Paul Dots (premiumdotz) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
I would like to pay by credit card. How do I do it? Can I pay by PayPal?
Is the product a brand new?
The shipping address is as below.
Thank you.

修正後
Thank you for your reply.
I would like to pay by credit card. How do I do it? Can I pay by PayPal?
Is this a brand new product?
The shipping address is as below.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
*The shining Uchiwa can be claimed on the spot of the hall on the performance date.
* Up to 8 Uchiwa is available per 1 person per 1 performance.
*Please understand the refund of the ticket charge due from the change of the performer is unavailable.
*There is the probability of the change of the times of the entrance/the curtain raise.

修正後
*The shining Uchiwa can be claimed in the venue on the actual performance date.
*A person can order eight (8) Uchiwas per performance.
*Please understand the refund of the ticket charge from a change of performer is unavailable.
*There is the probability of a change of performer at the time of entrance or curtain raise.

元の翻訳
It is way too straight forward, and wish it was put more in a native English expressions. This translation is far from acceptance."

Well then, from next time by offering a hearing session ahead of time and actively improving the item by proposing like "This line needs to stand out so instead of the direct translation we could come up with an alternate catch copy!", or "How about incorporating rewriting work for the better-to-read English?"

These are important feesbacks, but turning these claims into opporutunities is what the sales rep can do who receive those claims from the customers for real.

修正後
This was what the customer said: "It is way too literal. I wish it was translated more naturally. This translation is far from acceptance."

From here on, conduct a consultation with the customer beforehand with statements to gradually improve your product such as: "This line needs to stand out so instead of a literal translation, we could come up with an alternate catch copy!" or "How about incorporating a rewriting project to make it easier to read?"

This is an important feedback. However, turning these claims into opportunities is the job of a sales rep who receive claims from directly speaking with the customers.

元の翻訳
"This translation is too direct and I wanted this to be composed of more natural English. I cannot accept the translation like this". The customer said.

For the next project, you can proactively consult your customer by asking "How about costructing sentences similar to catch copies instead of direct translation because this part really catches the readers?" or "How would you like a re-writing project that makes Englsh easier to read?" to improve your products.

This is important as a feedback, but the only people who can change the complaints into the chances for the next projects are the sales reps as they are the only ones receiving complaints from and directly talking to the customers.

修正後
"This translation is too literal and I wanted this to be more natural. I cannot accept a translation like this." The customer said.

From here on, you can proactively consult your customer by asking "Since this composition stands out, how about constructing sentences similar to catch copies instead of a literal translation?" or "How would you like a re-writing project that would make it easier to read?" and the likes to gradually improve your products.

This is an important feedback. However, the only people who can change the complaints into opportunities are sales representatives who receives complaints from directly talking to customers.

元の翻訳
Hello,

Did you receive the previous message I sent to you?

Are you planning to engage in Japanese market?

We are really impressed by your company and products.
We would love to see you in Japanese market.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

修正後
Hello,

Did you receive the previous message I sent to you?

Are you planning to engage in Japanese market?

We are really impressed by your company and products.
We would love to see you in Japanese market.

Looking forward to hearing from you.