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3. The Reading Room Project
2,500万人のパキスタンの子どもたちが教育を受ける権利を奪われていること、そして５歳から１６歳の子どもたちの６５％が簡単な物語すら読めない状況を受けて、the Reading Room Project (RRP)は自信をもってパキスタンの 低収入家庭の学齢期の子どもに学習教材のアクセスを提供していける。そして、支援環境のあるところにも提供する。

また、これは本に限った事ではない。パイロットプロジェクトでは、RRPは既にKarachiの学校と協定して子ども用のコンピューター学習プログラムを構成している。その子どもの多くは、それ以前にコンピューターに全く触ったことの無い子たちだ。

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3. The Reading Room Project
2,500万人のパキスタンの子どもたちが教育を受ける権利を奪われていること、そして５歳から１６歳の子どもたちの６５％が簡単な物語すら読めない状況を受けて、the Reading Room Project (RRP)はパキスタンの 低収入家庭の学齢期の子どもへの学習教材のアクセスの提供に意欲的である。そして、支援環境を整えての援助をしようと熱心である。

また、これは本に限った事ではない。試験的なプロジェクトでは、RRPは既にKarachiの学校と協定して子ども用のコンピューター学習プログラムを考案している。その子どもの多くは、それ以前にコンピえューターに全く触ったことの無い子どもたちだ。

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2011年以前はTencentのやり方は、第三者にゲームの一部分をライセンス付与し、社内でインターネットサービスを開発するものだった。収益の半分以上がライセンス付与のゲームと社内開発のゲームによるものであった。他の主要な収益源はTencentかパートナーによって作られたさまざまなバーチャルアイテムやプレミアムサービスを定期購入するメンバーシップ料金であった。この料金は当然ながらパートナーや第三社の開発者に支払われている。

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2011年以前はTencentのやり方は、別会社のゲームの一部分にライセンス付与し、社内でインターネットサービスを開発するものだった。収益の半分以上がライセンス付与のゲームと社内開発のゲームによるものであった。他の主要な収益源は、Tencentまたはパートナーによって開発されたさまざまなバーチャルアイテムやプレミアムサービスの提供をしているメンバーシップ料金であった。この料金は当然ながらパートナーや第三者の開発者に支払われている。

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Meet Youとは何か？
Tencent Techは、2013年4月の設立に際し、Meet Youを月経期間追跡とカレンダーとして製作したと述べているが、当社がソーシャルエレメンツを前年９月に発売した時に、強い牽引力が見え始めた。

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Meet Youとは何か？
Tencent Techは、2013年4月の設立に際し、Meet Youを月経期間追跡とカレンダーとして製作したと述べているが、当社がソーシャルな要素を前年９月に発売した時に、強い牽引力が見え始めた。

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この月経周期カレンダーアプリはたった1,500万米ドルの資金で完成して本国上陸した。そしてすぐに女性のソーシャルネットワークに変わっている。

女性用の中国のソーシャルライフスタイル用のアプリ、Meet YouはSeries Bにおいて1,500万米ドルを獲得したと発表したとTencent Techが報告している(hat-tip Technode)。

資金はMA拠点の国際投資社Matrix PartnersとWalthamが出資している。この企業が持つ莫大な中国企業株には、モバイル調査社Umeng社を含んでいる。この企業は先日、中国の人気恋愛ゲームアプリ、AlibabaとMomoに買収された。

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この月経周期カレンダーアプリは1,500万米ドルの資金を獲得したばかりである。そして早くも、女性のソーシャルネットワークになりつつある。

女性用の中国のソーシャルライフスタイル用のアプリ、Meet YouはSeries Bにおいて1,500万米ドルを獲得したと発表したとTencent Techが報告している(hat-tip Technode)。

資金はMA拠点の国際投資社Matrix PartnersとWalthamが出資している。この企業が持つ莫大な中国企業株には、モバイル調査社Umeng社を含んでいる。この企業は先日、中国の人気恋愛ゲームアプリ、AlibabaとMomoに買収された。

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Joshi-Raku [ Subject: Rakugo comic storytelling ]

▼Story
Cartoon about Girl’s rakugoka comic storyteller. In the scenario, there is a statement “this comic is to enjoy everyday talk whose degree does not prevent you from enjoying the cuteness of the girls.” So mainly, in each episode, the girls develop the story comically from ordinary tiny things.

▼What is Rakugo?
Rakugo is a kind of traditional story-telling art, which was established in Japan in Edo period and has been handed down to the present. It is also known as “Otoshi Banashi (Storytelling with punch-line )” or “Hanashi (Storytelling)” for short.

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Joshi-Raku [ Subject: Rakugo comic storytelling ]

▼Story
Cartoon about Girl’s rakugoka comic storyteller. As in the scenario, there is a statement “this comic is to enjoy everyday talk whose degree does not prevent you from enjoying the cuteness of the girls.” So mainly, in each episode, the girls develop the story comically from ordinary tiny things.

