林　恵 (hayame) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
"Exclusivo para mulheres"
"Proibida a entrada de homens"
"Caso confirmada a entrada de homens, solicitaremos a sua retirada"

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"Uso exclusivo para mulheres"
"Proibida a entrada de homens"
"Caso confirmada a presença de homens, solicitaremos a sua retirada"

元の翻訳
I want to order the following
So I have a question

Order Quantity
64GB
・Black 50 pieces
・Brown 50 pieces

How much is per piece?
・How is the payment of the amount after the discount?
・How much is the special delivery?
・When is the shipping after the order?

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I want to order the following.
And I have some questions.

Order Quantity
64GB
・Black 50 pieces
・Brown 50 pieces

How much is the price per piece?
・How do I settle the payment of the amount after the discount?
・How much is the express delivery?
・When will the products be shipped after the order is placed?

元の翻訳
I have a question about acquiring your company's products.

I think the products of your company are attractive, and I would appreciate to expand them as a sales outlet in Japan.

As sales method, I'm thinking of creating a specialized online shop, or selling on platforms such as Amazon.
I have 2 questions.
1. Can you ship the products to Japan?
2. What is the percent for wholesale price of the product?

For payment method, I'm thinking of using Paypal.
My Paypal Address is ◯◯.
I'm waiting for a good response.

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I have a question about purchasing your company's products.

I think the products of your company are attractive, and I would appreciate if we are allowed to expand their sales as a sales outlet in Japan.

As sales method, I'm thinking of creating a specialized online shop, or selling on platforms such as Amazon.
I have 2 questions.
1. Will you ship the products to Japan?
2. How much is the wholesale price of the product in margin percentage?

For payment method, I'm hoping to use Paypal.
My Paypal Address is ◯◯.
I'm hoping for a positive response.

元の翻訳
I have a question about acquiring your company's products.

I think the products of your company are attractive, and I would appreciate to expand them as a sales outlet in Japan.

As sales method, I'm thinking of creating a specialized online shop, or selling on platforms such as Amazon.
I have 2 questions.
1. Can you ship the products to Japan?
2. What is the percent for wholesale price of the product?

For payment method, I'm thinking of using Paypal.
My Paypal Address is ◯◯.
I'm waiting for a good response.

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I have a question about your company's products.

I think your company's products are attractive, and I would like to expand your reach by opening a sales outlet in Japan.

As a mode of sales, I'm thinking of creating a specialized online shop, or selling on platforms such as Amazon.
I have 2 questions.
1. Can you ship the products to Japan?
2. What is the percentage discount for wholesale price of the product?

For payment method, I'm thinking of using PayPal.
My PayPal Address is ◯◯.
I look forward to a favorable response.

元の翻訳
The biggest institute for logistics is JILS (Japan Institute of Logistics System), and probably there aren't many Temporary Agencies affiliated in this institution, but our company is part of it, and we also participated in " <a href="http://jils.force.com/ConventionDetail?productid=a0R10000002yEkLEAU" target="_blank"> All-Japan Logistics Improvement Case Tournment </a> ", having the experience of winning a prize.

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The biggest institute for logistics is JILS (Japan Institute of Logistics System), and there are probably extremely few dispatch agencies affiliated to this institution, but our company is part of it. We also participated in " <a href="http://jils.force.com/ConventionDetail?productid=a0R10000002yEkLEAU" target="_blank"> All-Japan Logistics Improvement Case Tournment </a> ", and achieved a prize.

元の翻訳
<br></br>In the case of services, the wages are relatively low in most cases, so there's an aspect that it gets difficult to keep human resources when the economy picks up.

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<br></br>In the case of services industry, the self-sufficiencies are relatively low in many cases, so there's an aspect that it gets difficult to keep human resources when the economy picks up.

元の翻訳
The market itself is growing, and also there are lots of companies extending, so our vision is that there's still a growth margin, mainly for cosmetics and aparell related products.

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The market itself is growing, and there are also lots of growing companies, so we envision that there's still a margin for growth, mainly for cosmetics and apparel related products.