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元の翻訳
Xiaomiは８月にインドネシアで発売した。全製品を販売するより、XiaomiはRedmi 1S（下の写真）を１２０ドル相当の価格で販売し、インドネシアの低価市場を狙っている。

この後インドネシアと東南アジアでのXiaomiはどうなるのか。Xiaomiの副社長、ヒュゴ•バラはStartup Asia Jakarta 2014の二日目に出演し、Xiaomiがどのようにインドネシアで全ての適切なボタンを押さえようとするかについて話す予定だ。

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Xiaomiは８月にインドネシアでローンチした。全製品を販売するより、XiaomiはRedmi 1S（下の写真）を１２０ドル相当の価格で販売し、インドネシアの低価格市場を狙っている。

この後インドネシアと東南アジアでのXiaomiはどうなるのか。Xiaomiの副社長、ヒュゴ•バラ氏はStartup Asia Jakarta 2014の二日目に出演し、Xiaomiがどのようにインドネシアで全ての適切なボタンを押さえようとするかについて話す予定だ。

元の翻訳
It's possible to change the setting to allow for acquiring detailed data.

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It's possible to set for acquiring detailed data.

元の翻訳
Hello,
I bought a product from Amazon.com the other day.
There was no problem with how the product functioned, but the letter of warranty and user manual were not included in the shipment.
Could you send me the warranty and manual?
My address is in Japan.

Also, how many years is the warranty valid for?

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Hello,
I bought a product from Amazon.com the other day.
There was no problem with how the product functioned, but the warranty certificate and user manual were not included in the shipment.
Could you send them to me?
My address is in Japan.

Also, how many years is the warranty valid for?

元の翻訳
Before the show started, I tried the robot restaurant's boxed meal that I had ordered in advance for the occasion. It tasted pretty good! Considering the energy you will need to enjoy the show, I think it is a good idea to finish the meal beforehand.

All right with the preface. The show starts!

Finally came out the troop of female warriors! There was some fancy action going on, with some beating the drum along to the rhythmical music, and some fighting against warriors clad in armor. There were dance, music, and laughter in the show. Now that I think of it there was also a cute panda that appeared in it.

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Before the show starts, I tried the robot restaurant's boxed meal that I had ordered in advance for the occasion. It tasted so-so good! Considering the energy you will need to enjoy the show, I think it is a good idea to finish the meal beforehand.

All right with the preface. The show starts!

Finally came out the troop of female warriors! There was some fancy action going on, with some beating the drum along to the rhythmical music, and some fighting against warriors clad in armor. There were dance, music, and laughter in the show. Now that I think of it there was also a cute panda that appeared in it.