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BS-TBS Saturday stadium 「Sound inn "S"」

January 16th on Saturday at 11:00pm~11:30pm
Kumi Koda will appear on the show as a guest.
Please check it out!

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BS-TBS Saturday stadium ”Sound inn ’S’ "

January 16th on Saturday at 11:00pm~11:30pm
KUMI KODA will appear on the show as a guest.
Please check it out!

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BS-TBS Saturday Stadium "Sound Inn "S""
23:00 to 23:30 on January 16th Saturday
Kumi Koda appears as a guest.
Why don't you see it?

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BS-TBS Saturday Stadium "Sound Inn "S""
23:00 to 23:30 on January 16th Saturday
KUMI KODA will appear as a guest.
Don't miss it!

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BS-TBS Saturday Studium 'Sound Inn “S”'

16 Jan (Sat) 23:00-23:30
KUMI KODA will come up as a guest! Enjoy!

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BS-TBS Saturday Studium 'Sound Inn “S”'

16 Jan (Sat) 23:00-23:30
KUMI KODA will appear as a guest! Enjoy!

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AAA ARENA TOUR 2016 (The title is provisional.) schedule settled!

AAA ARENA TOUR 2016 (The title is provisional.) schedule settled!

5/11/2016 (Wed) Fukuoka Convention Center
5/12/2016 (Thu) Fukuoka Convention Center

5/21/2016 (Sat) Makuhari Messe 9-11 Hall
5/22/2016 (Sun) Makuhari Messe 9-11 Hall

5/26/2016 (Thu) Nagoya Nihon Gaishi Hall
5/28/2016 (Sat) Nagoya Nihon Gaishi Hall
5/29/2016 (Sun) Nagoya Nihon Gaishi Hall

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AAA ARENA TOUR 2016 (tentative) schedule is settled!

AAA ARENA TOUR 2016 (tentative) schedule is settled!

5/11/2016 (Wed) Fukuoka Convention Center
5/12/2016 (Thu) Fukuoka Convention Center

5/21/2016 (Sat) Makuhari Messe 9-11 Hall
5/22/2016 (Sun) Makuhari Messe 9-11 Hall

5/26/2016 (Thu) Nagoya Nihon Gaishi Hall
5/28/2016 (Sat) Nagoya Nihon Gaishi Hall
5/29/2016 (Sun) Nagoya Nihon Gaishi Hall

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Thank you for purchasing our item this time.
Do you like it?↵
I'm so pleased if you like it!
I hope you purchase our item again.
Thank you for choosing our item from many items. Thank you again.

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Thank you for purchasing our item.
Are you happy with the item you received?↵
Your satisfaction is our pleasure!
I hope you purchase our item again.
Thank you for choosing our shop out of the many options that is available. Thank you again.

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Thank you for purchasing the item at our shop.
Are you satisfied with the item you purchased?
I would be very happy if you like it.
I am looking forward to your next shopping with us.
I appreciate you chose our shop among a lot of competitors. Thanks again.

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Thank you for making a purchase at our shop.
Are you satisfied with the item you purchased?
I would be very happy if you like it.
I am looking forward to your next shopping with us.
Thank you for choosing our shop out of the many options that is available. Thanks again.

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Thank you for shopping with us this time.
Do you like the item that you received?
I am also happy if you are satisfied with it.
I am looking forward to your shopping with us again.
Thank you for selecting me among a number of shops. I appreciate you again.

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Thank you for shopping with us.
Do you like the item that you received?
Your satisfaction is our pleasure!
I am looking forward to your shopping with us again.
Thank you for choosing our shop out of the many options that is available. We thank you once again.

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Notice of A's absence
A will return to Japan till ○, ○ and come back on ○, ○.
If there is any document which urgently needs to be signed during absence, B will sign on behalf.

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Notice of A's absence
A will return to Japan till ○, ○ and come back on ○, ○.
If there is any document which urgently needs to be signed during his absence, B will sign on behalf.

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Why did it become incapable suddenly?
I have some products to want to buy.
What should I do?

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Why is it suddenly not working?
There are some products I want to buy right away.
What should I do?

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Why is it not working suddenly?
There are some items I would like to buy right now.
What should I do?

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Why is it suddenly not working?
There are some items I would like to buy right away.
What should I do?

