London Gardens (ayaka_maruyama) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
I have received the product and checked inside.
Is this really a brand new product?
The tent was very ruoghly folded and some grass came out from within.
I am thinking of reviewing you negatively.

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I have received the product and checked inside.
Is this really a brand new product?
The tent was very roughly folded and some grass came out from inside.
I am thinking of reviewing you negatively.

元の翻訳
About handling the package, FOB from Idaho, Boise, should be okay,
and the number of MOQ is 60.

How much would the delivery cost for 60 be if we used USPS with insurance from Japan?
Is it possible to get it sent to Japan directly if we paid for the product and delivery fee?

We have confirmed the new packaging.
Am I correct in thinking that after the contract has been made, it will be delivered in the new packaging?
If it is going to change from a tin can to a paper box, is the logo going to be printed on the paper box itself?

Please send me the image of the new packaging when it's done.
Make sure it looks much cooler! Then we can talk about the contract.

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About handling the package, FOB from Idaho, Boise, should be okay,
and the number of MOQ is 60.

How much does the delivery cost for 60 be if we use USPS with insurance from Japan?
Is it possible to get it sent to Japan directly if we paid for the product and delivery fee?

We have confirmed the new packaging.
Am I correct in thinking that after the contract has been made, it will be delivered in the new packaging?
If it is going to change from a tin can to a paper box, is the logo going to be printed on the paper box itself?

Please send me the image of the new packaging when it's done.
Make sure it looks much cooler! Then we can talk about the contract.

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting me and re-opening the account.
I am happy that I have the chance to sell my products on ebay again.

I will take into account the advice you have given me, and strive to succeed in my business by making my customers happy.I hope that we can continue with this successful relationship.

I hope that you can give me more advice to better myself.
Kind regards.

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Thank you for contacting me and reactivating my account.
I am happy that I have the chance to sell my products on ebay again.

I will follow strictly the advice you have given me, and strive to succeed in my business by making my customers satisfied and continue to prosper business with your company.

I hope that you can give me more advice as well as encouragement.
Kind regards.

元の翻訳
If the conditions gets , I would like to use the video as product, but how should I proceed with the right processing? As the licence company doesn't seem to be operating in Japan yet. could you indicate how I shouold apply? I would also like to know the cost for application. About the song A, is the arranger credited as the composer, and am I right to believe that it is A? After checking the rights, the video I'll be using this time is the following. How is the production going? Please let me know as I would like to schedule this within the year.

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If the conditions allows , I would like to use the video as a product, but how should I proceed with the right processing? As the licensed company doesn't seem to be operating in Japan yet. Could you indicate me that how I can apply for it? I would also like to know the cost for application. About the song A, is the arranger credited as the composer, and is there any problem referring to the recognition of A? After checking the rights, the video I'll be using this time is the following. How is the production going? Please let me know as I would like to make a schedule of next year.

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting me.
As I do not own iPhone 5s myself, I cannot confirm if this phone case matches iPhone 5s.
It would be great if you could confirm whether this case is suitable for both iPhone5 and Phone5s or not, and let me know.

Sorry for the inconvenience, but I'll be looking forward to hearing back from you.

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Thank you for contacting me.
As I do not own iPhone 5s myself, I cannot confirm if this iphone case matches iPhone 5s.
It would be great if you could confirm and then tell me whether this case is suitable for both iPhone5 and iPhone5s or not.

Sorry for the inconvenience, but I'll be looking forward to your reply.

元の翻訳
Battery: needed
Age: 0 ~ around 1 year and 6 months old
Safety: marked ST (given by Japanese Toy Association to those that are proven to be safe)

Develops the ability to think and create while playing.
The magnet allows you to make all kinds of shapes.

This is a gym for babies until they can stand up.
It can be used for the mobile period, playing period to their standing period.
The high quality music and the noises from the womb, plus the lamps for night time will help with diaper changing at night.

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Battery: needed
Age: 0 to around 1 year and half years old
Safety: ST mark ( a mark given by Japanese Toy Association which proves meeting the standard of safe toys.)

