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11/2 (Sat) AAA appeared "AGESTOCK2014 in Waseda Festival" general sales start!

October 20 (Mon) 10:00 ~

General sales start!

Purchase → ​​http from here: //urx.nu/d8mB

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On 11/2 (Sat) AAA will appear on the stage "AGESTOCK2014 in Waseda Festival" The general release starts!

October 20 (Mon) 10:00 ~

The general release starts!

Purchase → ​​http from here: //urx.nu/d8mB

元の翻訳
不好意思臨時連絡您。
首先，我想感謝自去年開始到今年年中，您對我的照顧。此外，也想要為我極端無理跋扈的態度，向您致上最高的歉意。
不知您於本周日的下午有沒有空，我想登門拜訪已表示歉意，若是不巧剛好有事要忙，可否通知我其他適合拜訪的時間呢？
可以理解要您撥冗見我無理的臉肯定是相當不愉快的事情，但請給我一次機會好嗎？
百忙中叨擾有失禮節，請多多指教。

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不好意思臨時連絡您。
首先，我想感謝自去年到今年年中您對我的照顧。此外，我也想要為我極端無禮跋扈的態度，向您致上最高的歉意。
如果您於本周日的下午有空的話，我想直接登門拜訪以表示歉意，若是您不巧剛好有事要忙，則我希望能再尋找其他適合拜訪的時間。
我能理解要您撥冗見我這張無禮的臉一定是相當不愉快的事情，但拜託給我一次道歉的機會好嗎？
百忙中打擾了，請多多指教。

元の翻訳
【INFO】Billboard Live Osaka 06-6342-7722
Info→http://www.billboard-live.com/pg/shop/show/index.php?mode=detail1&event=9248&shop=2

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【INFO】Billboard-LIVE Osaka 06-6342-7722
Details→http://www.billboard-live.com/pg/shop/show/index.php?mode=detail1&event=9248&shop=2

元の翻訳
X'mas live in NAGOYA Blue Note
12/22 (Mon) Nagoya Blue Note
http://www.nagoya-bluenote.com/

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X'mas live in NAGOYA Blue Note
Dec. 22 (Mon) Nagoya Blue Note
http://www.nagoya-bluenote.com/

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Hi there
Thank you for arranging fast shipping for me.

Although it is a little bit late, I have completed the site about 80%. Would you mind checking the site for me?
Please point out If there is any place need to be modified,
Because there are lots of places I want to modify, I will modify them day by day until finish.
About the photograph, please send me one if there is a chosen photo and I will replace it.

Thank you.
I want to remind that the tariff will occur when importing goods to Japan.

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Hi there
Thank you for arranging fast shipping for me.

Although it is a little bit late, I have completed the site about 80%. Would you mind checking the site for me?
Please point out If there is anything needs to be modified,
Because there are lots of things I want to modify, I will keep modifying day by day.
About the photograph, please send me one if there is anything you want me to use and I will replace it with the one.

Thank you.
I want to remind that the tariff will occur when importing goods to Japan.

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I have complete the split procedure for Package ID:00-682-3193 on web, but received rejection mail.
Why can't I split it?
Please tell me the reason If not available.
Please tell me the right procedure immediately If possible.
It does not matter if it takes $ 15 of fee.

Please response as soon as possible.

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I have complete [tense confusion] the split procedure for Package ID:00-682-3193 on web, but received [article] rejection mail.
Why can't I split it?
Please tell me the reason If not available [ambiguous].
Please tell me the right procedure immediately If possible [mistranslation].
It does not matter if it takes [word choice] $ 15 of fee.

Please response [parts of speech confusion] as soon as possible.

元の翻訳
Japanese candles "Fragrance of Lights " (light)

The types with perfumes will remind you nature or plants, and another type is non-perfume. No matter which one, you can use it in the dining room because the fragrance is light.

Pillar / Ryukuro (large)

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Japanese candles "Honoka (Fragrance of Lights) " (light)

There are two scented types with perfumes that reminds you of the nature or plants, and unscented type available. No matter which one, you can use it in the dining room because the fragrance is subtle.

Pillar / Ryukuro (large)

元の翻訳
Japanese candles "Fragrance of Lights " (light)

The types with perfumes will remind you nature or plants, and another type is non-perfume. No matter which one, you can use it in the dining room because the fragrance is light.

Pillar / Ryukuro (large)

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Japanese candles "Honoka - Fragrance of Lights "

The types with perfumes will remind you nature or plants, and another type is non-perfume. No matter which one, you can use it in the dining room because the fragrance is light.

Pillar / Ryukuro (large)

元の翻訳
■ History
Around 2003
Women Entrepreneurship School becomes popular, and rush trenders are begun to be attention by TV and magazines

November 2006
IT companies are paying more attention on blog promotion. Utilizing the trend leader, part of the current womedia, in blog promotion is rapid growth. It is the foundation of current social media marketing business.

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■ History
Around 2003
Women Entrepreneurship School becomes popular, and rush trenders are begun to be paid attention by TV and magazines

November 2006
IT companies are paying more attention on blog promotion. Utilizing the trend leader, part of the current womedia, in blog promotion is rapid growth. It is the foundation of current social media marketing business.

元の翻訳
Please click the button "INVENTORY" at the top of the screen, and paste ASIN which is copied, then search it.

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Click on "INVENTORY" button located at the top of the screen, and paste ASIN which is copied, then start searching.

元の翻訳
In the end, we are sending this message to express our sorry to all the buyers.
Please select your name.

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In the end, we are sending this message to express our [apologies] sorry to all the buyers.
Please select your name.

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Please click the 「Confirm shipment」at the next page.
The page will refresh twice.

Confirm the status has switched to 「Shipped」, then click 「Refund order」.

At the next page, please select 「Pricing Error」from the Full Refund list.

Enter 3 at Other concession. After that, you will see 「Submit Full Refund」on the screen. Please select Yes at the confirm letter.
In the end of this message, we are sorry to all the buyers. Select your name.

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Please click the 「Confirm shipment」at the next page.
The page will refresh twice.

Confirm the status has switched to 「Shipped」, then click 「Refund order」.

At the next page, please select 「Pricing Error」from the Full Refund list.

Enter 3 at Other concession. After that, you will see 「Submit Full Refund」on the screen. Please select Yes at the confirmation letter.
In the end, send a message of apology to all the buyers. Select your name.