Miii (girafarig) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
To celebrate the new product launch, we decided to hold a hand shake event at Don Quijote Nagoya store on Saturday February 14.

The tickets will be distributed from Saturday January 17, 15:00 pm at the intended stores.

For more information, please click the link below
http://www.love-perfume.jp/special/index.html

修正後
To celebrate the new product launch, we decided to hold a handshake event at Don Quijote Nagoya store on Saturday February 14.

The tickets will be distributed from Saturday January 17, 15:00 pm at the stores participating in the project.

For more information, please click the link below
http://www.love-perfume.jp/special/index.html

元の翻訳
Thank you for your response.

I am attending the meeting for another subject.
I will go back to yours after this meeting.

Could you give me 2 more hours to finish this translation?

Thank you for your understanding.

修正後
Thank you for your response.

I am in the middle of attending the meeting for another task.
As soon as the meeting is over, I will go back to the task to continue.

Could you please give me 2 more hours to finish this translation?

I am sorry for the inconvenience and thank you for your understanding.

元の翻訳
Hello
Thank you for using our shop.
I am afraid I have something tell you about shipping trouble.
The product I send by SAL registered mail has returned from Tokyo.
It seems SAL registered mail is not available in Denmark.
Therefore I will send it again by SAL next time.
Shipping date will be October 7,
Arrival date will be October 21 to November 4.
I am so sorry to keep you waiting.
I will be responsible for that to the end.
If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.

修正後
Hello
Thank you for using our shop.
I am afraid I have something to tell you about shipping trouble.
The product I sent by SAL registered mail has returned from Tokyo.
It seems SAL registered mail is not available in Denmark.
Therefore I will send it again by SAL next time.
Shipping date will be October 7,
Arrival date will be October 21 to November 4.
I am so sorry to keep you waiting.
I will be responsible for that to the end.
If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.

元の翻訳
こんにちは。支払いの前に、三脚のブランドとモデルを教えてください。

質問があります。三脚の正確なモデル名を教えていただけますか。
私は私のPay Pal のアカウントが機能するようになるの待ち、2日以内にお支払いします。

修正後
こんにちは。支払いの前に、三脚のブランドとモデルを教えてください。

質問があります。三脚の正確なモデル名を教えていただけますか。
Pay Pal のアカウントが承認されるのを待ち、2日以内にお支払いします。

元の翻訳
こんにちは。支払いの前に、三脚のブランドとモデルを教えてください。

質問があります。三脚の正確なモデル名を教えていただけますか。
私は私のPay Pal のアカウントが機能するようになるの待ち、2日以内にお支払いします。

修正後
こんにちは。支払いの前に、三脚のブランドとモデル名を教えてください。

1つだけ質問があります。三脚の正確なモデル名を教えていただけますか。
Pay Pal のアカウントが承認され次第、2日以内にお支払いします。

元の翻訳
It is desided that Atae Shinjiro from AAA will come to 『AGESTOCK2014 in Waseda University』on Sunday November 2.

November 2, Sunday

修正後
It is desided that Atae Shinjiro from AAA will come to "AGESTOCK2014 in Waseda University" on Sunday, November 2.

November 2, Sunday

元の翻訳
Usually it does not come with a hard case. However, fortunately, we have an original hard case from Duesenberg in stock. Though it is secondhand it is still good condition, not damaged. Please check it through the photos. The guitar A dollars + hard case B dollars = C dollars, and shipping fee will be D dollars, so total cost. This might be the last opportunity; there might not the arrival of this color any more after this. Therefore we strongly recommend you to order this time.

修正後
Usually it does not come with a hard case. However, fortunately, we have an original hard case from Duesenberg in stock. Though it is secondhand it is still good condition, not damaged. Please check it through the photos. The guitar A dollars + hard case B dollars = C dollars, and shipping fee will be D dollars, as a total cost. This might be the last opportunity; there might not the arrival of this color any more after this. Therefore we strongly recommend you to order this time.