Thinking and creative abilities can be built while playing.
The magnet allows you to make all kinds of shapes.

This is a gym that provides long play opportunities for babies from the period of lying and sitting on the ground to the period of being able to stand on their own.
Merry, play gym and stand play gym can also be used for a long period.
The high quality music, the womb sounds and the lamps for night time will help diaper changing at night.

元の翻訳
ただし、そのような譲渡がなされた場合でも、新たな法人も元々の関係者も、当決定事項に従わなければならない。
１６　司法権と管轄　
両者は、日本国憲法内での一般的な国際法の原則を実行すると同意する。
紛争の解決は、日本の京都における地方裁判所が管轄する。
地方裁判所は、両者の独占権等の保持の際に必要または便利である、差止め救済措置を行う権限を所持する。

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ただし、そのような譲渡がなされた場合でも、新たな法人も元々の当事者も、本契約条項に従わなければならない。
１６　司法権と管轄　
本契約は一般的、国際的な法原則を体現し、日本国法令に基づき解釈されるものであることに、両当事者は合意する。
紛争の解決は、日本の京都における地方裁判所が管轄する。
地方裁判所は、両者の独占権等の保持の際に必要または便宜を図るための差止措置を行う権限を所持する。

元の翻訳
１３　提携
サプライヤと流通業者は、胡麻の商標登録と配給過程において必要に応じ、商品または過程を管轄するいかなる政府機関とも連携を取らなければならない。
１４　全決定事項
両者は、当規定が全決定事項を制定し、その他口頭等でなされた条項は存在しないと同意する。
１５　譲渡
両者は、紙面上の事前承諾が相手から無い限り、その他の個人、法人に当決定事項を譲渡することができない。
ただし、どちらかが保有する法人に対してであれば、そのような事前承諾が相手から無い場合においても、権限や義務を譲渡することが可能である。

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１３　提携
サプライヤと流通業者は、胡麻の商標登録と配給過程において必要に応じ、商品または過程を管轄するいかなる政府機関とも連携を取らなければならない。
１４　全決定事項
両者は、当規定が全決定事項を制定し、その他口頭等でなされた条項は存在しないと同意する。
１５　譲渡
両者は、文書による事前承諾が相手から無い限り、その他の個人、法人に当決定事項を譲渡することができない。
ただし、どちらかが保有もしくは管理する法人に対してであれば、そのような事前承諾が相手から無い場合においても、権限や義務を譲渡することが可能である。

元の翻訳
８　期限
当決定事項の期限は５年とする。期間満了後は、関係者のどちらかが最低４ヶ月前までに取消の意思を提示しない限り、毎年自動更新される。
９　商標／著作権
サプライヤはこれをもって、流通業者が業務を追行する為に必要とされる、いかなる商標、著作権、その他の知的財産を使用する非独占的権限を流通業者に与える。
１０　契約不履行条件
当決定事項にてサプライヤが与えられた義務は、ストライキ、労働障害（サプライヤのサプライヤに関連するストライキ、労働障害を含む）のもとでも有効であるとする。

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８　期間
この契約の最初の期間は５年とする。期間満了後は、当事者のいずれかが少なくとも延長期間前の４ヶ月までに取消の意思を書面で受理しない限り、毎年自動更新されるものとする。
９　商標／著作権
サプライヤはこの契約をもって、流通業者が業務を追行する為に必要とされる、商標、著作権、その他のいかなる知的財産権を使用する非排他的権利を流通業者に譲渡する。
１０　契約不履行条件
この契約においてサプライヤが与えられた義務は、ストライキ、労働障害（サプライヤのサプライヤに関連するストライキ、労働障害を含む）のもとでも有効であるとする。

元の翻訳
B　胡麻の苦み、香りの強さ、色味は ISO 2542-2若しくは基準内の代替品を使用して決定し、
流通業者がサプライヤに定期的に課する最低基準を満たさなければならない。更に、
C　胡麻の仕入、加工、輸出は全ての法律、ルール、輸出規制、その他タイ、日本及び、その時点で胡麻の運送に携わる国が課する規制に従わなければならない。

