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s8716
あなたが希望したとおり私の注文をキャンセルします。本当に「paint」があるのなら、欲しくはありません。

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s8716
あなたが要望したとおり私の注文をキャンセルしてください。本当に「paint」があるのなら、欲しくはありません。

元の翻訳
I did not understand the meaning of your message.
Does "additional item" mean the missing item which I inform you the other day?

And have you already shipped the missing item?

If you have already shipped the missing item, please let me know the tracking number.

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I did not understand the meaning of your message.
Does "additional item" mean the missing item which I informed you the other day?

And have you already shipped the missing item?

If you have already shipped the missing item, please let me know the tracking number.

元の翻訳
EBA
カメラ(画面表示)を英語することが不可能であると知りがっかりしています。日本語でけです。eBayで販売するときにはこの事実を商品説明に加えてください、そうしなければカメラ本体には英語の表示があり、日本国内向けに販売するべきものを英語で販売して、(お客様に)勘違いをさせます。
返送料金が高いので、返品を躊躇しています。悲しいことです。

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EBA
カメラ(画面表示)を英語することが不可能であると知りがっかりしています。日本語でしか対応していません。eBayで販売するときにはこの事実を商品説明に加えてください、そうしなければカメラ本体には英語の表示があり、日本国内向けに販売するべきものを英語で販売して、(お客様に)勘違いをさせます。
返送料金が高いので、返品を躊躇しています。悲しいことです。

元の翻訳
We deal Japanese items with the srogan of kind and gentle.
The shippment will have a few days including confirming, but we will deliver beautiful and authentic items!
You're in good hands!

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We deal Japanese items with the slogan of kind and gentle.
The shipment will take a few days including confirming, but we will deliver beautiful and authentic items!
You're in good hands!

元の翻訳
sorry.I didn't find your e-mail.
Products arrived today.

Thank you for your quick arrangement.

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Sorry. I failed to read your e-mail.
Products arrived today.

Thank you for your quick arrangement.

元の翻訳
I will ship it with the way you ordered.
This is extremely an exception.
I did cancel all my deals in the past.
But I will support you this time to thank you who purchased a lot.

But here is one thing that I wamt you to understand.
SAl shipment has lots of missing.
There is no tracking number or insurance as well. Moreover, it might happen that it takes more than one month to get it arrived.
Even if it isn't arrived, it can not be refund.

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I will ship it with the way you ordered.
This is an unprecidented way.
I have canceled all my deals with such a shipment.
But I will support you this time to thank you who purchased a lot.

But here is one thing that I want you to understand.
SAl shipment has lots of missing.
There is no tracking number or insurance as well. Moreover, it might happen that it takes more than one month to get it arrived.
Even if it isn't arrived, it can not be refund.

元の翻訳
Although I inquired the exhibior last Friday, I have not recieved the reply yet.

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Although I inquired the seller last Friday, I have not received the response yet.

元の翻訳
It's going to be March soon.
Please let me know the exact date the item comes in if you know.
I will order another 36 pcs next time.
Could you keep those for me?

I'm looking forward to hearing from you.

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It's going to be March soon.
Please let me know the exact date the items arrive.
I will order another 36 pcs next time.
Could you keep those for me?

I'm looking forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for sending me the proposed documents some days ago.
We think it is difficult that only our company bear the expense of 9 hundred million yen in all against this program.
If this program is carried out, we have to find out a business partner who cooperates with this program in Japan, so we hope for more time to consider until the end of March.
Best regards.

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Thank you for sending me the proposal documents the other day.
We think it is difficult that only our company bear the expense of 9 hundred million yen in all for this program.
If this program is carried out, we have to find out a business partner to cooperate with this program in Japan, so we hope for more time to consider until the end of March.
Best regards.

元の翻訳
本日、100個分の注文品の発送準備ができたとの知らせを予期せず受け取り、すぐに実行されたようです！

お支払いはどうなるのでしょうか、すみませんが参照したいので銀行明細をいただけますでしょうか？

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本日、100個分の注文品の発送準備ができたとの知らせが突然来て、すぐに手続きが終了してしまったようです！

お支払いはどうなるのでしょうか、すみませんが参照したいので銀行明細をいただけますでしょうか？

元の翻訳
Don't you feel painful? Feeling hard? I wanted to ask Takuma.
You who are with me

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Don't you feel painful? Feeling hard? It's you, Takuma, whom I wanted to ask.
With me, you are...

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ph55504

Himura Machiko (Ookami-san to Shichinin no Nakama-tachi)
Harusaki Chiwa (OreShura)
Maki Natsuo (Love Lab)

Boys do that too... kind of.

Danshi Koukousei no Nichijou

By the way, this is the very end of the story...

