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FM Yokohama "THE BREEZE"

9:00 to 12:00 on March 18th (Wednesday)
KUMI KODA is going to perform in FM Yokohama "THE BREEZE".

■Website of the program
https://www.fmyokohama.co.jp/pc/program/TheBreeze

*The hour of the broadcasting is subject to change due to some reasons.
We appreciate your understanding in advance.l

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FM Yokohama "THE BREEZE"

9:00 to 12:00 on March 18th (Wednesday)
KUMI KODA is going to perform in FM Yokohama "THE BREEZE".

■Official website of the program
https://www.fmyokohama.co.jp/pc/program/TheBreeze

*The contents of the program are subject to change due to unforeseen circumstances.
We appreciate your understanding in advance.

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Bunka Broadcasting "Listen？ ～Live 4 Life～」

9:00 to12:00 on March 18th (Wednesday)
KUMI KODA will perform in FM yokohama "THE BREEZE."

■Website of the program
https://www.fmyokohama.co.jp/pc/program/TheBreeze

* The hour of broadcasting is subject to change due to some reasons.
We appreciate your understanding in advance.

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Nippon Cultural Broadcasting "Listen？ ～Live 4 Life～」

9:00 to12:00 on March 18th (Wednesday)
KUMI KODA will perform in FM yokohama "THE BREEZE."

■Website of the program
https://www.fmyokohama.co.jp/pc/program/TheBreeze

* The hour of broadcasting is subject to change due to some reasons.
We appreciate your understanding in advance.

元の翻訳
Space shower TV Plus "KUMI KODA Special"

Space shower TV Plus "KUMI KODA Special"
The music video of KUMI KODA will be broadcasted for 60 minutes.

(Time and date)
17:00 to 18:00 on March 15th (Sunday) (1st time)
25:30 to March 22nd (Sunday) (2nd time)

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Space shower TV Plus "KUMI KODA Special"

Space shower TV Plus "KUMI KODA Special"
Bunch of music videos of KUMI KODA will be broadcasted for 60 minutes.

(Time and date)
17:00 to 18:00 on March 15th (Sunday) (1st time)
25:30 to March 22nd (Sunday) (2nd time)

元の翻訳
We heard that you cannot focus on the lens. We apologize for it. We accept returning the item from you. We hate to ask, but would you return the lens to the address to which it should be returned? After we receive the item, we will refund you the whole amount that you paid including the shipping charge. Thank you for your cooperation.

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We heard that the lens is out of focus. We apologize for it. We accept the item being returned from you. We hate to ask, but would you return the lens to the address to which it should be returned? After we receive the item, we will refund you the whole amount that you paid including the shipping charge. Thank you for your cooperation.

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２つの剃刀を出荷用に準備後、再度、チェックしました。ヘンケル１７については間違っておりました。形が間違っておりました。返品にご迷惑をおかけしましたが、これは、持っておきたいです。返品したいのは、ヘンケル１４（商品番号１１１３２２３７３０６３）であり、代金は１５７．３０ドル、送料は１４ドル、合計１７１．３０ドルです。
ご教示いただいたように航空便にてお送りします。多大なご迷惑をおかけし申し訳ございませんでした。ご協力に深謝します。貴社から購入した他の商品を愛用しています。

貴国における出荷まで
日本到着後、日本郵便のウェブサイトにて追跡できます。早急に、ご返金ください。

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２つの剃刀を出荷用に準備後、再度、チェックしました。ヘンケル１７については間違っておりました。良い状態なので、返品に関してご迷惑をおかけしましたが、これは、持っておきたいです。返品したいのは、ヘンケル１４（商品番号１１１３２２３７３０６３）であり、代金は１５７．３０ドル、送料は１４ドル、合計１７１．３０ドルです。
ご教示いただいたように航空便にてお送りします。多大なご迷惑をおかけし申し訳ございませんでした。ご協力に深謝します。貴社から購入した他の商品は非常に満足しています。

貴国における出荷まで
日本到着後、日本郵便のウェブサイトにて追跡できます。早急に、ご返金ください。

元の翻訳
I am not satisfied with the rating.
Today I received the item from Germany.
It says "The storing period has expired and a receiver does not request receiving it" in Japanese
and it also says "Non reclame=The storing period has expired" in French."
The buyer said that there was not enough document for it, but it was wrong.
The cause of this problem is that the buyer did not receive the item during the storing period.
As the post office listed it on the item clearly, I would like you to check it in the picture.

