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Redua by A first liquid eye liner brown 1,400 yen （tax-excluded）
Redua by A first volume mascara 1,500yen （tax -excluded）
Redua by A first long mascara 1,500yen （tax-excluded）

【Contact】
AISEI Co., Ltd.
4th floor 1-19-4 HIgashinakajima, Yodagawa,Osaka
TEL：06-6327-3790
E-mail : support@aiseis.jp
HP : http://redua.jp

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Redua by A First liquid eye liner brown 1,400 yen (tax-excluded)
Redua by A First volume mascara 1,500 yen (tax -excluded)
Redua by A First long mascara 1,500 yen (tax-excluded)

Contact
AISEI Co., Ltd.
4th floor 1-19-4 HIgashinakajima, Yodagawa,Osaka
TEL：06-6327-3790
E-mail : support@aiseis.jp
HP : http://redua.jp

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bounce

Published on March 25th
bounce 377 issue

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bounce

Published on March 25th
bounce number 377

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The spring is the season of cherry blossom in Japan. Let's download this app. JapanShoppjng!

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Spring is the season of cherry blossom in Japan. Let's download this app. JapanShoppjng!

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Thank you so much for purchacing bunch of products.
The products wll send by EMS today to pack heavily-secured.
The total account will be ○○.Does it ok with you?

Please tell me if you want other products that I put on.
If you can deal with me directly, I can discount 10%.
Also, if you can purchase multiple products, I can consider more discount.

And, if you are lookng for another Japanese products, please tell me.
I would like to make good relationship with you.
thank you.

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Thank you so much for purchacing bunch of products.
The products will be packed securely and be shipped to you via EMS today.
The total amount on the bill will be ○○.Is it ok with you?

Please let me know if you want other products that I have listed.
If you can deal with me directly, I can discount 10%.
Also, if you can purchase multiple products, I can consider more discount.

And, if you are lookng for other Japanese products, please tell me.
I would like to make good relationship with you.
thank you.

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Does the shipment is returned not yet?
The shipping cost does not need if you send back to the courier as the declining the shipping that you are worried.
I have already told the EMS courier.↵
When the returned shipment is arrived, I will pay the cast.
I have already refund, Please send back the item ASAP.
When the item does not send back, I will call paypal, ebay and police that your country as fraud.
Fraud is a serious crime.
It is against the international law, so I will file a claim to the police in Japan.

Please make your good decision.

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Have you return the shipment yet?
The shipping cost as you have been worried does not incur to you if you reject the receipt of the shipment, and have the courier take it back to their office.
I have already contacted the EMS handling agent regarding this and made an arrangement with them that I will be paying for the charges upon the arrival of the shipment.
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I have already refunded to you, so, please send back the item ASAP.
If you do not send me back the item, I will report to PayPal, ebay and police in your country as fraud.
Fraud is a serious crime.
It is against the international law, so I will file a claim to the police in Japan.

Please make your good decision.

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Hello.

I am ●○.
I am interested in this product very much.
Could you tell me how lengh ●○ and ○○?
I am pleased you tell me inchs or cm.
Thank you for your consideration.

From ○○↵
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Hello.

I am ●○.
I am very much interested in this product.
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Could you tell me how width ●○ and ○○?
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I would be glad if you tell me by inch or cm.
Thank you for your consideration.

From ○○

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EMSで商品を送って頂いて代金を支払えますか？

○○○円でOKです。

この部分の外箱（バイヤーが送ってくれたスクエアエニックスによって使用された究極の箱を含む茶色の箱）を探しています。
120US＄＋送料でいかがですか。

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EMSで商品を送って頂いて代金を支払えますか？
この文章は何を言いたいのか意味が伝わりづらいのでは？
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○○○円でOKです。
Take something offは取り除くという意味なので、こういう翻訳にはならないと思います
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この部分の外箱（バイヤーが送ってくれたスクエアエニックスによって使用された究極の箱を含む茶色の箱）を探しています。
120US＄＋送料でいかがですか。
バイヤーが送ってくれたのではなく、スクウェアエニックスがバイヤーに送るのだと思います

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We deal Japanese items with the srogan of kind and gentle.
The shippment will have a few days including confirming, but we will deliver beautiful and authentic items!
You're in good hands!

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We deal Japanese items with the slogan of kind and gentle.
The shipment will take a few days including confirming, but we will deliver beautiful and authentic items!
You're in good hands!

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Please deliver the items separately if the shipping dates will be different.
When can you deliver them?
Please let me know actual schedule.

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Please deliver the items separately if the shipping dates will be different.
When can you deliver them?
Please let me know specific dates.

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①Can I confirm the finishing of thepackage and instriction before massproduction?
②When will be the period of sending data considering the confirmation before massproduction?
③Please criate barcode label for each lot number.
④Please start 001 for lot number with 7digit number.
⑤Please fold the instruction fllowing the indication of attached document.
⑥Please store the product and the instruction fllowing the indication of attached document.
⑦Please attach the label for "year of 2015".

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①Can I confirm the finishing of thepackage and instriction before massproduction?
②When will be the period of sending data considering the confirmation before massproduction?
③Please create barcode label for each lot number.
④Please start 001 for lot number with 7 digit number.
⑤Please fold the instruction following the indication of attached document.
⑥Please store the product and the instruction following the indication of attached document.
⑦Please attach the label for "year of 2015".

