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JOYSOUND Present Campaign the 2nd in now progress!

"TVXQ×JOYSOUND Collaboration Campaign the 2nd" is now in progress!
Sing with the live video and get the "TVXQ LIVE TOUR 2014 ～TREE～" special prensent with the TVXQ's autograph
Check the campaign web site for more details!


【Campaign Web Site URL】
http://joysound.com/st/toho2014/

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JOYSOUND Present Campaign the 2nd in now progress!

"TVXQ×JOYSOUND Collaboration Campaign the 2nd" is now in progress!
Sing with the live video and get the "TVXQ LIVE TOUR 2014 ～TREE～" special present with the TVXQ's autograph
Check the campaign web site for more details!


【Campaign Web Site URL】
http://joysound.com/st/toho2014/

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I will pay the postage.
Please send A for free.

Instead, I want you to send one set of screw to secure the slider motor for free.
I use the broken item as a sample of the store.
Appearance is not so well since it's violently damaged.
I've attached the photo with the image name of "fixed screw set".
Please confirm.

I've attached a purchase order PDF.
Is this contents of this order right?
Please confirm and send me the INVOICE.
I will pay the price immediately.

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I will pay the postage.
Please send A for free.

Instead, I want you to send one set of screw to secure the slider motor for free.
I will use the broken item as a sample in the store.
Appearance is not so well since it's violently damaged.
I've attached the photo with the image name of "fixed screw set".
Please confirm.

I've attached a purchase order PDF.
Is this contents of this order right?
Please confirm and send me the INVOICE.
I will pay the price immediately.

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Compare to other developed countries, Japanese household energy consumption has several characters listed below. First, Japanese households consume less energy than that of other countries. Second, Japanese households consume less gas. (Most households use gas for hot water, though.) One reason for this comparatively less energy consumption of Japanese households is because of warm Japanese weather. Another reasons are smaller houses and the fact most households uses spot heating system. Main energy source for heating especially in the north of Kanto area is Kerosene. For cooking, gas usage is most popular and electric comes next.

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Compared to other developed countries, Japanese household energy consumption has several characters listed below. First, Japanese households consume less energy than those of other countries. Second, Japanese households consume less gas. (Most households use gas for hot water, though.) One reason for this comparatively lower energy consumption of Japanese households is because of warm Japanese weather. Another reason is smaller houses and the fact most households use spot heating system. Main energy source for heating especially in the north of Kanto area is Kerosene. For cooking, gas usage is most popular and electric comes next.

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・However, the admission of infants is not recommended concerning the volume of the speakers during the live.
If they need to enter the venue, we recommend they listen to the music at a point distant from the speakers.

■Notice
※Target products can be booked only at the stores.
※The number of "Event entrance ticket with number" is limited for each time slot. Please be reminded that you may not be able to choose the time slot you request.

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・However, the admission of infants is not recommended considering the volume of the speakers during the live.
If they need to enter the venue, we recommend they listen to the music at a distance from the speakers.

■Notice
※Target products can be booked only at the stores.
※The number of "Event entrance ticket with number" is limited for each time slot. Please be reminded that you may not be able to choose the time slot you request.

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Please not that the sale number of the CD and the tickets of participating handshake has limit.
Please note that we do not accept any refund. The defective goods can be exchanged if necessary.
In case of participating the handshake session with your child who is over 3 years old, another ticket requires for your child in order to participate the session.
Please do not wait for the session through the night. It bothers neighborhood.
The traffic expenses and accommodation expenses are on your dime

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Please note that the sale number of the CD and the tickets of participating handshake has a limit.
Please note that we do not give any refund. Defective goods will be exchanged if necessary.
In case you are participating in the handshake session with a child who is over 3 years old, another ticket is required for your child in order to participate the session.
Please do not wait for the session through the night. It bothers the neighborhood.
The traffic expenses and accommodation expenses are on your dime

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[About CD Sale]
Sale/Advance Order begins 2 hours before the opening. (Schedule might change.)

[Benefit 1]
Customers who purchased the single CD on the May 21st sale, "Jujika～The Movie「Gakko no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-」 Ver.～ " will get the following benefits.

For customers who purchased one CD: A real picture of the place in the film. *I will be sent with the product.
For customers who made an advance order for all three types: A ticket for "Commemorative Photograph Event."
*Customers who have the ticket can join the "Commemorative Photograph Event" which will be held after the performance.

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[About CD Sale]
Sale/Advance Order begins 2 hours before the opening. (Schedule might change.)

[Benefit 1]
Customers who purchased the single CD on the May 21st sale, "Jujika～The Movie「Gakko no Kaidan -Noroi no Kotoba-」 Ver.～ " will get the following benefits.

For customers who purchased one CD: A real picture of the place in the film. *Will be sent with the product.
For customers who made an advance order for all three types: A ticket for the "Commemorative Photograph Event."
*Customers who have the ticket can join the "Commemorative Photograph Event" which will be held after the performance.

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*It will be held after the concert.
* About the time of last trains to go home after participating the event, the event organisers will take no responsibility whatsoever. Please make sure you check them in advance and take a part in the event.

[Benefit 2]
When you buy the album "Mirrorball Flare + Royal Mirrorball Discotheque” , which is to be on sale on 12th March, at the event hall, you can win (one) original post card. It is first comes first served.

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*It will be held after the concert.
* For going home and catching the last time, the event organizers will take no responsibility whatsoever. Please make sure you check them in advance when taking part in the event.

[Benefit 2]
When you buy the album "Mirrorball Flare + Royal Mirrorball Discotheque” , which is to be on sale on 12th March, at the event hall, you can win (one) original post card. It is first comes first served.

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Hello,
Did you receive my message last time?
Does your company have any plan to expand in Japan?
I am almost getting impression with your company products.
Please think about expanding in Japan.
I'm waiting for good news from you.

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Hello,
Did you receive my message last time?
Does your company have any plans to expand to Japan?
I am deeply impressed with your company and your companies products.
Please think about expanding to Japan.
I'm waiting for good news from you.