Katherine Bantiles (googlybear) — 付けたレビュー

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I am sorry for my slow response.
I sent this email to tell you the current situation and the future plan.
I have lived in LA to participate in "USA Law" since last July.
I learn basic law systems of America like the federal constitution, the civil cases and the contract law in the former course, and in the latter course, I learn conflict resolution ways of WTO.
The lectures in UCLA will finish on 16th of this week.

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I am sorry for my late response.
I sent this email to tell you the current situation and the future plan.
I have been living in LA to participate in "USA Law" since last July.
I am learning basic law systems of America like the federal constitution, the civil cases and the contract law in the former course, and in the latter course, I will learn conflict resolution ways of WTO.
The lectures in UCLA will finish this week on August 16.

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I have given you the evaluation a little while ago.
Thank you for your message with consideration.

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I have given you an evaluation a little while ago.
Thank you for your message with consideration.

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My purpose of learning English is initiated from my thought of desire for “Living on the work of bridging the world” as a social entrepreneur. A business method introduced by Japanese was worked as a stimulant for making up such thought. One of issues of the leading industrialized countries including Japan is having people suffering from lifestyle related diseases due to the overeating, but in contrast, the developing countries including the countries in Africa are suffering from the issue of famine caused by a shortage of food supply. In consideration for resolving these issues in the developed nations and the less industrialized countries simultaneously on win-win basis, one mechanism has been built up. It works in a way that the companies and the organizations with the worksite cafeterias serve a special low calorie menu with right food at a tack on price of 20 Yen of which tack on price is being used for extending an aid for resolving the famine issue.

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My purpose of learning English is initiated from my thought of desire for “working to bridge the world” as a social entrepreneur. A business method introduced by the Japanese became the catalyst for this thought. One of issues of the leading industrialized countries including Japan is having people suffer from lifestyle related diseases due to the overeating, and in contrast, the developing countries including the countries in Africa are suffering from the issue of famine caused by a shortage of food supply. In consideration to resolve these issues in the developed nations and the less industrialized countries simultaneously on a win-win basis, one mechanism has been built. It works in a way that the companies and the organizations with the work site cafeterias serve a special low calorie menu with right food at a tack on price of 20 yen of which tack on price is being used for extending an aid to solve the famine issue.

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The reason why I am learning English is that I would like to be a social entrepreneur and work to connect the world,
A business model which was created by Japanese was a catalyst for me.

As an advanced county, we have a lot of people suffer from obesity and lifestyle disease as a result of over eating in Japan.
On the other hand, developing countries like most of African countries, they suffer from starvation from food shortages.

As a system to solve these extreme problems (situations) at the same time, partner with companies and organizations which have cafeterias in site to provide meals with lower calories and rich in nutrition, and serve for 20yen on top of the basic meals. ↵
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The reason why I am learning English is that I would like to be a social entrepreneur and work to connect the world,
A business model which was created by Japanese was the catalyst for me.

As an advanced county, we have a lot of people suffer from obesity and lifestyle disease as a result of over eating in Japan.
On the other hand, developing countries like most of African countries, they suffer from starvation from food shortages.

As a system to simultaneously solve these extreme problems (situations), I have partnered with companies and organizations that have cafeterias in site to provide meals with lower calories and rich in nutrition, and serve for 20yen on top of the basic meals.

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I am very interested in this item.
Can I ask a question?
It is about the knob on the part by the tip of the pen.
Is the backslide of this tip flat?
Or, does it have two vertical lines carved into it?
I look forward to your response.
Thank you very much.

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I am very interested in this item.
Can I ask a question?
It is about the knob on the part by the tip of the pen.
Is the backslide of this tip flat?
Or does it have two vertical lines carved into it?
I look forward to your response.
Thank you very much.

元の翻訳
Thank you for agreeing to the price discount.
I forget to ask a little while ago, but can these items be sent and received as "gifts"?
When I receive your reply, I'll make payment to the designated account.
Thank you very much.

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Thank you for agreeing to the price discount.
I forgot to ask a little while ago, but can these items be sent and received as "gifts"?
When I receive your reply, I'll make payment to the designated account.
Thank you very much.

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I think that we need writing ability for product titles and descriptions. I would like to repeat that the thing for which you need your most efforts is seeking a Japanese supplier.
Many people who made contracts with me left from me without saying anything. I think that you understand this job if you do not ask me anything.
Did you understand every class without asking your professors?
Now, I have a request to you. Please find an item sold through e-bay in a Japanese e-commerce site.

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I think that we need writing ability for product titles and descriptions. I would like to repeat that the thing for which you need your most efforts is seeking a Japanese supplier.
Many people who have made contracts with me left without saying anything to me. I think that you understand this job if you do not ask me anything.
Did you understand every class without asking your professors?
Now, I have a request to you. Please find an item sold through eBay in a Japanese e-commerce site.