▼What is Rakugo?
Rakugo is a kind of traditional story-telling art, which was established in Japan in Edo period and has been handed down to the present. It is also known as “Otoshi Banashi (Storytelling with punch-line )” or “Hanashi (Storytelling)” for short.

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“Nourin”…, when imaging the content only from the title, is it the story to tell us the greatness and difficulty of agriculture, like “Gin no Saji (the Silver Spoon)”? I once have thought like that.
No, some parts are serious. Such parts suggest us the issues we must deal with sincerely like the future aspect of Japanese agriculture, which the author Mr. Shiro Shiratory found out though his steady gathering activities.
However, basically it is filled will parody; we can enjoy without thinking anything difficult.
That’s because the title itself has the atmosphere of a certain anime featuring a rock band club….

The story is set in Gifu Prefectural Tamo Agricultural High School.

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“Nourin”…, when imagining the content only from the title, similar to “Gin no Saji (the Silver Spoon), the story probably tell us the magnificence and difficulty of agriculture. At one point in time, I had thought like that.
Well , some parts are serious. There are parts that bring up issues that must dealt with seriously, like the future of Japanese agriculture, which the author Mr. Shiro Shiratory began seeing while steadily collecting resources.
However, it is basically filled with parodies, and it can even be enjoyed with a blank mind.
After all, the title itself gives off the vibe of a certain anime featuring a rock band club….

The story is set in Gifu Prefectural Tamo Agricultural High School.

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デュアルブート: アンドロイド4.2.2とWindows8.1の２つのOSで
利用開始と価格についてはまだ未定

Asusがスーパーヒーローの映画なら、これは、会社が推している製品が別のものに変化することができる、「トランスフォーマー」に値する。Asus Transformer Book Duet TD300の製品の場合であれば、ユーザーはボタン１つでOSをWindowsからAndroidに転換でき、スクリーンからキーボードを切り離してラップトップからポータブルタブレットPCにつなげられる。The Micromax Laptab(下記)も同様である。

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ASUS Transformer Book Duet TD300↵
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デュアルブート: Android4.2.2とWindows8.1の2つのOSで
利用開始と価格についてはまだ未定

Asusがスーパーヒーローの映画なら、これは、会社が推している製品が別のものに変化することができる、「トランスフォーマー」に値する。Asus Transformer Book Duet TD300の製品の場合であれば、ユーザはボタン1つでOSをWindowsからAndroidに転換でき、スクリーンからキーボードを切り離してラップトップからポータブルタブレットPCにつなげられる。The Micromax Laptab(下記)も同様である。

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#habit
It would be grateful to let me know when the new Tourissue goods.
I am sorry for making you to explain the same thing many times.

#will
Thank you for your corporation. It would be helpful if you put the right purchase price.

#golf Xcess
Thank you for the bill.
The email said it was $65 for shipment together, but the bill says it has been updated at $60.
So far, there are no other goods I want, so I would like you to send only one item. I will make the payment, so please let me know if there are any problems.

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#habit
I would be grateful if you could let me know when a new Tourissue arrives.
I am sorry for making you explain the same thing many times.

#will
Thank you for your corporation. It would be helpful if you could write the right purchase price.

#golf Xcess
Thank you for the invoice.
The email said it was $65 for shipment together, but the bill says it has been updated at $60.
So far, there are no other goods I want, so I would like you to send only this one. I will make the payment, so please let me know if there are any problems.

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#Golf Xcess
もし別のものと一緒に発想すれば、６５ドルで差し上げます。

#will
それはいいですね、そうします。送り状は全額合わせたものにすればよろしいですか？

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#Golf Xcess
もし別のものと一緒に発想すれば、６５ドルで差し上げます。

#will
それはいいですね、そうします。送り状は全額にすればよろしいですか？

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It’s OK for the workplace! French Nail.

In the Japanese offices, we cannot be clad as casual as Western nations. (In the tacit rule) Also, it is important to be neat. So be sure not to be overly decorous. It is the office manner to enjoy fashions “unintentionally”.

What is French Nail?
Though French Nail is directly interpreted as “The French style Nail”, in fact French Nail was born in the United States.

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It’s OK for the workplace! French Nail.

In the Japanese offices, we cannot be clad as casual as Western nations. (In the tacit rule) Also, it is important to be neat. So be sure not to be overly decorous. It is the office manner to enjoy fashions “unintentionally”.

What is French Nail?
Though French Nail is directly interpreted as “The French-style Nail”, in fact French Nail was born in the United States.

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You are surely to feel like trying from tomorrow! Nail Art for fashionable Japanese girls

Japanese girls really love fashions. Here we introduce the Japanese nail affairs. The Japanese way of nail art is unique―nails for workplace considered for the business manner, nails with fine decoration, and cute character patterns.