It works with onigiri too.
Suzukawa Koume (Taishou Yakyuu Musume)

...Or a whole loaf of bread.
Elizabeth Warren (Softeni)

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ph55504

Himura Machiko (Ookami-san to Shichinin no Nakama-tachi　(Mr. Wolf and 7 friends))
Harusaki Chiwa (OreShura (My girlfriend makes pandemonium))
Maki Natsuo (Love Lab)

Boys do that too... kind of.

Danshi Koukousei no Nichijou

By the way, this is the very end of the story...

It works with rice ball too.
Suzukawa Koume (Taishou Yakyuu Musume (Baseball girls in Taisho era))

...Or a whole loaf of bread.
Elizabeth Warren (Softeni (Soft Tennis))

元の翻訳
ph53408

▼ And to wrap it up...

There are many anime club activities out there - some could be real, some of them you will probably never see in real life, but there is one thing that connects them - the characters who take part in them are enjoying their youth! ... I wanted to wrap it up nicely like that, but I still cannot find my jaw! They amaze me and I'm Japanese, so I wonder what those of you who live abroad might think of them. If you find some club you like, please watch the anime that features it as if you yourself wanted to join it!

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ph53408

▼ And to wrap it up...

There are many anime club activities out there - some could be real, some of them you will probably never see in real life, but there is one thing that is in common among them - the characters who take part in them are enjoying their youth! ... I wanted to wrap it up nicely like that, but I still cannot find my jaw! Even I, Japanese, am amazed with them, so I'm very curious what those of you who live abroad might think of them. If you find some club you like, please watch such anime as if you yourself wanted to join it!

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ph53407

Sensha-dou "Girls and Panzer"

Driving tanks is the pleasure of a true maiden

The story takes place in a school where girls drive tanks. Beautiful girls called "Sensha-dou" use tanks to take part in battles between schools. By the way, this anime is really popular in Japan right now.

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ph53407

Sensha-dou "Girls and Pantzer"

Driving tanks is the modesty of a true maiden

The story takes place in a school where girls drive tanks. Beautiful girls called "Sensha-dou" use tanks to participate in battles between schools. By the way, this anime is really popular in Japan right now.

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ph53002

▼What is Yamato Nadeshiko mean?

Yamato Nadeshiko is the Japanese women who is a pretty delicate but inside is very strong heart like to say to resemble the flowers of NADESHIKO. Or also the flower called YAMATO NADESHIKO. I write as "Yamato Nadeshiko" in Chinese characters.

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Both women and men are admire these women in Japan. It is a Yamato Nadeshiko!

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ph53002

▼What is Yamato Nadeshiko mean?

Yamato Nadeshiko"やまとなでしこ" is the expression honoring Japanese women who are sensitive but are mentally strong, epitomized with the flower of Nadeshiko. Also as known as YAMATO NADESHIKO"ヤマトナデシコ". In Chiniese Characters, it is written as "大和撫子".

Those who are admired by both women and men. They are Yamato Nadeshiko!

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ph49411

And Kalafina or ClariS can play the unique, but comfortable soud with in addition to the anime style and the combination of many country's music category ,the feature of modern Japanese music.To feel Japanese anime song, all groupe can play the great song, so if you find a song you like, we recommend that you learn more about it ! Bye.

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ph49411

And Kalafina or ClariS can play the unique, but comfortable sound with something like the combination of many country's music, which is the feature of modern Japanese music, divided with anime style. To feel Japanese anime song, any group can play the great songs, so if you find a song you like, we recommend that you learn more about it ! Bye.

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ph49408

oblivious（LIVE) / The opening of the first chapter of Kara no Kyoukai

ClariS

ClariS is a group that currently consists of two high school girls. (omitted) They uploaded their song at Niconico Douga under the name Alice☆Clara, and later got an offer from an anime music magazine "Lisani" to record a CD.

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ph49408

oblivious（LIVE) / The opening of the first chapter of Sora no Kyoukai

ClariS

ClariS is a group that consists of two current high school girls. (omitted) As they uploaded their try-singing song at Niconico Douga under the name of Alice☆Clara, and got an offer from an anime music magazine "Lisani" for attaching CD.

元の翻訳
Basically, Kalafina has been formed as the main unit for Boundary of Emptiness, .........and because it had been planned that the unit was going to be disbanded after putting their album on sale. Kalafina is continuously playing on as the main group of the vocal project produced by Yuki Kajiura even after "Boundary of Emptiness".

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Basically, Kalafina has been formed as the main unit for Boundary of Emptiness, .......(omitted) and because it had been planned that the unit was going to be disbanded after their album was released. Kalafina is continuously playing on as the main group of the vocal project produced by Yuki Kajiura even after "Boundary of Emptiness". ↵
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This was originally the one-time project.

