Elmo Mama (kazue_ishikawa) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for sending the invoice.
I have separated the payment into 2.

First payment : 5780 dollars
Second payment : 1708 dollars
Total : 7488 dollars

Please kindly confirm

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Thank you very much for sending me the invoice.
I have payed 2 installments of the payment.

First payment : 5780 dollars
Second payment : 1708 dollars
Total : 7488 dollars

Please kindly confirm.

元の翻訳
As well, if your screening accepted safely, we are going to send you member ID and password later.
※It takes about 1 or 3 business days.

We are sorry but, if you un adapted at screening, we will notice you with the resason of why.
To complete your entry, you need to confirm insufficient contents.

We appreciate your understanding.

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As well, if your screening accepted safely, we are going to send you a member ID and password later.
※ It takes about 1 to 3 business days.

We are sorry but, if you don’t get through the screening, we will notice you with the resason of why.
To complete your entry, you need to confirm insufficient contents.

We appreciate your understanding.

元の翻訳
了解しました。つまりアメリカへの送料は28ドルということですね。私はアメリカにも住所があり、そちらに送ったほうが好都合に思えるからです。（アメリカの住所から私の今住んでいる国に後日送ってもらうようにします）。送る際合計150ドルの領収書を添えるのも忘れないでください。（送料込み122+28=150ドル）。

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了解しました。つまりアメリカへの送料も28ドルということですね。私はアメリカにも住所があり、そちらに送ったほうが好都合に思えるからです。（アメリカの住所から私の今住んでいる国に後日送ってもらうようにします）。送る際合計150ドルの領収書を添えるのも忘れないでください。（送料込み122+28=150ドル）。

元の翻訳
こんにちは。たびたび失礼いたします。

明日の3月20日注文した場合、この時計はいつモンタナ(ZIP コード　59254)に到着しますか？

カナダドルでおいくらになりますか？

よろしくお願いいたします。

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こんにちは。たびたび失礼いたします。

明日の3月20日に注文した場合、この時計はいつモンタナ(郵便番号59254)に到着しますか？

カナダドルでおいくらになりますか？

よろしくお願いいたします。

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting us.

Please take a look at the catalog for the detailed information of the item in the attached PDF files.

The warranty period is for 3 years.
Our store handles the repairs.
For the detailed warranty information, please check the following Web site.

The pictures of the item depend on the monitor conditions.
It seems that the patterns of waves are not clearly shown in the pictures of Amazon.
This watch has the patterns of waves, and you can see them in the attached file.

Thank you again for your interest.

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Thank you for contacting us.

Please take a look at the catalog for the detailed information of the item as the attached PDF files.

The warranty period is for 3 years.
Our store handles the repairs.
For the detailed warranty information, please check the following Web site.

The pictures of the item depend on the monitor conditions.
It seems that the patterns of waves are not clearly shown in the pictures of Amazon.
This watch has the patterns of waves, and you can see them in the attached file.

Thank you again for your interest.

元の翻訳
Due to popular demand, "TOHOSHINKI LIVE TOUR 2014 ~ TREE ~" extra concerts has been decided.
With one concert at Tokyo Dome and two concerts at Kyocera Dome Osaka, there are three extra concerts in total.
Live tour available nationwide with 29 concerts in 11 locations.

[Tour schedule details]
TOHOSHINKI LIVE TOUR 2014 ~ TREE ~

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In response to your hot demand, "TOHOSHINKI LIVE TOUR 2014 ~ TREE ~" extra concerts have been decided to be held.
With one concert at Tokyo Dome and two concerts at Kyocera Dome Osaka, there are three extra concerts in total.
Live tour available nationwide with 29 concerts in 11 locations.

[Tour schedule details]
TOHOSHINKI LIVE TOUR 2014 ~ TREE ~

元の翻訳
Not only in South Korea, TOHOSHINKI debut in Japan in April 2005 as a new face.
They gradually attained popularity with singing in Japanese. In 2007, they held the national hall tour "TOHOSHINKI 2nd LIVE TOUR 2007 ～FIVE IN THE BLACK～", that caused a competition to get tickets.

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Not only in South Korea, TOHOSHINKI made a debut in Japan in April 2005 as a new face of J-pop singer.
They gradually attained popularity with singing in Japanese. In 2007, they held the national hall tour "TOHOSHINKI 2nd LIVE TOUR 2007 ～FIVE IN THE BLACK～", that caused a competition to get tickets.

元の翻訳
★ Limited Time Offer: Special Price on Official Goods! [30% Off] ★ Sale at mu-mo shop!

mu-mo shop's special sales campaign starts now and will run for a limited time only while supplies last.