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You will surely feel like trying it starting tomorrow! Nail Art for fashionable Japanese girls

Japanese girls really love fashions. Here we introduce the Japanese nail affairs. The Japanese way of nail art is unique―nails for workplace, that consider business manners, nails with fine decoration, and cute character patterns.

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A Japanese museum becomes the 7th in the world?

In 2012, this museum, which is in the Ikeda city, Osaka, was awarded as world 7th ranking for one branch.

The ranking is…

“The 18 of world’s weird museum where we would like to go until we die”

…
This ranking was published by Trip Adviser.
The 1st was “Pez Museum” in the state of California, the United States.
Then what point made the Japanese museum to be chosen as the 7th rank of the world?

“Instant Ramen Invention memorial museum”

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A Japanese museum becomes the 7th in the world?

In 2012, this museum, which is in the Ikeda city, Osaka, was awarded as world's 7th ranking for one branch.

The ranking is for…

“The Top 18 Extraordinary Museums to go in the world before you die”

…
This ranking was published by Trip Adviser.
The 1st was “Burlingame Museum of PEZ Memorabilia” in the state of California, the United States.
Then what point made the Japanese museum to be chosen as the 7th rank of the world?

“The Instant Ramen Museum”

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Cute container for pocket warmer increases

Recently there have been more containers for pocket warmer designed with characters.
When putting pocket warmer into the container, it becomes hotter even more because sealing performance increases, so that we recommend the containers.

How was that?

If you come to Japan in the cold winter, why don’t you try that?
If you like, you can bring it to your home and you might please your family or friends!

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Cute container for pocket warmer increases

Recently there have been more containers for pocket warmer designed with characters.
When you put the pocket warmer into the container, it becomes even more hotter because sealing performance increases, so that is why we recommend the containers.

How was that?

If you come to Japan in the cold winter, why don’t you try it?
If you like, you can bring it back to your home and you might please your family or friends!

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Why is it so popular?

Heat Techs were first released in 2003, at the aim to be sold 1.5 million quantities. The sale has been better each year, and 100 million were sold in 2011. The total sum of the sale reached 299 million.

Heat Tech, the yearly sale output in 2011 achieved 100 million. Despite that the item is only for the winter time, the amount of sale is tremendous. What is attributed to that?

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Why is it so popular?

Uniqlo HEATTECH was first released in 2003, at the aim to be sold 1.5 million quantities. The sale has been better each year, and 100 million were sold in 2011. The total sum of the sale reached 299 million.

HEATTECH, the yearly sale output in 2011 achieved 100 million. Despite that the item is only for the winter time, the amount of sale is tremendous. What is attributed to that?

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The circumstance of the roof top called Sky Deck.

It is the highest open-space observatory in Japan.
However, it might be closed due to the weather condition. Please forgive us.

[Sky Deck opening hours ] 11:00 to 20:00 (Entrance: until 19:30)

But you can also enjoy whole view of Tokyo enough from 52-storied Tokyo City View, without extra charge!
Before the sunset, we recommend you go to the observatory (or the rooftop).

Because, if you do…

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The appearance similar to a rooftop called Sky Deck.

It is the highest open-space observatory in Japan.
However, it might be closed due to the weather condition. Please forgive us.

[Sky Deck opening hours ] 11:00 to 20:00 (Last Entry: until 19:30)

But you can also enjoy whole view of Tokyo from the 52-storied Tokyo City View, without extra charge!
Before the sunset, we recommend you go to the observatory (or the rooftop).

Because, if you do…

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When you come to Tokyo, one of the most modernized metropolises, don’t you want to observe the whole landscape of Tokyo?
If so, let’s climb up the Tokyo Tower!

…you might think that. But, wait a minute. If you do so, The Tokyo Tower, the symbol of Tokyo cannot be included of the scenery you are going to observe.

“I want to see the landscape with the Tokyo Tower…(;_;)” don’t you?
Moreover…

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When you come to Tokyo, one of the most modernized metropolises, don’t you want to observe its whole landscape?
If so, let’s climb up Tokyo Tower!

…you might think that. But wait a minute. If you do so, Tokyo Tower, the symbol of Tokyo, cannot be included in the scenery you are going to observe.

“I want to see the landscape with Tokyo Tower…(;_;)” Don’t you?
Moreover…

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“SAKURA” series (beverage ver.)

“SAKURA white chocolate” (right) and “SAKURA white chocolate Frappuccino ®” (left)

The pictures are the 2 kinds of Sakura drinks released in spring, 2013.

They are milk-based drinks flavored with cherry syrup and white chocolate, and no coffee.
It is said that ingredients include genuine cherry flowers and leaves.

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“SAKURA” series (beverage ver.)

“SAKURA white chocolate” (right) and “SAKURA white chocolate Frappuccino ®” (left)

The pictures are the 2 kinds of Sakura drinks released in spring, 2013.

They are milk-based drinks flavored with cherry blossom syrup and white chocolate, and no coffee.
It is said that the ingredients include genuine cherry blossom flowers and leaves.