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I'm afraid say this but we found out that the recommendation we sent to you was incomplete. We are sending you a corrected version.
If it's too long or if there's any issue with the recommendation, please let us know.
Thank you for your understanding.

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I am afraid to say this but we found out that the recommendation we sent to you was incomplete. We are sending you a corrected version.
If it is too long or if there is any issue with the recommendation, please let us know.
Thank you for your understanding.

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Thank you for purchasing our products. We apologize that your purchased item has not reached you yet. As shown in the product page, the shipping method you selected for this purchase does not have a tracking number. So we are afraid that we cannot track the product. Usually, products get delivered in two to three weeks so please kindly wait for a little bit more. If the product does not reach you within one week, please contact us again.

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Thank you for your purchase. We apologize that your purchased item has not reached you yet. As shown in the product page, the shipping method you selected for this purchase does not have a tracking number. So we are afraid that we cannot track the product. Usually, our products get delivered in two to three weeks so please kindly wait for a little bit more. If the product does not reach you within one week, please contact us again.

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[Recommended Environment]
Smartphone OS : iOS6, Android2.2 or higher
PC OS : Windows Vista, Windows7, Macintosh10.4 or higher

*Here are applicable phone types.
http://sp-m.mu mo.net/pub/supportPhone/

[Download Method]
1. Access to the download site, http://mu-ca.net/ (By direct input or via 2D bar code).
2. Input PIN code described on the product.

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[System Requirements]
Smartphone OS : iOS6, Android2.2 or higher
PC OS : Windows Vista, Windows7, Macintosh10.4 or higher

*Here are applicable phone types.
http://sp-m.mu mo.net/pub/supportPhone/

[How to Download]
1. Access the download site, http://mu-ca.net/ (By direct input or via 2D bar code).
2. Enter PIN code written on the product.

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Hello.
My store is called Tokyo, TATHIKAWA.
It's 40 minutes away from Akihabara by train.
I would like to explain a little bit of Japan.
Soon, cherry blossoms will bloom in Tokyo.
They are really beautiful
I will take pictures of the cherry blossoms this year and e-mail them to you.

By the way, regarding the item, the power plug is A type.
If I remember correctly, Saudi Arabia uses BF so I will include a conversion adopter but games are something you play for many hours so please use PS4 power cable of Sony in your country.

Please let me know if you have something you would like to ask.
Thank you for your purchase.

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Hello.
My store is in TATHIKAWA, Tokyo.
It's 40 minutes away from Akihabara by train.
I would like to explain a little bit of Japan.
Soon, cherry blossoms will bloom in Tokyo.
They are really beautiful.
I will take pictures of the cherry blossoms this year and e-mail them to you.

By the way, regarding the item, the power plug is A type.
If I remember correctly, Saudi Arabia uses BF so I will include a conversion adopter, but games are something you play for many hours so please use PS4 power cable of Sony in your country.

Please let me know if you have something you would like to ask.
Thank you for your purchase.

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*Please make sure that you select the correct page since the selling page is different for customer who participated the event and for those who did not.
*If you have not received the e-mail which contains an access code, please confirm the contents from Mail tab in Astalight* fan club website.

[Selling price]
200 yen per one picture (Tax included)

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*Please make sure that you select the correct page since the selling page is different for customers who participated in the event and for those who did not.
*If you have not received the e-mail which contains an access code, please confirm the contents from the Mail tab in the Astalight* fan club website.

[Selling price]
200 yen per picture (Tax included)

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I used your service the other day. I was able to use it without any issue. It helped me a lot. Thank you very much.
Since this really is a good service, I would like to provide the service as your agency.
Would you let me know the condition to become your agency in Japan?

Would you ship your products to Japan?
If possible, please let me know the shipping fee.
Will customs be imposed on the products when you ship them to Japan?

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I used your service the other day. I was able to use it without any issue. It helped me a lot. Thank you very much.
Since this really is a good service, I would like to provide the service in Japan as your agency.
Would you let me know the condition to become your agency in Japan?

Would you ship your products to Japan?
If possible, please let me know the shipping fee.
Will taxes be imposed on the products when you ship them to Japan?