元の翻訳
I am sorry for contacting with you while you are on official business.
If you are ordering shoes during this week, it will be shipped in April.
After that, the shipment will be delayed.
If you have priority to an appointed date, you should be better order in this week.
When could you order if you have a difficulty on ordering this week because of your business trip?

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I am sorry for contacting with you while you are out on business.
If you are ordering shoes during this week, it will be shipped in April.
After that, the shipment will be delayed.
If you have priority to an appointed date, it is recommended you should order within this week.
When could you order if you have a difficulty on ordering this week because of your business trip?

元の翻訳
あなたからのメールを受けとりました。URLのインドネシアエージェントに私にメールか電話をしていただくようにしてください。↵
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こちらのインドネシア空港のスタッフにとっては今回のケースは理解するのは安易ではございません。URLエージェントに彼らに連絡させ、わたしに電話をするようにお伝えください。↵
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わたしはここにもう15年以上住んで、URLコンタクトtariffは解決への近道だと思っています。

解決法を見つけてください。
既に配送料金などは支払い済です。

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あなたからのメールを確かに受けとりました。URLのインドネシア代理店に私にメールか電話をしていただくようにしてください。こちらのインドネシアの関税のスタッフに今回のケースを理解してもらうのは安易ではございません。↵
URLインドネシア代理店に連絡し、わたしに電話をするようにお伝えください。わたしはここにもう15年以上住んで、URLに連絡してもらうのが、関税対策の解決への近道だと思っています。

御対応お願いします。
既に配送料金と手数料は支払い済です。

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eb
私たちeBayでの最初の販売ですか？
eBayで、どんな商品を販売したいですか？新品ですか、それとも中古品でしょうか？
サイトにどれくらいの数の商品を掲載するつもりですか？
その販売商品はどこで仕入れますか？
販売商品の平均価格はどれくらいですか？
支払いがされたら、商品をどれくらい早く発送しますか？
どんな発送サービスを利用しますか？
配送の追跡や完了通知を利用しますか？
支払い方法にPayPal(ペイパル)を使いますか？
もし使わないなら、どんな支払い方法にしますか？
他にeBayのアカウントは持っていますか？

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eb
eBayで私たちへ販売するのは初めてですか？
eBayで、どんな商品を販売したいですか？新品ですか、それとも中古品でしょうか？
サイトにどれくらいの数の商品を掲載するつもりですか？
その販売商品はどこで仕入れますか？
販売商品の平均価格はどれくらいですか？
支払いがされたら、商品をどれくらい早く発送しますか？
どんな発送サービスを利用しますか？
配送の追跡や完了通知を利用しますか？
支払い方法にPayPal(ペイパル)を使いますか？
もし使わないなら、どんな支払い方法にしますか？
他にeBayのアカウントは持っていますか？

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply. Certainly. This Friday is fine. Please refund $150 through PayPal. Thank you in advance.

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Thank you for your reply. Certainly. This Friday is fine. Please refund $150. Please proceed the refund through PayPal.

元の翻訳
I apologize for being late for the payment of this order.
It would be appreciatd if you could add following orders to this invoice and send me back again.
Regards.

Products I ordered today should be delivered through DHL.
Also please remember to send me a trucking number with the delivery.

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I apologize for being late for the payment of this order.
It would be appreciatd if you could add following orders to this invoice and send me back again.
Regards.

I would like you to deliver the products I ordered today through DHL.
Also please remember to send me a trucking number with the delivery.

元の翻訳
長らくお待たせして、申し訳ございません。

保留の件に焦点をあてて、今後の対応策を、再度書き直すべきだと思われます。得に、高い頻度で発生する注文不手際とカスタマーサービスについてです。

私どもが求めているスタンダードに達する為に、貴社が取るべき確固たるステップを説明してください。

以下のリンクに行動計画を作成するにあたっての、情報が提供されています。

お待たせいたしたことを再度お詫びするとともに、Ｂにご連絡いただいとことを感謝します。
またのご連絡を心待ちにしております。

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de maiil↵
長らくお待たせして、申し訳ございません。

保留の件に焦点をあてて、今後の対応策を、再度書き直すべきだと思われます。得に、高い頻度で発生する注文不手際に関する評価とカスタマーサービスについてです。

私どもが求めているスタンダードに達する為に、貴社が取るべき具体的なステップを説明してください。

以下のリンクから行動計画を作成するにあたっての、情報を参照してください。

お待たせいたしたことを再度お詫びするとともに、Ｂにご連絡いただいとことを感謝します。
またのご連絡を心待ちにしております。