Out of season TOHOSHINKI official goods are for sale for a special price! 30% off while supplies last.

Don't miss your chance to score the stuff you want at a low price! Come and get it!

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★ Limited Time Offer: Special Price on Official Goods! [30% Off] ★ Now on sale at mu-mo shop!

mu-mo shop's special sales campaign starts now and will run for a limited time in a limited quantity.

Out of season TOHOSHINKI official goods are for sale for a special price! 30% off in a limited quantity.

Don't miss the chance to score the stuff you want at a low price! Come and get it!

元の翻訳
私はアメリカ在住です。OSD様は英語表記のメニューに対応されていますか？NTSCとは互換されていますでしょうか？
アメリカまでの送料はいくらかかりますか？追加料金はありますか？商品の写真を送っていただけますか？写真は新しいものでしょうか？

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私はアメリカ在住です。OSD様は英語表記のメニューに対応されていますか？NTSCとは互換されていますでしょうか？
アメリカまでの送料はいくらかかりますか？追加料金はありますか？商品の写真を送っていただけますか？写真は新しいものでしょうか？

元の翻訳
Radiation therapy is used not only as the radical radiation therapy for the purpose of complete healing but also as palliative radiation treatment for the purpose to reduce various symptoms caused by cancer.

It is possible to improve the quality of life by alleviating or eliminating the painful symptoms, even in an advanced cancer or in a recurred and spread cancer which are judged to be difficult to control.

Full recovery (mainly for cancers without distant metastases).
Eliminate or reduce pain caused by bone metastases.

Hemostases of bringing up bloody phlegm due to lung cancer and of melena due to gastric or colon cancers.

Improve difficulties in breathing due to lung cancer.

Reduce symptoms such as headache, nausea, paralysis due to brain metastases


High-precision radiation therapy is,


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Radiation therapy is used not only as the radical radiation therapy for the purpose of complete healing but also as palliative radiation treatment for the purpose of reducing various symptoms caused by cancer.

It is possible to improve the quality of life by alleviating or eliminating the painful symptoms, even in an advanced cancer or in a recurred and spread cancer which are judged to be difficult to control.

Full recovery (mainly for cancers without distant metastases).
Eliminate or reduce pain caused by bone metastases.

Hemostases of bringing up bloody phlegm due to lung cancer and of melena due to gastric or colon cancers.

Improve difficulties in breathing due to lung cancer.

Reduce symptoms such as headache, nausea, paralysis due to brain metastases


High-precision radiation therapy is,


元の翻訳
I have send the payment just before,
you should see it by next week.

It seems that if we use the Intermediary Bank, in some cases ↵
we will have to pay commission to the bank.

I have been told that I can not pay the commission for the Intermediary Bank,↵
so if the there is commission occur, I will pay it with next order.

About the payment, I used bank transfer this time, but if possible↵
I would prefer to use paypal from next time. Please let me know if it's OK.

I think there won't be any problem if I cover the commission to the bank.
The commission for the bank transfer was $68, so i guess the commission for paypal
won't be much difference,

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I sent the payment earlier, and
you should have it within next week.

It seems that there may be an intermediary bank for this transaction and they will take commissions.

I was told that I cannot pay the commission for the intermediary bank beforehand, so if commissions are demanded, I will pay it when I will make an order next time.

About the payment, I used bank transfer this time, but if possible, can you please ↵
allow me to pay by paypal from next time?

I think there won't be any problem if I cover the fee to the bank. Is it right?
The fee for the bank transfer was $68 this time, so I guess the one for paypal
won't have much difference.

元の翻訳
A barely
just before a risky situation
to some extent to be able to taste the thrill
for the sake of their own selfishness,they sacrifice others.


It is a game that the red person should protect someone barely as much as possible. we want some thrill on it so please have it barely as possible.
we don't like it harmful.
the black sphere's speed will be determined by the power guage.
Let's say it will stop by pressing the brake.
But the black sphere won't stop suddenly.So you should please find a right timing somewhere there

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A barely
just before a risky situation
to some extent to be able to taste the thrill
for the sake of their own selfishness, they sacrifice others.


It is a game that the red person should protect someone barely as much as possible. We want some thrill on it so please have it barely as possible.
We don't like it harmful.
The black sphere's speed will be determined by the power guage.
Let's say it will stop by pressing the brake.
But the black sphere won't stop suddenly. So you should please find a right timing somewhere there

元の翻訳
Now, my Chinese business partner suggested that because it is easier to communicate between two Chinese---is it possible for him to contact Mr. Phillip Law or Mr. Albert Lee directly by phone?
We hope to then provide you with my business partner's company address as well as shipping information within China.