１２　マーケティング
サプライヤは流通業者にマーケティング資材、証明書、試験結果及び流通業者の胡麻販売の拡大に貢献し得る資材を提供します。

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B　胡麻の苦み、香りの強さ、および色味は ISO 2542-2または同等の代替基準を使用して決定し、
流通業者がサプライヤに定期的に課する最低要件を満たさなければならない。更に、
C　胡麻の仕入、加工、および輸出は全ての法律、規則、輸出規制、ならびにその他タイ国、日本国、およびその時点で胡麻の運送に携わる国が課する要件に従わなければならない。

１２　マーケティング
サプライヤは流通業者にマーケティング資材、証明書、試験結果、およびその他流通業者の胡麻販売の拡大に貢献し得る資材を提供するものとする。

元の翻訳
However, your assessment seems to be 100% and I am content with your correspondence.
That is why I chose to send you this message before reviewing you first.

What are your thoughts on this incident?
I hope that you would be able to come up with a solution I can work with.

Also, please be extra careful when packing the product for delivery.
The packages are extremely roughly handled, and the product is prone to get broken.
If the products are free to move around inside the box, it makes it easier to break.
Please make sure that there are no extra spaces in the box.

I have been happy with your correspondence, but I just wasn't happy with the state your product was in.

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However, your assessment seems to be 100% and I am satisfied with your actions.
That is why I chose to send you this message before providing a review.

What are your thoughts on this incident?
I hope that you would be able to come up with a solution that I can accept.

Also, please be extra careful when packing the product for delivery.
The packages are handled very roughly, and the product is prone to get broken.
If the products are free to move around inside the box, it makes it easier to break.
Please make sure that there are no extra spaces in the box.

I have been happy with your actions, but I just wasn't happy with the state the product was in.

元の翻訳
There is a hole on the right lower part of the product.
Had I known that the product had a hole, I would not have purchased it for this price.

I think that the hole should affect hugely on the price of the product, as it is a huge shortcoming.

On the documents, it says that there is a flaw in one part, but I feel that it should have been more clearly.
You could also have posted a picture of the part with the hole.

Did you not make an ambiguous statement knowingly?
If so, what you're doing is fraud.

I am thinking of writing about this on your review.

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There is a hole on the lower right part of the product.
Had I known that the product had a hole, I would not have purchased it for this price.

I think that the hole should hugely affect the price of the product as it is a huge shortcoming.

On the documents, it says that there is a flaw on one part, but I feel that it should have been stated more clearly.
You could also have posted a picture of the part with the hole.

Did you not make an ambiguous statement knowingly?
If so, what you're doing is fraud.

I am thinking of writing about this on your review.

元の翻訳
Hi Dan, thanks for the reply.
I will contact you and make payments through my PayPal ID.

Prior to our , I have purchased 2 products on RCTAIY by Amazon.
I will be directly purchasing from you , starting with 10 products. If it sells well, then we will be purchasing larger quantities.
[] What will the price be for each quantity?
10 items
20 items
30 items
40 items
Is it possible to ship them directly to Japan?

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Hi Dan, thanks for the reply.
I will contact you and make payments through my PayPal ID.

Prior to our deal, I have purchased 2 products on RCTAIY by Amazon.
I will be directly purchasing from you , starting with 10 products. If it sells well, then I will be purchasing larger quantities.
[] What will the price be for each quantity?
10 items
20 items
30 items
40 items
Is it possible to ship them directly to Japan?

元の翻訳
This is a lesson that I had taken in another school before. The students talk about a certain topic extemporaneously for 3 mins The teacher listens to it,writes the speach down and turns it into a proper prose. Then, they talk about how to improve the grammer and make it more natural sounding English. I realy liked this lesson but found it very expensive. Is there anyone who can teach like this here?

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This is a lesson that I had taken in another school before. The students talk about a certain topic extemporaneously for 3 mins The teacher listens to it and writes the speech down and turns it into a proper prose. Then, they discuss about how to improve the grammar and make it sounds more natural English. I really liked this lesson but found it very expensive. Is there anyone who can teach like this here?

元の翻訳
Hi, I would like to know about the delivery fee.