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hello.
I am considering to purchase Callaway Golf UPRO MX+ GPS Device, are these version year of 2012?
And , is the Shipping Weight 7 pounds?
I'm afraid in your busy time but I am looking foraward to heaing from you.

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Hello.
I am considering purchasing Callaway Golf UPRO MX+ GPS Device. Are these the 2012 edition?
Is the Shipping Weight 7 pounds?
I'm afraid in your busy time [?], but I am looking foraward to heaing from you.

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Thank you for your reply.
I am sorry for the open the case before.
I will adjust with you to discuss for the future.

Please tell me the quantity of stock for this item.
And can I stock it continuously as the same price in the future?
If possible, I would like to do the business with you for a long period.
Then, I am looking forward to hearing from you.

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Thank you for your reply.
I am sorry for opening the case before.
From now I will adjust with you to discuss.

Please tell me the quantity of stock for this item.
And can I stock it continuously at the same price in the future?
If possible, I would like to do business with you for a long period.
Then, I am looking forward to hearing from you.

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糖尿病アプリBoyibangがAngle investmentの4.500万元を確保した

Weｌldocのような糖尿病管理アプリとプラットフォームのBoyibangが、AmebaCapitalとGuahaoのエグゼクティブディレクターであるWuJiongからの投資として4500万元（733,974米ドル）を確保した。
2012年創立であるBoyibangは自己測定と、オンライン相談、smart+people remidingサービスを結びあわせた。
このアプリは、血糖値レベル、食事摂取量、運動および投薬の追跡をアプリ上で保持するために患者の助けになり、リアルタイムでの医療記録を作成するであろう。これらのデータをもとに、医者は患者にカスタムメイドの健康管理計画を提供できるであろう。

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糖尿病アプリBoyibangがエンジェル投資の4.500万元を確保（した）

Weｌldocのような糖尿病管理アプリとプラットフォームのBoyibangが、AmebaCapitalとGuahaoのエグゼクティブディレクターであるWuJiongからのエンジェル投資として4500万元（733,974米ドル）を確保した。
2012年創立であるBoyibangは自己測定と、オンライン相談、smart+people remidingサービスを結びあわせた。
このアプリは、血糖値レベル、食事摂取量、運動および投薬の追跡をアプリ上で保持するために患者の助けになり、リアルタイムでの医療記録を作成するであろう。これらのデータをもとに、医者は患者にカスタムメイドの健康管理計画を提供できるであろう。

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Idblognetworkは、日本においてDSPを提供する初の会社だとする日本拠点のFreakoutと提携することになった。Freakout社は、IdblonetworkがFreakoutのDSPプラットフォームのおいて処理を実施するアドバイザーに許可されたインターーフェースを作成する間、インドネシアにおいてDSPとDMPを運営している。

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Idblognetworkは、日本においてDSPを提供する初の会社だとする日本を拠点とするFreakoutと提携することになった。Freakout社は、IdblonetworkがFreakoutのDSPプラットフォームにおいて広告主が取引を実施するインターーフェースを作成する間、インドネシアにおいてDSPとDMPを運営することになる。

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メールありがとうございます。
日本でXL（EU L）サイズの黒/青のスーツは注文できますか?
2014年の１月８日に私の兄弟の誕生日に必要なのです。
代用品として、赤/黒の品をありがとうございます。しかし、彼はセルビアフットボールナショナルチームの赤いジャケットを持っています。
もしよろしければ、ユニクロで 聞いてみていただきたく思います。
ドイツあるいはセルビアにはユニクロがありません。

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メールありがとうございます。
日本でXL（EU L）サイズの黒/青のスーツは注文できますか?
2014年の１月８日,私の兄弟の誕生日に必要なのです。
代用品として、赤/黒の品をありがとうございます。しかし、彼はセルビアフットボールナショナルチームの赤いジャケットを持っています。
もしよろしければ、ユニクロで 聞いてみていただきたく思います。
ドイツあるいはセルビアにはユニクロがありません。

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本日発送致しました。そして無料の速達発送にアップグレード致しました。

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本日発送致しました。そして無料で速達発送にアップグレード致しました。

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Hello.
I just arranged for returning a package.
I will tell you tracking number,when I get it.
And,this is the mail from my US (international forwarding company).

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Hello.
I have just arranged for returning a package.
I will inform you with the tracking number when I get it.
This is the email from my US (international forwarding company).

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The body of nintendo 64 ,four controllers and six game softwares are checked operation systems!

The operation systems are checked.
Some software might be not good condition, but almost all game tools are available to play comfortable!

And, four controllers are included that are available to play by all members♪
It must be fun♪
I think these can be satisfied Japanese games♪

All accessories are came out in this picture.
•body
•box
•controllers ×4
•AV cable (RGB cable)
•Doraemon
•Pokemon stadium
•Mario party
•Super speed race 64
•Go with the train
•bomber man

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The Nintendo 64 console, four controllers and six games have been tested!

I have confirmed that they are operable.
The games may have worn connectors, but all of them can be played!

And, four controllers are included so everyone can play♪
It adds to the fun♪
I think that this item can let you enjoy Japanese games to your heart's content♪

Attached are.photos of all included items:
•console
•box
•controllers ×4
•AV cable (RGB cable)
•Doraemon
•Pokemon stadium
•Mario party
•Super speed race 64
•Densha de GO!
•bomber man