honeylemon (honeylemon003) — もらったレビュー

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I have contacted the courier company regarding to your item.

The item is still in custom because of the name (company name ) of receiver was blank.

We didn't know it because we didn't receive a contact from courier company about the situation.

We have explained your company name and address, contents of the parcel, to customs service again and asked them to screen out the item just before.

I heard as soon as the item is pass through, it will be delivered to us.↵
I guess it will take 2 to 3 days.

Thank you

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I have contacted the courier company regarding your item.

The item is still in customs because of the name (company name ) of the recipient had been left blank.

We had no way of knowing about it because we had not received any notification from the courier company that the package was being held at customs.

We have forwarded our company name and address, contents of the parcel, to the courier company and requested that they go through customs again.

I was told that it will be shipped to us as soon as the item clears the customs. ↵
I am guessing that we should receive it within 2 or 3 days.

Thank you

元の翻訳
Hello.
I have sent you an email on June 22nd, regarding to the sample order .
Hope you received it ok. and I have been waiting for your reply.

Also, when do you think I will receive a contract document?

We would like to introduce this product to Japan market very soon.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Kind regards,

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Hello.
I (have) sent you an email on June 22nd, regarding to the sample order .
Hope you received it ok. and I （have been waiting） for your reply. (これなら今まで待っていたことになって、前半のよんでもらえましたか、という文章とは若干むすびつかないのでは。I will be waiting for とか I am waiting for にしなければ、まっています、にはならないと思います

Also, when do you think I will receive a contract document?

We would like to introduce this product to Japan market very soon.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Kind regards,

元の翻訳
top grade product

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(a) top grade product or top grade products or the top grade product

元の翻訳
Thank you for purchasing our product.
I hope you liked the item.

If you still looking for another cool and high-quality
Japan made dolls, please let me know.

We have a several manufactures dealing with.
It would be able to response to your needs and satisfy you.

If you like, please purchase a product from ABCD SHOP.

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Thank you for purchasing our product.
I hope you liked the item.

If you still looking for another cool and high-quality
Japan made dolls, please let me know.

We have a （a は不要ではないのですか？)↵
several manufactures dealing with (これではわからないと思います。私がまちがっているかもしれませんが。several manufatures with whom we are dealing withでは）↵

It would be able to response to your needs and satisfy you.（ここは完全に間違っていると思います。It would be able to response to youのところ です。文法的にでも、どうしても。We think we will be able to meet your needs and satisfy youとか。

If you like, please purchase a product from ABCD SHOP.↵
(ここですが、 a product 一個かってもらったらいいような表現ですね。if you like, please buy more products at ABCD↵
・・・）

元の翻訳
I am so relieved that you have received the item safely.

I am sorry.

I couldn't recognized the failure.

As you wish, I will refund 50 euros.

I am so sorry for what happened.

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I am so relieved that you have received the item safely.

I am sorry.

I couldn't recognized the failure.

As you wish, I will refund 50 euros.

I am so sorry for what happened.
(ここのところ、なにか日本人的でも、無責任ないいかたと思いますが。私のほうで迷惑をかけたのだから、I am so sorry to have troubled you とか have casused trouble for you とか↵
まあ、間違いではありませんが。）↵

元の翻訳
I am so relieved that you have received the item safely.

I am sorry.

I couldn't recognized the failure.

As you wish, I will refund 50 euros.

I am so sorry for what happened.

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I am so relieved that you have received the item safely.

I am sorry.

I couldn't recognize the failure.

As you wish, I will refund 50 euros.

I am so sorry for what happened.

元の翻訳
You mean that if I want the item to be sent to Florida next time, it cost similar shipping?
So I want to confirm that the postage of last order was correct.

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Do you mean that even if I want the item to be sent to Florida next time, the shipping charge will cost the similar amount?
So can I understand that the postage for the last order was correct?

元の翻訳
I am sorry,
I forgot to set the price including shipping.

If you haven't purchase the item,
can you to buy the item from another seller?

I am so sorry for all the hassle.

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I am sorry,
I forgot to set the price including shipping.

If you haven't purchased the item,
can you buy the item from another seller?

I am so sorry for all the hassles.

元の翻訳
Thank you for making time for me yesterday.
It was really fun talking with you.

Anyway, can you send me a sample of the product before you ship 20 of them that I asked yesterday? I would like the one with 27.2mm width. I'd like to check the quality of the item first.


You can ship my order of 20 of those items, in the end of July.

If possible, please send 1 sample as soon as possible. I don't mind if I have to pay extra. Also please contact me with payment method.
It would be great if I can pay by credit card or PayPal.

Thank you. Hoping for the great trade with you in a future.

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Thank you for making time for me yesterday.
It was really fun talking with you.