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Now, my Chinese business partner suggested that because it is easier to communicate between two Chinese---is it possible for him to contact Mr. Phillip Law or Mr. Albee Lee directly by phone?
We hope to then provide you with my business partner's company address as well as shipping information within China.

元の翻訳
Countdown to the Olympic year in Sochi.
Enjoying the sunrise on New Year's Day from a charter flight that is flying around Mt.Fuji.
Seeing a snow scene at the famous temple in Kyoto.
A new island grew and came to connect with a neighboring island.
Using a 3-D printer for unsolved murder cases.
A hidden picture drawn by da Vinci in Milan.
B-1 grand prize was held in Aichi prefecture.
Japanese captain boards a Russian rocket for the first time.
A sales of winning professional baseball team has started.
A cat and a rabbit took a walk together.
In Hokkaido people shouted for joy because of participator Kasai's brilliant in the Olympic game.

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Countdown to the Olympic year in Sochi.
Enjoying the sunrise on New Year's Day from a charter flight that is flying around Mt.Fuji.
Seeing a snow scene at the famous temple in Kyoto.
A new island grew and came to connect with a neighboring island.
Using a 3-D printer for unsolved murder cases.
A hidden picture drawn by da Vinci in Milan.
B-1 grand prize was held in Aichi prefecture.
A Christmas event was held in Tokyo Disney Resort.↵
Japanese captain boards a Russian rocket for the first time.
A sales of winning professional baseball team has started.
A cat and a rabbit took a walk together.
In Hokkaido people shouted for joy because of participator Kasai's brilliant feat in the Olympic game.

元の翻訳
オリジナルの状態の商品280点と、冷却された状態の商品120点の合計360点、
総額NZD$4,269（約38万円）（1ユニットにつきNZD$12）を返品したい、ということですね。

弊社はお客様と今後も末永くお付き合い致したいと考えております。また、お客さまにとってもご返送いただく手間は大変煩わしいと存じます。
これらを鑑みまして、「ご購入いただいた1,070円 (NZD$12)」と、「お客様がその商品を売却することで見込める収入」との差額を弊社がお支払いするということではいかがでしょうか。
約NZD$8.50（760円）くらいでしょうか、どうぞお見積り頂けますよう、お願い致します。

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オリジナルの状態の商品280点と、冷却された状態の商品120点の合計360点、
総額NZD$4,269（約38万円）（1個につきNZD$12）を返品したい、ということですね。

弊社はお客様と今後も末永くお付き合い致したいと考えております。また、お客さまにとってもご返送いただく手間は大変煩わしいと存じます。
これらを鑑みまして、「ご購入いただいた1,070円 (NZD$12)」と、「お客様が利益を得るためのその商品の販売額」との差額を弊社がお支払いするということではいかがでしょうか。
約NZD$8.50（760円）くらいでよろしいでしょうか？ご確認をお願い致します。

元の翻訳
市場の再オープンの一環として、販売者へ規則を設定、この趣旨は、値段の安定化及び価値低下の阻止です。全販売者は、新規の条件に署名後、提出します。簡略に述べると、販売価格が１５０米ドル、年間のセールス開催回数が４回（４半期ごとに１回）、各セールスの時間は２４時間から７２時間、最大割引率は３５％です。
セールスは、販売者単位ではなく、販売ルートにより行なわれます。
最終的な詳細については、検討中です。

準備完了後、速やかに、通知のみならず署名のため、別のメールにより、新規のT&Cについてお知らせします。

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市場への参入を再開するために、我が社の商品価格の安定を維持し、価格の下落を抑えるために販売者の基本原則を作りました。この趣旨は、値段の安定化及び価値低下の阻止です。全販売者は、新規の条件に署名後、提出します。簡略に述べると、販売価格が１５０米ドル、年間のセールス開催回数が４回（４半期ごとに１回）、各セールスの時間は２４時間から７２時間、最大割引率は３５％です。
セールスは、販売者単位ではなく、販売ルートにより行なわれます。
最終的な詳細については、検討中です。

準備完了後、速やかに、通知のみならず署名のため、別のメールにより、新規のT&Cについてお知らせします。

元の翻訳
[OK]、私は845.00ドル（$ 60.00送料+785.00リング）をあなたのカードに請求されます
私はまた、あなたの過去の領収書が含まれます。
また、なぜあなたは多くの古典的なオーバルリングを買ったの？

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[OK]、私は845.00ドル（$ 60.00送料+$785.00リング）をあなたのカードに請求いたします。
あなたの過去の領収書も含みます。
また、なぜあなたは多くの古典的なオーバルリングを買ったの？