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販売アカウントの銀行口座情報が無い為、支払い処理不可

販売成功おめでとうございます！
お客様の販売アカウントの銀行口座情報が抜けていることに気がつきました。販売アカウントに確かな銀行口座情報がないとあなたの受けた注文に対して支払いすることができません。

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販売アカウントの銀行口座情報が無い為、支払い処理不可

販売成功おめでとうございます！
お客様の販売アカウントの銀行口座情報が抜けています。販売アカウントに確かな銀行口座情報がないとあなたの受けた注文に対して支払いすることができません。

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AAA 10th Annicersary - Seven consecutive release of the single "TBD"

National arena tour was in success with about 200 thousands audiences.
The original album "GOLD SYMPHONY" received No.1 title in ORIKON weekly ranking with a record-sale.
Furthermore, AAA received Record Award in five consecutive years and played in Red and White Singing Contest.

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AAA 10th Anniversary - Seven consecutive release of the single "title TBC"

National arena tour was in success with about 200 thousands audiences.
The original album "GOLD SYMPHONY" received No.1 in ORICON weekly ranking with a record-sale.
Furthermore, AAA received Record Award in five consecutive years and played in Red and White Singing Contest.

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We will give special favor of CD and application postcard for T-GROOVE for the customers who reserved or purchased at any TSTUTAYA RECORDS in Japan or TSUTAYA online shopping.
The quantity of special favor is limited so please hurry up and make a booking.
*Please understand that only bookings done through TSUTAYA online shopping are the subject.
*Some of the stores may not have special favor.

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We will give special favor of CD and application postcard for T-GROOVE for the customers who reserved or purchased at any TSTUTAYA RECORDS in Japan or TSUTAYA online shopping.
The quantity of the special benefit is limited so please hurry up and make a reservation.
*Please understand that only reservations on TSUTAYA online shopping are applicable.
*Some of the stores may not have the special benefit.

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*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special favor and products run out.

Here is mu-mo shop! (both for PC and mobile phone.)

- AAA Party's original special favor -
[Single-purchase special favor]
Big artist card.(30cm x 30cm)

[Double-simultaneous-purchase special favor] (PLAYBUTTON and one out of (2CD+DVD＋original lunch bag), (2CD+DVD) and (2CD))
Chopsticks with AAA logo (comes with a special case) and a big artist card (30cm x 30cm).

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*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special benefit and products run out.

Here is mu-mo shop! (both for PC and mobile phone.)

- AAA Party's original special benefit-
[Single-purchase special benefit]
Big artist card.(30cm x 30cm)

[Double-simultaneous-purchase special benefit] (PLAYBUTTON and one out of (2CD+DVD＋original lunch bag), (2CD+DVD) and (2CD))
Chopsticks with AAA logo (comes in a special case) and a big artist card (30cm x 30cm).

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*You can purchase the products with limited special favor of AAA party If you join (= make payment) selecting convenience store payment before 11:50 on Wednesday, August 28th, 2013.
*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special favor or the products run out.
Here is the URL for AAA party official shop (Both for PC and mobile phone)
*Sale will start from 5:00 p.m. on Friday, July 26th.
http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/aaa1305-2/

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*You can purchase the product with a limited special benefit of AAA party If you join (= make payment) by selecting a convenience store payment before 11:50 on Wednesday, August 28th, 2013.
*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special favor or the products run out.
Here is the URL for AAA party official shop (Both for PC and mobile phone)
*Sale will start from 5:00 p.m. on Friday, July 26th.
http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/aaa1305-2/

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[Music Card(SYUTA SUEYOSHIver.)]AQZ1-50977
[Music Card(CHIAKI ITOver.)]AQZ1-50978

Advance sale will last until 11:59 p.m. on Tuesday, September 3rd, 2013 at the latest.
*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special favor or the products run out.
Here is the URL for mu-mo shop (Both for PC and mobile phone)
*Sale will start from 5:00 p.m. on Friday, July 26th.
http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/aaa1305-1/

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[Music Card (SYUTA SUEYOSHI ver.)]AQZ1-50977
[Music Card (CHIAKI ITO ver.)]AQZ1-50978

Advance sale will last until 11:59 p.m. on Tuesday, September 3rd, 2013 at the latest.
*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special benefits or the products run out.
Here is the URL for mu-mo shop (Both for PC and mobile phone)
*Sale will start from 5:00 p.m. on Friday, July 26th.
http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/aaa1305-1/

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*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special favor or the products run out.
Here is the URL for mu-mo shop (Both for PC and mobile phone)
*Sale will start from 5:00 p.m. on Friday, July 26th.
http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/aaa1305-1/

We will give original clear file B (One for each) for the customers who purchased 7-simultaneous-purchase set of music card at mu-mo shop.

