映像翻訳者 (peilan) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
やっと昔に工場へ注文した入荷待ちしてた物が入りました。

S4410xを10個入荷したそうですが、私たちが昔注文したのは3個だと言われました、そちらの記録に合っていますか？

もし問題はなければ、上記通り次の出荷と一緒に出しますので、数は合ってるかどうかを教えてください。

新しい注文の在庫はほぼ確保できています。もう少し揃えば出荷できるかと思います。

修正後
やっと昔に工場に注文し、入荷待ちしていた物が入りました。

S4410xを10個入荷したそうですが、私たちが昔注文したのは3個だと言われました、そちらの記録に合っていますか？

もし問題がなければ、上記通り次の出荷と一緒にしますので、数が合ってるかどうか教えてください。

新しい注文の在庫はほぼ確保できています。もう少し揃えば出荷できると思います。

元の翻訳
I'm so sorry about the misunderstanding.
I have checked with the manufacturer of ESP, the guitar you're having is the model 120 without doubt.
Because 110 and 120 have exactly the same spec and size.

Value-added in Japan has changed from 5% to 8% this April. Because of this, the manufacturer of ESP have changed the price of model 110 and sold it as model 120. In other words, even if you change it to model 120, you'll still get the same guitar.
Because 110 and 120 are the same model so there will not be $200 difference in the payment.

修正後
I'm so sorry about the misunderstanding.
I have checked with the manufacturer of ESP, but your guitar is the model 120 without doubt.
Because 110 and 120 have exactly the same spec and size.

Value-added tax in Japan has changed from 5% to 8% from this April. Because of this, the manufacturer of ESP have changed the price of model 110 and sold it as model 120. In other words, even if you change it to model 120, you'll still get the same guitar.
Because 110 and 120 are the same model so there will not be $200 difference in the payment.

元の翻訳
この状況を見るのを大変申し訳ありません。

実は荷物の追跡についてDHLと検証したところ、彼らの話によると竜巻発生のため、荷物が濡れて損傷してしまいました。

この件と遺失した写真について、保険会社へ賠償請求をします。
また追ってご連絡致します。

ところで、 GW9400-3 (12) と GW9400-1 (7)は必要ですか？

教えてください。

修正後
この状況を見るのは大変残念です。

実は荷物の追跡についてDHLと検証したところ、彼らの話によると竜巻発生のため、荷物が濡れて損傷してしまいました。

この件と遺失した写真について、保険会社へ賠償請求をします。
また追ってご連絡致します。

ところで、 GW9400-3 (12) と GW9400-1 (7)は必要ですか？

教えてください。

元の翻訳
Phoenix Seagaia Resort started English contents reading subscription App for mobile devices.

The App is based on this March's Japanese subscription which was translated into English. PDFs, videos and photos etc, resort's MICE information was sent by various media. Through tablets and smart phones, develop rich promotions can be even faster, Miyazaki MICE's charm is spreading.
You can check out the facilities, layouts of each hall and baton plans by the App.

修正後
Phoenix Seagaia Resort started English contents reading subscription App for mobile devices.

The App is based on this March's Japanese subscription which was translated into English. PDFs, videos and photos etc, resort's MICE information were sent by various media. Through tablets and smart phones, developing rich promotions can be even faster, Miyazaki MICE's charm is spreading.
You can check out the facilities, layouts of each hall and baton plans by the App.

元の翻訳
Copy writer's name card, independent notification direct mail and new year greeting card.

In the independent direct mail was printed 'pen' of 'independent' in bold letters to emphasis on the thing - pen - that no copy writers can do without it, and also to show the determination of being independent - I took the 'pen'.

Also in the new year greeting card, visualized copied name card to show that old copy has gone and new copy has produced.

修正後
Copywriter business cards, direct mail notifying independence, and New Year greeting cards.

In the independence direct mail, the "pen" in "independent" is printed in bold UV letters to emphasize that no copywriter can do without the pen, and also to show the determination of becoming independent - I took the "pen".

Also in the New Year greeting cards, visuals of copied business cards show that the old copies are gone and the new copies has been produced.