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進めても良さそうですね。記入済みの販売店申請書を返送してください。そうすれば日本のオンライン市場でsmall-privateを販売する為の許可証をお渡しします。もし他のアジア地域で販売希望であればお知らせください。可能かどうか確認してみます。

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進めても良さそうですね。記入済みの販売店申請書を返送してください。そうすれば日本のオンライン市場(マーケットプレイス）でsmall-privateを販売する為の許可証をお渡しします。もし他のアジア地域で販売希望であればお知らせください。可能かどうか確認してみます。

元の翻訳
荷物は発送されました。DHLより追跡番号がメールで送られてきます。
support@dares.jpに追跡番号を受信しておられますでしょうか。

そのメールアドレス宛の物をご確認下さい。そこによくおくっていました。もしDHLにメールアドレスを送らなければいけないのであればご連絡ください。

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荷物は発送されました。DHLより追跡番号がメールで送られてきます。
support@dares.jpから追跡番号を受信しておられますでしょうか。

そのメールアドレスからのメールをご確認下さい。そこによくおくっていました。もしDHLにメールアドレスを送らなければいけないのであればご連絡ください。

元の翻訳
［Sponsorship］RecoChoku Co., Ltd.
［Special Support］American Express Department Gift Card
［Project and Production］Executive committee for MUSIC FOR ALL, ALL FOR ONE

［Contact］Kyodo Tokyo 0570-550-799

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[Sponsorship] RecoChoku Co., Ltd.
[Special Support] American Express Department Gift Card
[Project and Production] Executive committee for MUSIC FOR ALL, ALL FOR ONE

[Contact] Kyodo Tokyo 0570-550-799

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Hello.
I am *** and live in Japan.

This product is excellent and very popular in Japan.
In a case if I will buy 10 of these at the same time, will you sell by 10 pounds including a shipping charge, pleased
I'd like to transact business with you continuously. Thank you very much for you cooperation.

Here is a shipping address below.

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Hello.
I am *** and live in Japan.

This product is excellent and very popular in Japan.
If I buy 10 of these at the same time, will you sell them by [wrong proposition] 10 pounds [mistranslation] including a shipping charge, pleased [?]
I'd like to transact [word choice] business with you continuously. Thank you very much for you cooperation.

Here is a shipping address below:

元の翻訳
Hello.
I am *** and live in Japan.

This product is excellent and very popular in Japan.
In a case if I will buy 10 of these at the same time, will you sell by 10 pounds including a shipping charge, pleased
I'd like to transact business with you continuously. Thank you very much for you cooperation.

Here is a shipping address below.

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Hello,
My name is *** and I live in Japan.

This product is excellent and very popular in Japan.
If I buy 10 pieces would you sell them for 360 points, including shipping fees?
I hope to be able to continue business with you in the future.

Shipping address

元の翻訳
分かりました。通しておきました。

次の送り状の題名を変えた方が良いかもしれませんね。例えば'Getting started at Languagewire'より'Soundrooe invoice October2014'のほうが良いかもしれない。あんまり変わらないし;)))

みなさんお元気で。いつもありがとう。

パートナーのSoundropeがどうも添付した請求書の支払いをまだ受け取っていないようです。一度確認してもらえませんか。inbox番号は079988予約されています。

私どもの会計係によると、8月1日に支払ったようです。下にあるスクリーンショットを確認願います。

もう一度確認してもらえませんか。見落としてませんか。

ありがとうございます。そして申し訳ありません。

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分かりました。通しておきました。

次の送り状の題名を変えた方が良いかもしれませんね。例えば'Getting started at Languagewire'より'Soundrooe invoice October2014'のほうが良いかもしれない。あんまり重要ではないですが;)))

みなさんお元気で。いつもありがとう。

パートナーのSoundropeがどうも添付した請求書の支払いをまだ受け取っていないようです。一度確認してもらえませんか。inbox番号は079988予約されています。

私どもの会計係によると、8月1日に支払ったようです。下にあるスクリーンショットを確認願います。

もう一度確認してもらえませんか。見落としてませんか。

ありがとうございます。そして申し訳ありません。

元の翻訳
I will order Bearing Mount and screw of A as I asked by a previous mail.
It is OK for the used one as you suggested.
There is no problem with a part which was used for the returned A.
Please sell it as cheap as you can. Please show the price in an invoice.

