Karen Cornish (karekora) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
I think it is the best way to have one of your update kit sent to me.
Now I am going to my update kit repaired, I am not sure if it will be in time for Commissioning.
In the former work, A company got so angry about update kit issue.
If Commissioning is not in time, I will lose face from A company.

修正後
I think it is best to have one of your update kits sent to me.
I am going to have my update kit repaired, therefore I am not sure if it will be done in time for commissioning.
Previously, A company got angry about the update kit issue.
If commissioning is not done in time, I will lose trust from A company.

元の翻訳
The manufacturer arranges for the item after making a payment.
Would you send the order to 2 different customers by separating it?
Or if I do not change amount of the item ordered, can't I change the item number that was ordered? As I pay the item within the next week, would you send it earlier?↵
As I have accepted sending the item more than last year, I sent the item behind schedule this time. As this customer sells at high price and will order the next time, would you give me a small discount? The reason is that as I cannot send within the period, I send by air this time.

修正後
The manufacturer arranges the item after making a payment.
Is it possible to send the order to 2 different customers by separating them?
Or, if the order amount isn’t changed, can I instead change the item number that was ordered? I will pay for the item within the next week - is it possible to send the item sooner?↵
I sent the item behind schedule as I have accepted a lot more orders than last year. Is a small discount feasible, as this customer is selling at high price and will order again. As I cannot send within the period this time, I will send it by airmail.