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元の翻訳
The setting of our system includes a mistake, a product of the indication exhibited it by mistake.
Currently, the system is improved.

修正後
The setting of our system includes a mistake, a product pointed out was exhibited by mistake.
Currently, the system is improved.

元の翻訳
濁った水を得る為にスラリーの上にてこちらの石を擦った（良質なTomonaguraにて）際に、いくつかの石の粒が水の中へ剥がれ落ちてしまいました。
研磨時に、それらは研磨歯を傷つけてしまいます。何回か（洗浄し再度Tomonaguraにて研磨を）試しましたが、全く効果はありませんでした。石自体は研磨するにあたり大変美しく素晴らしいのですが、こちらの傷を残してしまう可能性がある石の粒が原因より、レザーは剃刀といった物には十分ではありません。ひょっとしますと、道具やナイフといった物には良いかもしれません。不良箇所は修理可能（固い粒子の部分は取り外し可能）となりますので、もしそれが１、２箇所くらいに傷を残すのであれば、そこまで問題とはなりません。

修正後
（良質な共名倉と呼ばれる）砥石で砥いでいる間に、砥石上の水は濁り（スラリー、砥泥と呼ばれる）、、いくつかの砥粒子が砥石から脱離して水の中へ混入します。
研磨時（砥石で砥ぐ時）に、脱離砥粒子は刃を傷つけてしまいます。何回か（砥石を洗ったり、砥石を共名倉砥石で再度砥いだり）試しましたが、全く効果はありませんでした。砥石自体は研磨するにあたり大変美しく申し分ないのですが、傷を残してしまう砥粒子のため、レザーや剃刀といった物には十分ではありません。おそらく、工具の刃先やナイフといった物には良いかもしれません。不良箇所は修理可能（固い粒子の部分は除去可能）なので、傷がつく箇所が１、２箇所であれば、大きな問題ではないでしょう。

元の翻訳
Household energy consumption in Japan before WWII was highly dependent on firewood and it had been over 80% until 1920's. Even in 1940, the forest energy including charcoal was three quarters. (this is the input-based data, so the importance of firewood has been somewhat exaggerated.) Increase in power use is remarkable in 1910-20's and the substitute coal penetrated in the 1930s. Energy consumption in urban areas steadily increased after the 1900s and diversification of energy sources also advanced. Further, the ratio of charcoal had been consumed as much as firewood compared to rural districts.

修正後
Household energy consumption in Japan before WWII was highly dependent on firewood and use of firewood had been over 80% until 1920's. Even in 1940, the forest energy including charcoal was three quarters. (this is the input-based data, so the importance of firewood and charcoal has been somewhat exaggerated.) Increase in power use is remarkable in 1910-20's and the substitute coal penetrated in the 1930s. Energy consumption in urban areas steadily increased after the 1900s and diversification of energy sources also advanced. Further, the consumption ratio of charcoal was hight and it had been consumed as much as firewood compared to rural districts.

元の翻訳
#habit

There was one defect from the product I have purchased from you last month so I have contacted you.
Product Name :

There are 2 scratches and dents on the crown and I cannot sell this as a new product. (I am attaching a photo so please kindly confirm. )
I will dispose of it as a "not quite perfect" product so is it possible for you to provide a discount?
I am hoping for a $30 discount.
If this won't be possible, then I will ask for a product return.
Sorry for the trouble, but I request for your support.

修正後
#habit

There was one defect from the product I have purchased from you last month, so I have contacted you.
Product Name :

There are 2 scratches and dents on the crown and I cannot sell this as a new product. (I am attaching a photo, so please kindly confirm them. )
I will dispose of it as a "not quite perfect" product so is it possible for you to provide a discount?
I am hoping for a $30 discount.
If this won't be possible, then I will ask for a product return.
Sorry for the trouble, but I request for your support (Thank you for your consideration).

元の翻訳
Oil was used mainly for lamps in Japan before the war and not used as heat source very much.
Petroleum and seed oil has been used, but because of the spread of the oil lamps, seed oil were limited to the usage for gods .
In rural, many home signed up for only 1 light that was flat rate. In other places, petroleum lamps were used.
In urban area, petroleum lamps were used because of the instability of the electric power supply.
Until the early 1920s, the demand of kerosene for lamp at home accounted for a large proportion of the total oil demand.
Major industries which used oil for power were agriculture and tea manufacturer.

修正後
Oil was used mainly for lamps in Japan before the war and not used as heat source very much.
Petroleum and seed oil has been used, but because of the spread of the oil lamps, the seed oil was limited to the usage for gods.
In rural areas, many home signed up for only 1 light with flat rate. In other places, petroleum lamps were used.
In urban areas, petroleum lamps were used because of the instability of the electric power supply.
Until early 1920s, the demand of kerosene for lamp at home accounted for a large proportion of the total oil demand.
Major industries which had used oil for power were agriculture and tea manufacturer.

元の翻訳
I wonder, although Germany and Vietnam have been united for many years, why there are so many of problems between the so-called compatriots even now. The tour to Korea, where apparently prosperous, made us feel " war" for real.

It was extremely fascinating that a woman defected from North Korea told us the story about the situation in North Korea and responded to our questions. Unfortunately, she could come with us part of the way. By the way, the owner of the restaurant has been changed and, therefore the amount of the meat of the meal has been decreased. It seems negotiations are under way.