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■ Base rate
70 minutes system (all-you-can-eat, all-you-can-drink)
Adult 1,530 yen
Child 860 yen (the sixth graders or the less)
Free of charge for less than 3 years old
※ A drink bar included.

■ Original menu
All 500 yen (content: one of the following foods + a drink)
※ It is plussed to the base rate.

※ The addition of the original menu costs 500 yen for the food or a drink.
※ The addition of the original menu can be made twice per person.

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■ Base rate
70 minutes system (all-you-can-eat, all-you-can-drink)
Adult 1,530 yen
Child 860 yen (up to elementary school age)
Free of charge for 3 years old or younger
※ A drink bar included.

■ Original menu
All 500 yen (content: one of the following foods + a drink)
※ It is added to the base rate.

※ The addition of the original menu costs 500 yen for one food or a drink.
※ The addition of the original menu can be made twice per person.

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Basic price
70 minutes (you can eat and drink as much as you like.)
Adult: 1,530 Yen
Child: 860 Yen (those who are younger than 6th grader in elementary school)
Free for those who are younger than 3 years old.
*Drink bar is provided.

Original menu
500 Yen for all (details: 1 food listed below plus 1 drink)
*You have to order in addition to the basic price.

*If you add the original menu, 1 food or drink is 500 Yen.
*If you can add the original menu twice at maximum.

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Basic price
70 minutes system (All you can eat and drink)
Adult: 1,530 Yen
Child: 860 Yen (those up to elementary school age)
Free for those who are 3 or younger
*Drink bar is provided.

Original menu
500 Yen for all (details: 1 food listed below plus 1 drink)
*You have to order in addition to the basic price.

*If you add the original menu, 1 food or drink is 500 Yen.
*You can add the original menu twice at maximum.

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AAA piano score collection, "AAA Piano Best Selection" release decided!

AAA piano score collection, "AAA Piano Best Selection" is decided to be released.

Piano solo for Intermediate Students
"AAA Piano Best Selection"
to be released on December 12, 2015.

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AAA piano score collection, "AAA Piano Best Selection" release is confirmed

AAA piano score collection, "AAA Piano Best Selection" release is confirmed!

Piano solo for Intermediate Students
"AAA Piano Best Selection"
to be released on December 12, 2015.

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Fold the side (the purple part) I

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Fold the side (the purple portion) I

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ViVi

KUMI KODA appears on the March issue of ViVi!
Please check it out!

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ViVi

KUMI KODA appears on the March issue of ViVi!
Be sure to check it out!

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ViVi

Kumi Koda appears in ViVi March issue.
Why don't you check it?

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ViVi

Kumi Koda appears in ViVi March issue.
Be sure to check it out!

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I have one more question for you.
We are interested in item B on top of A.
Is that possible to sell B as wholesale, please?

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I have one more question for you.
Apart from item A, we are also interested in item B.
Is it possible to sell B at wholesale rate?

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There is one thing I would like to talk about with you.i am interested in both A items and B items.
would it be possible to provide me B items as well?

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There is one more thing I would like to talk about with you. i am interested in both item A and item B.
Would it be possible to provide me item B as well at wholesale rate?

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I have one more topic that I want to talk with you.
We are interested in B in addition to A.
Would you sell B to us by wholesale?

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I have one more topic that I want to talk with you about.
We are interested in B in addition to A.
Would you sell B to us by wholesale?

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First, I want to buy 10 Aluminum for each color, it means totally 80, and 120 Titanium.

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First, I want to buy 10 pcs of Aluminum for each color, which means 80 pcs in total, and 120 pcs of Titanium.

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First, we would like to have 80 units of aluminium, 10 of each color, and 120 units of titanium.

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First, we would like to order 80 pcs of aluminium, 10 of each color, and 120 pcs of titanium.

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I would like to order 10 pieces of aluminum of each color (total 80 pieces) and 120 pieces of titanium.

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To start with, I would like to order 10 pieces of aluminum of each color (total 80 pieces) and 120 pieces of titanium.

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I can't come over to Singapore due to my illness. I would like you to remove me from Director of the ABC LTD.

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I can't come to Singapore due to illness. I would like you to remove me from the registration list of ABC LTD Directors.