It must be against the policy to rate the seller negatively although the buyer did not receive the item.

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I am not satisfied with the feedback.
Today I received the item from Germany.
It says "The storing period has expired and a receiver does not request receiving it" in Japanese
and it also says "Non reclame=The storing period has expired" in French."
The buyer said that there was not enough document for it, but it was wrong.
The cause of this problem is that the buyer did not receive the item during the storing period.
As the post office listed it on the item clearly, I would like you to check it in the picture.

It must be against the policy to rate the seller negatively although the buyer did not claim to receive the item.

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I would like to order another jacket of ICON additionally. The size is large.
As I already paid for the 5 that I ordered last time,
they must be in the process of manufacturing.
Would you please send them after you finish manufacturing them in advance?
Please send the one that I ordered this time afterwards.

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I would like to order another jacket of ICON additionally. The size is large.
As I already paid for the 5 that I ordered last time,
They must be in the process of manufacturing.
Would you please send them after you finish manufacturing them in advance?
Please send the one that I ordered this time afterwards.

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Good day.
Regarding refund, I would like to pay the expense for repairing to Mamiya directly.
The reason is unless I receive a receipt by my name, it is not correct in the calculation of the sales.
It was indicated by the tax accountant.
Would you tell a person in charge in Mamiya to contact me?
I apologize to have given you an extra work.

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Good day.
Regarding refund, I would like to pay the expense for repairing to Mamiya directly.
The reason is unless I receive a receipt by my name, it will not be correct in the calculation of the sales.
This was indicated by the tax accountant.
Would you tell a person in charge in Mamiya to contact me?
I apologize to have given you an extra work.

元の翻訳
We do not reissue the participation ticket of the hands shaking regardless of the reason including loss and theft, etc. We appreciate your understanding.
The participation ticket of the hands shaking is effective only during the hours designated on the day.
You are not allowed to take a film and record the artists while they are performing.
The number of the CD by reservation and participation ticket of the hands shaking on the day is limited. We will finish it when we sell them out. We appreciate your understanding in advance.
You can pay only in cash. We do not accept the credit card, etc. We appreciate your understanding in advance.

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We do not reissue the participation ticket of the hands shaking regardless of the reason including loss and theft, etc. We appreciate your understanding.
The participation ticket of the hands shaking is effective only during the hours designated on the day.
You are not allowed to take a photo or a film and record the artists while they are performing.
The number of the CD by reservation and participation ticket of the hands shaking on the day is limited. We will finish it when we sell them out. We appreciate your understanding in advance.
You can pay only in cash. We do not accept the credit card, etc. We appreciate your understanding in advance.

元の翻訳
If we witness the act that violates the notes and if you do not follow the instruction of the staff on the day, we might stop the event or ask you to leave the hall. We appreciate your understanding in advance.

We might check the personal belongings of those who participate in the hands shaking or accept it for the purpose of reinforcing the security by putting the top priority on the safety of the customers and performers.
If you are not cooperative with the above items, we might refuse your participation to the hands shaking. We appreciate your understanding in advance.

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If we witness the act that violates the notes and if you do not follow the instruction of the staff on the day, we might stop the event or ask you to leave the hall. We appreciate your understanding in advance.

We might check the personal belongings of those who participate in the hands shaking or accept it for the purpose of reinforcing the security by putting the top priority on the safety of the customers and performers.
If you are not cooperative with the above points, we might refuse your participation to the hands shaking. We appreciate your understanding in advance.

元の翻訳
When you make a reservation for the item, you have to pay by whole amount in advance.
We send the item that you reserved. We will ask you to pay for the shipping charge in addition to the price of the item.
We do not refund for the CD that you reserved. We appreciate your understanding in advance. We will exchange the item with defect with the one without defect.
Those who participate in the hands shaking with a child who is 3 years old or older than that need the participation ticket for him or her separately.