Anyway, can you send me a sample of the product before you ship 20 of them (them とするとどこにも前に複数形のものがないのでproduct before you ship 20 pieces　なら誤解がないか？)　that I asked yesterday? I would like the one with 27.2mm width. I'd like to check the quality of the item first.


You can ship （my order of 20 of those items は私の注文を出荷するということでおかしい？ the 20 pieces that I ordered , in the end of July　（これはat the end of Julyです）.

If possible, please send 1 sample as soon as possible. I don't mind if I have to pay extra　（extra はほとんど 形容詞の使い方だけですから、extra chargeにしたほうがいいと思います）. Also please contact me with（ここはconcerning theのほうがはっきりすると思います） payment method.
It would be great if I can pay by credit card or PayPal.

Thank you. Hoping for the great trade with you in a future.

元の翻訳
I would like to know how much (%) discount I get.
Could you please advise me the price of the product after the discount?
I will let you know the products I would like to buy later.

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I would like to know how much (%) discount I get.
Could you please advise me the price of the product after the discount?
I will let you know the products I would like to buy later.
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元の翻訳
Is aunty Kazuko healing from tiredness of all the travel?
I assume that Machiko will be busy for a while as Robert family's moving to Boston.

We are looking forward seeing everyone by visiting Boston or Hawaii one day.
Anyway, I am happy that I can keep in touch with Machiko by email and so on.

Sorry for being late, but I send you some photos.

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Is aunty Kazuko healing from tiredness of all the travel?
I assume that Machiko will be busy for a while as Robert family's moving to Boston.

We are looking forward seeing everyone again by visiting Boston or Hawaii one day.
Anyway, I am happy that I can keep in touch with Machiko by email and so on.

Sorry for being late, but I will send you some photos.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your email and photos.
Sorry it took for a while to reply to you too.

We were very glad to see aunty Kazuko and little Machiko, and had really good time.
Aunty looks healthy and well, and Machiko is so young as I herd , and I was so surprised by that.
Also, thank you for all the souvenirs.

I still remember when my mother saw you at our place, her face lighten up and looked so fine for that moment.
She still have high motivation and walking by herself.

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Thank you for your email and photos.
Sorry it took for a while to reply to you too.

We were very glad to see aunty Kazuko and little Machiko, and had a really good time.
Aunty looks healthy and well, and Machiko is so young as I heard , and I was so surprised by that.
Also, thank you for all the souvenirs.

I still remember when my mother saw you at our place, her face lightened up and looked so fine for that moment.
She still has high motivation, walking by herself.

元の翻訳
HI everyone, this is Hanako, the member.

It is raining a lot and getting hotter in Japan because of an effect of seasonal change.

When this season passes, the summer will come and new animation will start!

I personally thinking about watching following programs.

・animation
・Free!

I also like Kyoto animation 'Free!' as well as animation.

The Kyoto animation has been an animation of girls on center,
but this time, it seems spotting on boys of swimming club,.... Ah-!
Can't wait til July.

Anyway, I have an announcement for all of you.

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HI everyone, this is Hanako, the member.　（これなら一人だけ限定された一人で、one of the members of our group　とすべきでしょうが、このごろではどうでもいいのかもしれません。）

It is raining a lot and getting hotter in Japan because of an （これはthe charasteristic と思います）effect of seasonal change.

When this season passes (goes) , （the） （これは不要（多分？）、限定された夏というのでしたらof 1998 とか）　summer will come and new animation will start!

I （動詞が抜けているam) rpesonally thinking about watching (the) following programs.

・animation
・Free!

I also like Kyoto animation 'Free!' as well as animation.

The Kyoto animation has been an animation of girls on （its ですか？文自体、あまりいいことはないと思いますが）center,
but this time, it seems spotting on boys of swimming club,.... Ah-!
Can't wait til July.

Anyway, I have an announcement for all of you.

元の翻訳
Is there any way that make the postage cheaper, like using another courier than fedex?

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Is there any way that makes the postage cheaper, like using another courier than fedex?

元の翻訳
I will do this deal the way you suggested.

The total amount you need to pay is $2203, which are
$2186 for the product and $17 for shipping.

I will change the price of the product on ebay to $300,
then please make a bit, and process the payment.

I will send an invoice of the rest amount of $1903.

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I couldn't understand your explanation fully, as we call the types of razor different to US, here in Japan.

I have taken a photo of the product, so you can have a look and decide.

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I will do this deal the way you suggested.

The total amount you need to pay is $2203, which is
$2186 for the product and $17 for shipping.

I will change the price of the product on ebay to $300,
then please make a bid, and process the payment.

I will send an invoice with the remaining amount of $1903.

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I couldn't understand your explanation fully, as we call the types of razor different to US, here in Japan.

I have taken a photo of the product, so you can have a look and decide.