-"KOIOTO TO AMAZORA" [7-simultaneous-purchase set of music card] Special favor : Original Clear File B (One for each)

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*Advance sale will be finished as soon as the special benefits or the products run out.
Here is the URL for mu-mo shop (Both for PC and mobile phone)
*Sale will start from 5:00 p.m. on Friday, July 26th.
http://sp.mu-mo.net/shop/r/aaa1305-1/

We will give an original clear file B (One for each) for the customers who purchased 7-simultaneous-purchase set of music cards at mu-mo shop.

-"KOIOTO TO AMAZORA" [7-simultaneous-purchase set of music cards] Special Benefit : Original Clear File B (One for each)

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We will give original clear files A (One for each) for the customers who purchased 3-simultaneous-purchase set at mu-mo shop.

- "KOIOTO TO AMAZORA" [3-simultaneous-purchase set] Special Favor : Original Clear File A (One for each)
[CD+DVD]AVCD-48777/B (Jacket A)
[CD]AVCD-48778 (Jacket B)
[CD(mu-mo shop limited version]AVC1-48803 (jacket C)

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We will give a original clear file A (One for each) for the customers who purchased 3-simultaneous-purchase set at mu-mo shop.

- "KOIOTO TO AMAZORA" [3-simultaneous-purchase set] Special Benefit : Original Clear File A (One for each)
[CD+DVD]AVCD-48777/B (Jacket A)
[CD]AVCD-48778 (Jacket B)
[CD(mu-mo shop limited version]AVC1-48803 (jacket C)

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1. I made a mistake. "Can you tell the difference between she and I?" I said sorry...

2 I am A brand seller.
Are you an university student? What do you want to do in the future? You always give me appropriate advices. It seems that you are the older one.

3.Is there anyone who knows her name? Is there anyone who can contact her? I'm worried about her.

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1. I made a mistake. "Can't you tell the difference between she and I [parts of speech confusion]?" I said sorry...

2 I am [article missing] A brand seller.
Are you a university student? What do you want to do in the future? You always give me appropriate advices [uncountable noun]. It seems that you are the older one.

3.Is there anyone who knows her name? Is there anyone who can contact her? I'm worried about her.

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To add value...

Raise user-evaluation.
To sell products or service at higher price than others, meaning to add high value, those products or service need to be evaluated highly by users.
High evaluation means that the products or service can be sold at high commensurate price.
To add value, you need to have plan to raise user-evaluation(satisfaction).

But when it surpasses customers' expectations, they will think that "I will ask AS again". To receive orders continuously, we need to meet customers' expectation.

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To add value...

Raise user-evaluation.
To sell products or service at higher price than others, meaning to add high value, those products or service need to be evaluated highly by users.
High evaluation means that the products or service can be sold at high commensurate price.
To add value, you need to have a plan to raise user-evaluation(satisfaction).

But when it surpasses customers' expectations, they will think that "I will ask AS again". To receive orders continuously, we always need to meet customers' expectation.

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I'm sorry that we kept you waiting.
RMA is 12.
Regarding a refund, we will make 50% refund for opened products as we said before. However, considering that you selected a wrong item, we feel sorry to refund only half the price of the product. So we plan to make 80 refund for you.
We will need to send the returned item back to Japan and then conduct inspection. After that we will sell the item as an used item. It costs to do all these things.
Please understand that this is the best proposal we can offer. We would appreciate it if you could accept this.