Has the B already delivered?
If it is possible, I hope you to send it with the product together of this time.

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I will order Bearing Mount and screw of A as I asked by a previous mail.
It is OK for the used one as you recommended.
There is no problem with a part which was used for the returned A.
Please sell them at your best price. Please quote us the price in an invoice.

Has the B already delivered?
If it is possible, I hope you to send it with the product together of this time.

元の翻訳
・公式ホームページ: http://inazumarock.com/
・公式Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/InazumaRock/
・公式Twitter: https://twitter.com/irf_official/
・公式YouTubeチャンネル: https://www.youtube.com/user/irfofficialchannel

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・公式ホームページ: http://inazumarock.com/
・公式Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/InazumaRock/
・公式Twitter: https://twitter.com/irf_official/
・公式YouTubeチャンネル: https://www.youtube.com/user/irfofficialchannel

元の翻訳
新発売の毛布は良質なオーガニックコットンでつくられています。1986年より、ペルーにある自社農場で育てた環境に優しいコットンを製造しているスエーデンの会社との共同生産です。Cross Bkanket社製の製品はいつも上質でオリジナルに溢れています。大変繊細で稀な素材から出来ているので、黒と白の色の強さが変化するかもしれません。

100%オーガニックコットン

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新発売の毛布は良質なオーガニックコットンでつくられています。1986年より、ペルーにある自社農場で育てた環境に優しいコットンを製造しているスエーデンの会社との共同生産です。Cross Bkanket社製の製品はいつも上質でオリジナルに溢れています。大変繊細で稀な素材から出来ているので、黒と白の色の濃淡が変化するかもしれません。

100%オーガニックコットン

元の翻訳
Is it really difficult for you to prepare a demostration site by middle of October? Do you really need so many hours to prepare the site? I dobut there's something wrong with you.

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Is it really difficult for you to prepare a demostration [spelling] site by mid-October? Do you really need so many hours to prepare the server? I dobut [spelling] there's something wrong with you [?].

元の翻訳
Is it really difficult for you to prepare a demostration site by middle of October? Do you really need so many hours to prepare the site? I dobut there's something wrong with you.

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Would the demo site not be available until mid October? Does it take that long to get the server ready? It's very doubtful.

元の翻訳
I am confused to get your claim about the product which was sold about 2 months ago.
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To be honest, the razor you bought was under super high condition since I had been selling.
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I expect it is known how it is valuable in the world.
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I will give you a big discount when you will buy one next time because you are my important customer. I hope you stop claiming.
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I have a experience to live in Moscow for four years so I feel people in Russica are my friends.↵

Thank you very much for your cooperation and your understanding.

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I am confused about your claim regarding the product I sold about 2 months ago.
To be honest, the razor blade you bought was under super high condition since I had been selling.
It's one of the most valuable ones in the world.
I will give you a large discount when you will buy one next time because you are my important customer. I hope you withdraw your claim.
I lived in Moscow for four years, so I feel people in Russia are my friends.
Thank you very much for your cooperation and your understanding.

元の翻訳
I am confused to get your claim about the product which was sold about 2 months ago.

To be honest, the razor you bought was under super high condition since I had been selling.

I expect it is known how it is valuable in the world.

I will give you a big discount when you will buy one next time because you are my important customer. I hope you stop claiming.

I have a experience to live in Moscow for four years so I feel people in Russica are my friends.

Thank you very much for your cooperation and your understanding.

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I am confused to get your claim about the product which was sold about 2 months ago.

To be honest, the razor you bought was one of the best I had ever sold.

It was one of the most valuable razors in the world.

I will give you a big discount when you will buy one next time because you are my important customer. I ask that you please remove the claim.

I have a experience to living in Moscow for four years so I feel people in Russia are my friends.

Thank you very much for your cooperation and your understanding.