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Thank you for your clarification!!
This product includes 1 stick with 3.6 meter long.

Please think about buying it!

Thank you very much!!

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Thank you for your clarification!!
Each piece of this product is 3.6 meter long.

Please think about buying it!

Thank you very much!!

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■ It is possible to change the price. However, listed below are the points you need to be aware of.
・The item will be insured and will be given a tracking number.
・However, We will not be able to warranty it if an accident happens during the delivery.
・We will not be able to warranty items with prices above 〇〇 dollars.

Do you agree with these conditions?

■ We cannot make the postage free. This is because, the price of this game console is increasing and I am selling it at a price that has little profit in it.
However, since you have contacted me several times, I will decrease the postage by 10 dollars.

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■ It is possible to change the price. However, listed below are the points you need to be aware of.
・The item will be insured and will be given a tracking number.
・However, we will not be able to give you a warranty in case an accident happens during delivery.
・We will not be able to give warranty to items that have prices above 〇〇 dollars.

Do you agree with these conditions?

■ We cannot make the postage free. This is because the price of this game console is increasing and I am selling it at a price that has little profit in it.
However, since you have contacted me several times, I will decrease the postage by 10 dollars.

元の翻訳
I think it will be 20 to 30 pcs. As I have not reviewed all of the headsets yet, I will include only those reviewd by the time when I return the main units.

Among the reviews from the customers, many claimed that the speakers were so thick that they touhced their ears to hurt them. I would request you to consider modification on this part as well.

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I think it will be 20 to 30 pcs. As I have not reviewed all of the headsets yet, I will include only those reviewed by the time when I return the main units.

Among the reviews from the customers, many claimed that the speakers were so thick that it hurt their ears. I would request you to consider modification on this part as well.

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I think they will be 20 to 30 of them, but I haven't checked all the headset yet, I will send them every time I return the main unit.

Other than that, as our customer's opinion we get, that the speakers are too tick and hurting their ears. Please think about its improvement too.

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We think that there are 20 to 30 of them, but we haven't checked all headsets yet. We will send them every time we return the main unit.

Aside from that, we also got opinions from the customers that the speakers are too thick and it is hurting their ears. Please think about its improvement too.

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I am doing well. Sorry it took me so long to e-mail you. My English has gotten rusty so I`m using a translation service.
To inform you on everything, my dog passed away. She lived fifteen years but it`s still saddening. My mother goes back and forth between the hospital and nursing at home, but she is fine for now. I am working same as before, directing iphone apps at home. This summer I`m planning to vacation in Asia. I hope you get well with macrobiotics.

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I am doing well. Sorry it took me so long to e-mail you. My English has gotten rusty so I'm using a translation service.
To inform you on everything, my dog passed away. She lived for 15 years, but it's still saddening. My mother goes back and forth between the hospital and recuperating at home, but she is fine for now. Like before, I work for the same company directing iPhone apps at home. This summer, I'm planning to take a vacation in Asia. I hope that you will get healthier with macrobiotics.

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for your warm consideration!
We are going to send you a comment after we receive the item sample and investigate the quality.

Japanese is globally known as being strict about quality of an item, and we can make use of the experiences from buying foreign products. We can estimate whether the item samples have quality worth selling.

The concept of this product is amazing, so if we find this has enough quality, we would like to sell this item in Japan.

We are sincerely looking forward to develop business with you.

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Thank you very much for your warm consideration!
We are going to send you a comment once we receive the item sample and investigate its quality.

Japanese is globally known to be strict about product quality. We make use of our experiences from buying foreign products to check the item sample, and then determine whether the quality is enough to be sold in Japan.

The concept of this product is amazing, and if we are satisfied with it, we would like to sell this product in Japan.

We sincerely look forward to doing business with you.

元の翻訳
Makoto is quite a natural worrier but also happens to be a kind person.
He is a good friend of Haruka, who is able to feel thoughts and emotions of his without the use of words.
However, she must admit that she is constantly under stress as he never stops himself from diving in to any pool of water he sees.
But what I like about him is how he is always able to "understand and watch over" Haruka.
Not only is he concerned about Haruka and Nagisa, but also Rin, who goes to a different school.
Albeit he sometimes is a little cowardly, he is also quite matured and so the others do feel rather happy to trust and rely on him.

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Makoto is a worrier, but he’s a kind person.
He is a good friend of Haruka. He understands Haruka even though Haruka doesn’t express his thoughts or emotions.
Makoto gets worried a lot because Haruka tries to jump in any pool of water that he sees.
What I like about him is how can always understand and keep a close eye on Haruka.
He’s not only concerned about Haruka and Nagisa, who are always with him, but he’s also concerned about Rin who attends a different school.
Albeit he is sometimes a little cowardly, he is quite mature compared to the others. He is a good mediator, so others rely on him.