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I'm sorry that we kept you waiting.
RMA is 12.
Regarding a refund, we will make 50% refund for opened products as we said before. However, considering that you selected a wrong item, we feel sorry to refund only half the price of the product. So we plan to make 80% refund for you.
We will need to send the returned item back to Japan and then conduct inspection. After that we will sell the item as an used item. It costs to do all these things.
Please understand that this is the best proposal we can offer. We would appreciate it if you could accept this.

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Thank you for the additional offer. I would like to add A on my order. Just to make sure, Do this picture and other three pictures come with COA? Please let me know the total cost of these four pictures. I'm planning to continuously purchase your pictures so I would like you to give me as low price as possible.

Thank you for returning message. I completed payment so please confirm and ship the products. I'm looking forward to receiving the products. Thank you very much.

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Thank you for the additional offer. I would like to add A on my order. Just to make sure, do this picture and other three pictures come with COA? Please let me know the total cost of these four pictures. I'm planning to continuously purchase your pictures so I would like you to give me as low price as possible.

Thank you for your reply. I completed the payment so please confirm and dispatch the products. I'm looking forward to receiving them. Thank you very much.

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I bought three of your pictures the other day. It was fast to arrive Japan and I'm very satisfied with the products. This time, I would like to purchase more of your pictures. (three to five pictures)
I have a proposal. Can I purchase your products directly from you?
I don't want to waste any money on the shipping fee so I would appreciate it if you could send your products as one package.
I'm planning to purchase another pictures of your work in the future.
If this proposal is acceptable, I'll sen you a list of the pictures I would like to purchase on my next e-mail.
I hope to receive your good response.

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I bought three of your pictures the other day. It was fast to arrive in Japan and I'm very satisfied with the products. This time, I would like to purchase more of your pictures. (three to five pictures)
I have a proposal. Can I purchase your products directly from you?
I don't want to waste any money on the shipping fee so I would appreciate it if you could send your products as one package.
I'm planning to purchase some more pictures of yours also in the future.
If this proposal is acceptable, I'll send you a list of the pictures I would like to purchase on my next e-mail.
I hope to receive your good response.

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*We will provide one hand-shake event ticket per one ticket for one person.
*If you lose your hand-shake event ticket, you won't be able to join the event. So please be careful.
(We will not re-issue hand-shake event tickets for any reason including loss, theft and damage.)
*You can not give present directly during this hand-shake event. Please entrust your present to our staff beforehand.
*Please understand that distribusion of the hand-shake event tickets will end with sold-out of the product.

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*We will provide only one hand-shake event ticket per one person.
*If you lose your hand-shake event ticket, you won't be able to join the event. So please be careful.
(We will not re-issue hand-shake event tickets for any reason including loss, theft and damage.)
*You can not give present directly during this hand-shake event. Please entrust your present to our staff beforehand.
*Please understand that distribusion of the hand-shake event tickets will end with sold-out of the product.

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「Mi Bandは競合機種よりも低利益な製品であるが、Xiaomiは消耗品市場に独創的な戦略で参入しました。その出荷量は、どれだけ早く一つの会社が中国市場のみを基盤としてある部門で主要な力となりうるのかを示しています。」とCanalysのアナリストであるJason Low氏は述べた。

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「Mi Bandは競合機種よりも低利益な製品ですが、Xiaomiはウェアラブル市場に独創的な戦略で参入しました。その出荷量は、一つの会社が中国市場のみを基盤としてある部門でどれだけ早く主要な力となりうるのかを示しています」とCanalysのアナリストであるJason Low氏は述べた。

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Damoは投影機に取り付き、どんな表面もタッチスクリーンへと変える。

消費者が古い携帯を捨ててスマートフォンに乗り換えていく中、私たちは他の古い非知能的な機器がスマート機器へと変化する時代に突入している。だが台湾のDamoに関しては、スマート化されたのはコーヒーメーカーやウォーターボトルではなくリビングの壁である。

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Damoは投影機を取り付けると、どんな表面もタッチスクリーンへと変えてしまう

消費者が古い携帯電話からスマートフォンに乗り換えている中、私たちは古くて賢くない機器がスマートな機器へと変化する時代に突入している。だが台湾のDamoに関しては、スマート化したのはコーヒーメーカーや水筒ではなくリビングの壁である。