修正後
I wonder, although Germany and Vietnam have been united for many years, why there are so many of problems between the so-called compatriots even now. The tour to Korea, where apparently prosperous, made us feel " war" for real.

It was extremely interesting that a woman defected from North Korea was accompanied with the guide who showed us aroud part of the way and answered the question on the status of North Korea (she couldn't accompanied only part of the way because it would be a trouble if she got away at the meeting room. By the way, we were mentioned that the owner of the restaurant for lunch changed and the amount of the meat of the meal decreased. (It seems that increase in it is under negotiations)

元の翻訳
<The precious experience>

I think we had a really precious experience. I participated the both tour to "The third tunnel" and Panmunjom. Visiting both tourist spots, makes us think about the history of North and South Korea. So much of tours are recommended to us when we visit South Korea. Above all, you should absolutely take part in the tour I mentioned above. I spent a worthwhile time there.

<Ruins of the Cold War>
We visit the Panmunjom, where is built at the cold war era.

修正後
<The precious experience>

I think we had a really precious experience. I participated the both tour to "The third tunnel" and Panmunjom. Visiting both tourist spots gave us a chance to makes us think about the history of North and South Korea. Although many tours are available, you should absolutely take part in this tour when you visit South Korea. I could spend a worthwhile time there.

<Ruins of the Cold War>
We visited the Panmunjom which was built in the Cold War era.

元の翻訳
Hello. I received the Delonghi EC702 coffee maker that I bought in another day.
Thank you for the arrangement.
However, the attached cleaner"descaling solution", the liquid was leaking in the bag from the container.
Moreover, that amount is increasing little by little. It seems it's leaking from the bottom of the container.
It will trouble me to use, so can you send me a new one please. You can send it to the same address.
I'm looking forward to hearing from you.

修正後
Hello. I received the Delonghi EC702 coffee maker that I bought the oher day.
Thank you for the arrangement.
However, the attached cleaner"descaling solution", the liquid was leaking in the bag from the container.
Moreover, that amount is increasing little by little. It seems it's leaking from the bottom of the container.
It will trouble me to use, so can you send me a new one please? I would appreciate it if you could send it to the same address of Florida as before .
I'm looking forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
Hello. I’ve got a Delonghi EC702 coffee maker. Thank you for sending it to me. But as for the attached cleaner (descaling solution), there was a leakage of liquid in the plastic back.
And the amount of leakage is getting increased. I’m afraid that there is a leakage at the bottom of the container. I’ll find it difficult to use it, I would appreciate it if you could send me a new one.
You could send it to the same address of Florida. I’ll wait for your reply.

修正後
Hello. I’ve got a Delonghi EC702 coffee maker which I bought the other day. Thank you for sending it to me. But as for the attached cleaner (descaling solution), there was a leakage of liquid in the plastic back.
And the amount of leakage is getting increased little by little. I’m afraid that there is a leakage at the bottom of the container. I’ll find it difficult to use it, I would appreciate it if you could send me a new one.
You could send it to the same address of Florida as before. I’ll wait for your reply.

元の翻訳
このカメラに関連したアクセサリーを全て見せてもらいたいのですが、大丈夫でしょうか。そして、この商品のフィードバックがどこにもないので、あなた方の返品返却についての制度をもっと詳しく知りたいです。ありがとうございます。

修正後
このカメラと一緒に売りたいアクセサリーを全て教えていただけますか。そして、あなたの返品返金の方針についての情報が見つからないので、詳細を教えてください。よろしくお願いします。

元の翻訳
ＩＧＩ3567
とても親切にして頂いてありがとうございます。クレームを取り下げましたのでお知らせします。過剰に反応してしまい、すみませんでした。飼っていた犬が私の見ている前でリビングルームのソファで死んでしまい、いまだにショックから抜け切れていないのかもしれません。皮肉なことに品物は届きました。返金のこともあり、品物を送り返すべきかどうか分かりません。今までのこと、本当にすみませんでした。このようなことはもうしませんのでどうかお許しください。

修正後
ＩＧＩ3567
とても親切にして頂いてありがとうございます。クレームを取り下げましたのでお知らせします。お待たせしましてすみませんでした。また、過剰に反応してしまい、すみませんでした。飼っていた犬が私の見ている前でリビングルームのソファで心臓発作で死んでしまい、いまだにショックから抜け切れていないのかもしれません。皮肉なことに品物は届きました。返金のこともあり、品物を送り返すべきかどうか分かりません。今までのこと、本当にすみませんでした。このようなことはもうしませんのでどうかお許しください。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.

We have approved the matter of the springs.

Did you ship the items yesterday which we had ordered on April 9 and 17?

Regards,

修正後
Thank you for your reply.

We have approved the matter of the springs.

Do you mean you shipped the items yesterday which we had ordered on April 9 and 17?

Regards,

元の翻訳
I have got the product.
Thank you very much.
Just as has been expected, you didn’t have ◎ in stock. It’s disappointing.
Please see the following URL for our HP.
We would like to create our own EC site for sales.
I was surprised that you have visited Japan!
I would like to see you when you come to Japan this year.
I’ll wait for your reply.

修正後
I have got the product.
Thank you very much.
Just as has been expected, you didn’t have ◎ in stock. It’s disappointing.
Please see the following URL for our HP.
We would like to create our own EC site for sales.
You have visited Japan!
I would like to see you when you come to Japan this year.
I’ll wait for your reply.