My account should be making it 30% discount,↵
and it has always been making it all 30% off.

I feel that it must be a mistake that it wasn't discounted this time.

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Hi, I would like to know about the delivery fee.

A 30% discount should be applied on my account and up until now I have always gotten it 30% off.

I feel that it must be a mistake that it wasn't discounted this time.

元の翻訳
I was making a bill addressed to you, and came across a few things that needed confirmation.
The A4 ☆that I purchased at ◯ included 8 sheets. I have purchased 2 sets of this, making it a total of 16 sheets. Do you think it would be enough? If not, I can purchase more.
I have used $18.4 so far to purchase these items, and with the delivery fee to ◎ and the commission added, the final amount will be $◆.
I also have the cards you have mentioned previously, wuold you like to purchase that together?
There will be no added delivery fee.

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I was making a bill addressed to you, and came across a few things that needed confirmation.
The A4 ☆that I purchased at ◯ included 8 sheets. I have purchased 2 sets of this, making it a total of 16 sheets. Do you think it would be enough? If not, I can purchase more.
I have used $18.4 so far to purchase these items, and with the delivery fee to ◎ and the commission added, the final amount will be $◆.
I also have the cards you have mentioned previously, would you like to purchase that together?
There will be no added delivery fee.

元の翻訳
Babies are brimming with curiosity.
This is a toy that assembled things that are made to look exactly like what babies love to touch in the house.

[Addictive box II] is packed with 16 easy and educational toys that arouses the curiosity of babies with multiple emotional actions.
・Get the pulling action of receipts through the cash machine
・A pop-up action of fruits and seesaw buttons
・Play with the fun water taps
・Play with the set button and ping pong balls
・The upper button makes the lights flash
・The star-shaped button makes melodies (8 songs included)

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Babies are brimming with curiosity.
This is a toy that assembled things that are made to look exactly like what babies love to touch in the house.

[Addictive box II] is packed with 16 easy and educational toys that arouses the curiosity of babies with multiple emotional actions.
・Get the pulling action of receipts through the cash machine
・A pop-up action of fruits and seesaw buttons
・Play with the fun water taps
・Play with the set button which launches ping pong balls
・The upper button makes the lights flash
・The star-shaped button plays melodies (8 songs included)

元の翻訳
I'm afraid the item you have ordered is out of stock, with no plans of restocking in the foreseeable future. However, the similar product A can be restocked, and be delivered to you by the deadline. The details for this product A is under the following URL below. If you are happy with this alternative, we will be happy to deliver this instead. The price and delivery fee will be the same, but we will be able to give you an Amazon coupon worth $10. Kind regards.

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I'm afraid the item you have ordered is out of stock, with no plans of restocking it in the near future. However, the similar product A can be restocked, and can be delivered to you by the deadline. You can confirm the details of the product in the URL below. If you are alright with this alternative, we will be happy to deliver this instead. The price and delivery fee will be the same, but we will give you an Amazon coupon worth $10. Kind regards.

元の翻訳
Hello, my name is **.

I'm afraid I've purchased an item by mistake,
and would like to cancel the order.

I'm so sorry for the inconvenience.
Kind regards.

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Hello, my name is **.

I'm afraid I've purchased an item by mistake,
and would like to cancel the order.

I'm so sorry for the inconvenience.
↵
Kind regards.

元の翻訳
Hi.
I have bidded thinking that I would be able to pay via PayPal as usual, and have proceeded with the payments. However, after having payed, I realized that the payment was something that I have never seen before.

I am sorry for the inconvenience, but I can only pay via PayPal.
If it cannot be changed, then I would like to cancel this purchase.
I have mistakenly thought that this payment was PayPal, ↵
and I apologize.
Kind regards.

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Hi.
I have bidded thinking that I would be able to pay via PayPal as usual, and have proceeded with the payments. However, when I tried to finish paying, I realized that the payment was something I have no experience with before.

I am sorry for the inconvenience, but I can only pay via PayPal.
If it cannot be changed, then I would like to cancel this purchase.
I mistakenly thought that this payment was PayPal and I apologize.
Kind regards.