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When you reserve an item, you have to pay the whole amount in advance.
We send the item that you reserved. We will ask you to pay for the shipping charges in addition to the price of the item.
We do not offer refunds for reserved CDs. We appreciate your understanding in advance. We will exchange defected ones with ones that are not defected.
Those who participate in the hand-shaking with a child who is 3 years old or older will need a separate participation ticket.

元の翻訳
We ask you to refrain from staying overnight in or around the hall since it causes a nuisance to those in the neighborhood.
You must pay for the expense for transportation and staying at a hotel, etc. on the day.
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Inquiry↵
Avex Music Creative 0570-064-414(11:00 to 18:00 on weekdays)

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* Please refrain from staying overnight in or around the hall, as it will cause a nuisance to those in the neighborhood.*
* You will be responsible for your own transportation and stay expenses.↵
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If you have any inquiries contact us at:
Avex Music Creative 0570-064-414 (11:00 am to 6:00 pm on weekdays)

元の翻訳
Thai Government Convention and Exhibition Bureau (TCEB) held the "Japan MICE Road Show 2015" in the Imperial Hotel in Tokyo on March 3rd.

Mr. Bichaya who is a director of the TCEB Meeting Incentive Convention made a presentation of the Thai MICE. In addition, 11 companies and 20 people including the hotels and air line companies in Thailand listed in the business meeting. The major travel companies and 41 people including the land operators in Japan participated in it, and had a business meeting with the suppliers about the newest information of the Thai MICE.

They are also going to hold it in Osaka on March 5th.

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The Thai Government Convention and Exhibition Bureau (TCEB) held the "Japan MICE Road Show 2015" in the Imperial Hotel in Tokyo on March 3rd.

Mr. Bichaya, who is a director of the TCEB Meeting Incentive Convention, made a presentation on the Thai MICE. In addition, 11 companies and 20 people including hotels and airline companies in Thailand were listed in the business meeting. Major travel companies and 41 people, including land operators in Japan, participated in it and had a business meeting with the suppliers about the newest information regarding Thai MICE.

They are also going to hold it in Osaka on March 5th.

元の翻訳
5. We shall take a measure of safety regarding the risks such as loss, damage, falsifying and leakage, etc. of the individual information.

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5. We shall take safety measures regarding risks for loss, damage, falsification, leakage, etc. of personal information.

元の翻訳
10 responsible persons of xxx across the nation
Select10 specialist for demonstration in main office
Establish a system where 130 solution specialists (presales engineers) across the nation can demonstrate.

2. Expansion of the demonstration machine
Prepare the mobile router: start from a few pieces

3. Full development of the learning environment
Prepare the moving picture of the training and the manual for sales

4. Improvement of the process of the business meeting
Increase the business meetings and reducing the interval between them
Promote approach for those who have a right to determine the introduction
Reinforce the top sales
Develop an example of introducing the users
Include the network engineers in the early stage of the business meetings

Detailed activity for increasing the number of the business meeting

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10 responsible persons of xxx across the nation
Select specialists for demonstration in main office
Establish a system where 130 solution specialists (presales engineers) across the nation can demonstrate.

2. Expansion of the demonstration machine
Prepare the mobile router: start from a few pieces

3. Full development of the learning environment
Prepare the moving picture of the training and the manual for sales

4. Improvement of the process of the business meeting
Increase the business meetings and reducing the period
Promote approach for those who have a right to determine the introduction
Reinforce the top sales
Develop an example of introducing the users
Include the network engineers in the early stage of the business meetings

Detailed activity for increasing the number of the business meeting

元の翻訳
Gap between October and now

1. The demonstration must be conducted in the process of receiving an order.
It was delayed as the sufficient number of the person who can demonstrate was not assigned.
2. There was no sufficient machine for the demonstration since the number of people who can demonstrate was increased.
3. The number of the business meeting was not increased in November and December (Lack of understanding for the sales and its ability).
Hard time in January and February.
4. The process of the business meeting was not simple.
Example: The business meeting where the verification was made under the environment of the customer was extended.

