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元の翻訳
- どのくらい会社でいます
- 在庫のソース
- Aの毎月売上高を予想される
- ディスパッチ商品の在庫状況
- すべての小売店のアドレス
- 他のウェブサイトで販売している
- ダンアンドブラッドストリート（D-U-N-S）の数
- 最近ディスパッチ注文の情報を追跡

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- 事業年数
- 在庫のソース
- 予想されるAの毎月売上高
- 発送商品の在庫状況
- すべての小売店の住所
- 販売している他のウェブサイトのリンク
- ダンアンドブラッドストリート（D-U-N-S）番号
- 最近発送した注文の追跡情報

元の翻訳
The first digital single "Dance In The Rain" start simultaneous delivery on Rekochoku (R), mu-mo and at other sites!

First digital single "Dance In The Rain" that had been preceding delivery at iTunes®,
and then start simultaneous delivery on Rekochoku (R), mu-mo and at other sites from today.

修正後
The first digital single "Dance In The Rain" start simultaneous delivery on Rekochoku (R), mu-mo and other websites!

First digital single "Dance In The Rain" that had been preceded to be delivered at iTunes®,
started simultaneous delivery on Rekochoku (R), mu-mo and other websites from today.

元の翻訳
■ schedule on future
Koda Kumi 15th Anniversary First Class 2nd LIMITED LIVE
KODA KUMI 15th Anniversary Project second edition!
Koda Kumi was conducted first time for the one-man live
By memories of venue "STUDIO COAST",
From Koda Kumi official fan club, everyone of "Koda team"
Lottery 10,000 people and invite them to attend a special live!
[Schedule] December 6, 2014 (Saturday)

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■ schedule on future
Koda Kumi 15th Anniversary First Class 2nd LIMITED LIVE
KODA KUMI 15th Anniversary Project second edition!
Koda Kumi conducted the one-man live for the first time.
By memories of venue "STUDIO COAST",
From Koda Kumi official fan club, 10000 people of "Koda team"
are invited to attend a special live on lottery.
[Schedule] December 6, 2014 (Saturday)