Tearz (tearz) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Mr XX

Good evening.

I'm sorry for contacting you this late.

Understood. Tomorrow, when we start the workday, I will tell the person in charge to send it as soon as possible.
Best wishes.

修正後
Dear ○○,

Good evening.

I'm sorry for contacting you this late.

Understood. Tomorrow, at the start of our business day, I will tell the person in charge to send it as soon as possible.
Best wishes.

元の翻訳
(1) It was heart warming to see him say "Micky is that important? Then I'll be Micky"!"
(2) Why are you makin such face? I cannot go home if you make a face like that.
(3) Her revenge
(4) How about going out today? Not today... I cannot go because I have a plan.
(5) Several hours lager
(6) What do you use to draw this? Are you using mobile application to draw by fingers?
(7) It is difficult to understand all of your words even if I use translation device.
(8) I don't like this hairstyle much.

修正後
(1) It was heartwarming to see him say "Is Micky that important? Then I'll be Micky!"
(2) Why are you making such face? I cannot go home if you make a face like that.
(3) Her revenge
(4) How about going out today? Not today... I cannot go because I have a plan.
(5) Several hours later
(6) What do you use to draw this? Do you draw with your finger by using a mobile application?
(7) It is difficult to understand all of your words even if I use a translation device.
(8) I don't like this hairstyle much.

元の翻訳
・公式ホームページ: http://inazumarock.com/
・公式Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/InazumaRock/
・公式Twitter: https://twitter.com/irf_official/
・公式YouTubeチャンネル: https://www.youtube.com/user/irfofficialchannel

修正後
・公式ホームページ: http://inazumarock.com/
・公式Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/InazumaRock/
・公式Twitter: https://twitter.com/irf_official/
・公式YouTubeチャンネル: https://www.youtube.com/user/irfofficialchannel

元の翻訳
I checked with the manufacturer.
The internal battery is a secondary solar battery.
Also, this battery is not lithium, it is a NiCad battery,
and not dangerous.
Please remove the hazardous substance goods, thank you.

修正後
I checked with the manufacturer.
The built-in battery is a secondary solar battery.
Also, this battery is not lithium, it is a NiMH battery,
and not dangerous.
Please remove it from the category of the hazardous substance goods, thank you.

元の翻訳
ブラジルに届くまで何日くらいかかりますか？ズームやフォーカスに問題は？カビは？Canon EFマウントですか？

修正後
ブラジルに届くまで何日かかりますか？ズームやフォーカスに問題は？カビは？Canon EF搭載可能ですか？

元の翻訳
ブラジルまで何日かかりますか。ズームもしくはフォーカスに問題がありましたか。カビでしょうか。キャノンEFに搭載可能でしょうか。

修正後
ブラジルへの到着まで何日かかりますか？ズームもしくはフォーカスに問題がありましたか？カビでしょうか？キャノンEFに搭載可能でしょうか？

元の翻訳
Could you extend the deadline of Translation job ( Job 1549202: Maschine FAQ)??
If you could allow to extend the deadline before 2nd October, I can finish that.
Please tell me one more, whether it is.↵
Thank you.

修正後
Could you extend the deadline of the translation job for Job 1549202: Maschine FAQ?
If you could extend it to 2nd October, I can finish that.
Thank you for your confirmation in advance.

元の翻訳
Can you please extend the deadline of the translation for Maschine FAQ?
It will be great if the deadline can be extended to 2nd October.
Kindly confirm the deadline. Thank you.

修正後
Could you please extend the deadline of the translation for Job 1549202: Maschine FAQ?
It would be great if the deadline can be extended to 2nd October.
Kindly confirm the deadline. Thank you.

元の翻訳
合計金額は450ユーロです。

送料込みで410ユーロにできます。

全ての商品はオリジナルの箱に入っており、新品の状態です。

ご希望であれば、伝票には中古品と書いて、申告する金額を下げることができます。

商品は約10年前に製造されたものですが、箱は一度も開けられていません。
その箱を緩衝材で包み、別の箱で梱包して、衝撃から守ることもできます。

PayPalか銀行送金でお支払いを承りますがどちらになさいますか？

修正後
合計金額は450ユーロです。

送料込みで410ユーロにできます。

全ての商品はオリジナルの箱に入っており、新品の状態です。

ご希望であれば、伝票には中古品と書いて、申告する金額を下げることができます。

商品は約10年前に製造されたものですが、箱は一度も開けられていません。
その箱を省いて緩衝材で包み、別の箱で梱包して、衝撃から守ることもできます。

PayPalか銀行送金でお支払いを承りますがどちらになさいますか？

元の翻訳
The ordered merchandise is not arriving.
I would like a refund now

Even though the scheduled delivery date has expired, the merchandise is not coming.

修正後
The ordered merchandise has not arrived yet.
Please issue a refund immediately.

Although the expected delivery date has expired, the merchandise has not arrived yet.

元の翻訳
I product I ordered has not arrived.
I would like a repayment immediately.

It has passed the delivery date and it still has not arrived.

修正後
The item I ordered has not arrived yet.
Please issue me a refund immediately.

It has passed the delivery date and the item I ordered still has not arrived yet.

元の翻訳
Are you not be able to provide a demo site until mid-October?Will take so much time for the server to be ready? I very much doubt this.

修正後
Would the demo site not be available until mid October? Does it take that long to get the server ready? It's very doubtful.

