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元の翻訳
Hello, thank you for your question.

Regarding this item, at the present we only have used ones in extremely good condition in stock.

We are able to offer a slightly reduced price.

Please have a look at the photo and see if this is something you are interested in.

Thank you very much.

修正後
Hello, thank you for your question.

Regarding this item, at present we have used ones in stock only; they are in an very good condition.

We can offer a little discount.

Please have a look at the photo and see if this is something you are interested in.

Thank you very much.

元の翻訳
The product was dirty so I am preparing to send it back.
It costs $13 to do this.
Do I pay this fee?
I think you should pay this $13 charge.

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The product was dirty so I am preparing to send it back.
It costs $13 to do this.
Do I have to pay this fee?
I think you should pay this $13 charge.

元の翻訳
OK, I understand about the 1 p.m. checkout.
Is there a hair dryer in the room?
Alright, I will do the cleaning myself, so I'd like the reservation for a total of 340 euro.
I don't have a mobile phone that I can use within France, so could you please give me detailed information about the address, etc.

I arrive at Charles De Gaulle Airport at 6:40 p.m. and plan to be at the apartment at 9 p.m., but if the flight is late I may also get to the apartment later. So, just in case, I'm going to tell you my flight number.

修正後
OK, I understand about the 1 p.m. checkout.
Is there a hair dryer in the room?
Alright, I will do the cleaning myself, so I'd like for the reservation to be 340 euro in total. (choose the 340 euro plan / make it at 340 euro in total)
I don't have a mobile phone that I can use in France, so could you please give me the detailed information about the address, etc.

I arrive at Charles De Gaulle Airport at 6:40 p.m. and plan to be at the apartment at 9 p.m., but if the flight is late I may also get to the apartment later. So, just in case, I'm going to tell you my flight number.

元の翻訳
If it had AAA functionality, I'd give it 5 stars. It currently doesn't have AAA so 1 star only. Without AAA it's useless. But other than that it's perfect.

修正後
If it had AAA functionality, I'd give it 5 stars. It currently doesn't have AAA so 1 star only. Without AAA it's useless. But other than that it's perfect.↵
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読みやすいです。↵
余談ですが、functionalityは機能性でfunctionは機能ですね。↵
あなたはＡＡＡという機能を全般としてとらえられた。だからそれに対応というか類似した機能性と。↵
ＡＡＡというある程度製品化された限定された機能ならfunctionですね。↵
訳には関係ありませんが、ちょっと思いついたことで。↵

元の翻訳
Are you refusing to pay the repair costs for Item No. xx?
If the payment is not made, I would like to cancel Item No. xx.

Are you shipping Item No. oo?
If it is being shipped, please tell me the tracking number.
If it is not being shipped, I would like to cancel Item No. oo.

Please respond within 24 hours.
If I receive no response, I will file an objection with Paypal regarding Item. No. oo.

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Are you refusing to pay the repair costs for Item No. xx?
If the payment is not made, I would like to cancel Item No. xx.

Are you shipping Item No. oo?　=> Have you already shipped Item No. oo?
If it is being shipped, please tell me the tracking number. => If it has already been shipped,
If it is not being shipped, I would like to cancel Item No. oo. => If it has not been shipped yet,

Please respond within 24 hours.
If I receive no response, I will file an objection with Paypal regarding Item. No. oo.