Action to fill the gap

1. Reinforce the system

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Gap between October and now

1. The demonstration must be conducted in the process of receiving an order.
It was delayed as the sufficient number of the people who can demonstrate was not assigned.
2. There was no sufficient machine for the demonstration since the number of people who can demonstrate was increased.
3. The number of the business meeting was not increased in November and December (Lack of understanding for the sales and its ability).
Hard time in January and February.
4. The process of the business meeting was not simple.
Example: The business meeting where the verification was made under the environment of the customer was extended.

Action to fill the gap

1. Reinforce the system

元の翻訳
I found bug.
A comment that I posted a few minutes ago is shown as "1 month ago".
I would like to request as follows.
1. I want to show the tab of the "list" at the most right.
It is shown next to the "Uploads", isn't it?
2. I want to show the comment by the order it arrives.

If it is difficult for you to fix it, you do not have to fix it.
Please use the above for the reference.
Finally I sent an e-mail that I wanted to list an advertisement before.
However, I solve it by myself.

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I found a bug.
A comment that I posted a few minutes ago is shown as "1 month ago".
I also have some requests as follows.
1. I want to show the tab of "list" at the most right.
It is shown next to the "Uploads" now, isn't it?
2. I want to show the comment by the order it arrives.

If it is difficult for you to fix it, you do not have to fix it.
Please use the above for the reference.
Finally I sent an e-mail that I wanted to list an advertisement before.
However, I solve it by myself.

元の翻訳
The 3rd single album entitled "BOKU NO YUTU TO FUKIGENNAKANOJO"
is going to be released on March 25th (Wednesday) 2015.

The release day of the 4th album and thereafter will be announced when we decide it.

The stores of Ito Yokado that sell the music card
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We ask you refrain from inquiring by telephone.

(Hokkaido)
Asahikawa
Hakodate
Kushiro
Eniwa
Kitami

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The 3rd single titled "BOKU NO YUTU TO FUKIGENNAKANOJO"
is going to be released on March 25th (Wednesday) 2015.

The release day of the 4th single and thereafter will be announced when we decide it.

The list of Ito Yokado stores that sell the music card
*Please kindly refrain from inquiring by telephone.

(Hokkaido)
Asahikawa
Hakodate
Kushiro
Eniwa
Kitami

元の翻訳
The music card is sold only in Ito Yokado.
As the number of the card is limited, we recommend that you make a reservation
as soon as possible.

Some stores do not sell the music card.
Please refer to the "stores that sell the music card" listed below.
We do not accept the reservation by telephone.
We hope that you understand it.
We will stop the sales by reservation when we sell out the stock
that we plan at each store.

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The music card is sold only at Ito Yokado.
As the number of the card is limited, we recommend that you make a reservation
as soon as possible.

Some stores do not sell the music card.
Please refer to the "stores that sell the music card" listed below.
We do not accept the reservation by telephone.
We hope that you understand it.
We will stop the sales by reservation when we sell out the stock
that we plan at each store.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply.
I was wrong in communication.
I will ask you 2 questions.
1st is I am not considering an exclusive contract.
I would like to sell your item as much as possible in Japan.↵
They are so superb.
I am increasing the sales route. If I can purchase at a little lower price, I will↵
probably be able to sell much more than now.
I would be appreciated if you consider it.
2nd is the mark that I can input.
★☆♥♡
May I input the above marks?
I am looking forward to your reply.

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Thank you for your reply.
I was wrong in communication [This is not what the source says].
I will ask you 2 questions [mistranslation].
1st is [awkward] I am not considering an exclusive contract.
I would like to sell your item as much as possible in Japan because they are so superb.
I am increasing the sales route. If I can purchase at a little lower price, I will probably be able to sell much more than now.
I would appreciate it if you could consider it.
2nd is the mark that I can input [unclear].
★☆♥♡
May I enter the above marks?
I am looking forward to your reply.