hurry up?
Please contact me.

Thank you.

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We would like to deliver F item from Japan to your company directly without using the forwarder in A. Is it OK for you?
Of cource we, shipper, pay the tariff.

Please tell us if there is anything what we should pay attention.

For example, are there restrictions like followings?
*The size must be within 50*60*50. If any of sides surpass it, it is declined.

*The weight must not be exceed 30 kilograms. The item heavier than 15 kilograms, we need to mark "weight exceeded" on the side of its box.

*The box must not be teared.

*Packing by bandling is prohibited.

*Wet box is prohibited.

*Cash on delivery is prohibited.

*Remodeled box is prohibited.

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We would like to deliver F item from Japan to your company directly without using the forwarder in A. Is it OK for you?
Of course we, shipper, pay the tariff.

Please tell us if there is anything what we should pay attention.

For example, are there restrictions like followings?
*The size must be within 50*60*50. If any of sides surpass it, it is declined.

*The weight must not be exceed 30 kilograms. If the item heavier than 15 kilograms, we need to mark "weight exceeded" on the top and side of its box.

*The box must not be teared.

*Packing by use of belts is prohibited.

*Wet box is prohibited.

*Cash on delivery is prohibited.

*Remodeled box is prohibited.

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We are sorry that Order Defect Rate（ODR） went over 1%.
Due to our mismanagement, It does not meet the standard of Amazon.

We will minimize the delivery delay due to congestion.
We will focus on delivering goods without keeping customers wait.

We will also switch more to good-at-English staffs and will minimize the generation of claims.

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We are sorry that Order Defect Rate(ODR) went over 1%.
Due to our mismanagement, It does not meet the standard of Amazon.

We will minimize the delivery delay due to congestion.
We will focus on delivering goods without keeping customers waiting.

We will also switch more to good-at-English staffs and will minimize the generation of claims.

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I have confirmed with Japan Post that EMS is not provided in Kazakhstan.
For SAL we are able to provide you its tracking number and attach insurance for parcel.
Since it's a holiday season, it will take longer time till the arrival of your parcel.
Is it okay to proceed the preparation of your items?
Please let us know your opinion. We are looking forward to your response.

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I have confirmed with Japan Post that EMS is not provided in Kazakhstan.
For SAL we are able to provide you its tracking number and attach insurance for parcel.
Since it's a holiday season, it may take longer time till the arrival of your parcel.
Is it okay to proceed the preparation of your items?
Please let us know your opinion. We are looking forward to your response.

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We have already shipped the item.
We cannot change the address of the shipment.
We will show the tracking number. could you please ask the change of address yourself?
Thank you very much for your order at our shop.

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We have already shipped the item.
We cannot change the address of the shipment.
We will show the tracking number. Could you please ask the change of address yourself?
Thank you very much for your order at our shop.

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10/22 ( wed ) iTunes®110 countries preceding release ! !
※ In addition , time-limited special price OFF will be the application of domestic only .
※ sound source is here
※ MUSIC VIDEO is here
By Popularity! Limited special price OFF until 11/10 !!
Special Price OFF period : 10/22 ( wed ) 0: 00-11 / 10 (Mon ) 23:59
Special Price OFF Price : ¥ 250 → ¥ 200 price off !

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10/22 ( Wed ) iTunes®110 countries preceding release ! !
※ In addition , time-limited special price OFF will be the application of domestic only .
※ sound source is here
※ MUSIC VIDEO is here
By Popularity! Limited special price OFF until 11/10 !!
Special Price OFF period : 10/22 ( Wed ) 0: 00-11 / 10 (Mon ) 23:59
Special Price OFF Price : ¥ 250 → ¥ 200 price off !

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Kind of popular charm for relaxing in Japan - the gesture to write Chinese character "人" (means people) on palm 3 times, and then swallow it. She seems to be very nervous.

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Please refund for the below script. The reason is.. I can not search the address in Japan even it's registered. Only alphabetical address cab search. I had waited your update but no reaction at all, so need refund please.

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Kind of popular charm for relaxing in Japan - the gesture to write Chinese character "人" (means people) on palm 3 times, and then swallow it. She seems to be very nervous.

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Please refund for the below script. The reason is, I can not search the address in Japan even it's registered. Only alphabetical address can be searched. I had waited for your update but since there is no reaction at all, please provide a refund.

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Thank you for giving me a discount.
I am about to buy your item priced at 200 dollars. Though I wanted to make the payment as soon as possible, I cannot settle it because I found out that shipment to Japan has not been enabled in your Paypal setting.

Please adjust your Paypal setting so that shipment to Japan is allowed. I look forward to your reply.

By the way, my mailing address in Japan is as follows.

If the shipment to the above mailing address is feasible, I shall settle the payment of 205 dollars as set.

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Thank you for giving me a discount.
I am about to buy your item priced at 200 dollars. Though I wanted to make the payment as soon as possible through PayPal, I cannot settle it because I found out that shipment to Japan has not been enabled in your Paypal setting.

Please adjust your Paypal setting so that shipment to Japan is allowed. I look forward to your reply.

By the way, my mailing address in Japan is as follows.

If the shipment to the above mailing address is feasible, I shall settle the payment of 205 dollars as set.

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Set luminance to maximum, adjust exposure level, then you can make it lighter.
Face light that emphasizes your feminine beauty with 4 colours can brighten you far more even in the night.

3) Kind MAX
You can zoom up the screen, in accompany with this function you can check make-up condition of your head’s each side where you cannot view easily by pausing its screen. In addition, it allows you to see your hair, etc. slowly without spoiling your style.
Furthermore, with horizontal reversal function you can experience what others see you, and with vertical reversal function you can view your chin and neck where your eyes could not see.

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Set luminescence to maximum, adjust exposure level, then you can make it brighter.
Face light that emphasizes your feminine beauty with 4 colours can brighten you far more even in the night.

3) Kind MAX
You can zoom up the screen, in accompany with this function you can check make-up condition of your head’s each side where you cannot view easily by pausing its screen. In addition, it allows you to see your hair, etc. slowly without spoiling your style.
Furthermore, with horizontal reversal function you can experience what others see you, and with vertical reversal function you can view your chin and neck where your eyes could not see.

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The proceedure above is a way that you instructed, isn't it?

Regarding the Order number 75, as I have not received the Order number 28,
I ordered again.
I ask you to request a vendor that I can receive this rug by December 15th.

I would like to receive all the following rugs that I have not received by December 15th.

I ordered the Order number 25 on December 4th and the Order number 28 on November 20th.
I have been waiting for them for a long time.
I appreciate your understanding, and please work on it immediately.

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The procedure above is the way that you instructed, isn't it?

Regarding the Order number 75, as I have not received the Order number 28,
I ordered again.
I ask you to request the vendor that I can receive this rug by December 15th.

I would like to receive all the following rugs that I have not received by December 15th.

I ordered the Order number 25 on December 4th and the Order number 28 on November 20th.
I have been waiting for them for a long time.
I appreciate your understanding, and please work on it immediately.