元の翻訳
Is it really difficult for you to prepare a demostration site by middle of October? Do you really need so many hours to prepare the site? I dobut there's something wrong with you.

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Would the demo site not be available until mid October? Does it take that long to get the server ready? It's very doubtful.

元の翻訳
I have yet to receive the invoice for the order 0923
may I ask you to send it for today ?

I have receive the confirmation that the order no 1165 and 1188 have been shipped.
but it seems that the order 1195 from september 9th isn't shipped yet
why is that ?
if the stock of merchandise that i did order is not sufficient, could you please at least send me what you still have in stock first.

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I have yet to receive the invoice for the Order0923.
May I ask you to send it by the end of today ?

I have confirmed that the Order No. 1165 and 1188 have been shipped.
But it seems that the Order No. 1195 ordered on September 19th has not been shipped yet.
Why is that ?
If it is on hold because of a part of the inventory is out of stock, then could you go ahead and ship the available ones first?↵

元の翻訳
I have not received the invoice for Order0923, yet.
Could you send it to me within today?

I have checked that No. 1165 and 1188 have been shipped.
However, I don't see that Order No. 1195 seems to be not being shipped yet.
Why hasn't it been shipped yet?
If it is on hold because of a part of the inventory is out of stock, then could you send the ones which are ready to be shipped?

修正後
I have not received the invoice for Order0923, yet.
Could you send it to me within today?

I have checked that No. 1165 and 1188 have been shipped.
However, Order No. 1195 does not seem having been shipped yet.
Why hasn't it been shipped yet?
If it is on hold because of a part of the inventory is out of stock, then could you go ahead and ship the available ones first?

元の翻訳
I haven't recieved a invoce of the Order0923 yet.
Could you ship it today?
I have checked the Order No.1165 and 1188.Though the Order No.1195 was ordered on Sep 19th might have not shipped yet.Why it hasn't shipped?
If it's because of some of those items are out of stock so they haven't shipped,please ship those items stocked first.

修正後
I haven't recieved the invoce for Order0923 yet.
Could you send it by the end of the day?
I have confirmed the shipment for Order No.1165 and 1188. ↵
However the Order No.1195 ordered on September 19th does not seem to have been shipped yet. ↵
Why hasn't it been shipped?
If the shipment is put on hold because some of those items are out of stock, please ship available items first.

元の翻訳
I purchased A and B from you.
Have you sent them all together or separately?
If you have sent it separately, please let me know the tracking number of another one.
Thank you for your cooperation.

修正後
I purchased A and B from you.
Have you shipped them altogether or separately?
If you have shipped them separately, please let me know the tracking number for the other one.
Thank you for your cooperation.

元の翻訳
それらを手に入れるのはとても難しく、２０ドルかそこらで手に入れる方法は残念ながらございません。私はここアメリカで、それらを一つにつき３９ドルで大量に販売しております。もしあなたが購入を希望されるなら、一つ２９ドルで、またクロム合金のものに関しては２２ドルでご用意できます。

それらもまた一つ２２ドルでご用意いたしております。

修正後
それらを手に入れるのはとても難しく、２０ドルあたりで手に入れる方法は残念ながらございません。私はここアメリカで、それらを一つにつき３９ドルで大量に販売しております。もしあなたが購入を希望されるなら、一つ２９ドルで、またクロム合金のものに関しては２２ドルでご用意できます。

それらもまた一つ２２ドルでご用意いたしております。

元の翻訳
I see.
I am glad everything was okay.

It would be fine if you can ship the 21 items in two or three shipments.
You don't have to ship each box separately.

When will the 9 items that I ordered before the 21 items ship?

修正後
I see.
I am glad everything was okay.

It would be fine if you can ship the 21 items in two or three shipments.
You don't have to ship each box separately.

When will the 9 items that I ordered before the 21 items be shipped?

元の翻訳
ZOOMが機能しません。リングを回せません。利用できる調整は、24-25の位置でのみです。
ズームを除いて、その他の全ては、良く機能しています。

修正後
ZOOMが機能しません。リングを回せません。利用できる調整は、24-22の位置でのみです。
ズームを除いて、その他の全ては、良く機能しています。

元の翻訳
（レンズの）ズームに異常があります。リングが回せません。24-22の位置でしか調整できません。ズーム以外の機能は正常に働くのですが。

修正後
（レンズの）ズームに異常があります。リングが回せません。24-22の位置でしか調整できません。ズーム以外の機能は正常に動くのですが。

元の翻訳
ズームが機能しません。リングを回すことができません。調節できるのは24-22の位置だけです。ズーム以外の他の部分に関してはちゃんと機能しています。

修正後
ズームが機能しません。リングを回すことができません。調節できるのは24-22の位置だけです。ズーム以外はすべてきちんと機能しています。

元の翻訳
どうですか？全部時間に間に合って翻訳できると思いますか？

二つの追加の注意事項
英語のテキストが明日の終わりまでできていなかったら10月6日の元の発表日に戻って行かなければなりません。
週末の仕事のため50ユーロのボーナスを提供することができます。

時間に間に合えるかどうか教えてください

修正後
どうですか？全部時間内に翻訳できると思いますか？

追加の注意事項2点
・英語のテキストが明日中までにできていなければ、当初の発表日である10月6日のに戻さなければなりません。
・週末業務のため特別手当50ユーロを提供します。

時間内に対応可能かどうか教えてください。