Natsuko (725_moo) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
フジクラ１

今回のプロシリーズは飛距離、感度、正確性を高めるために、前作のシャフトから"HIT"と"CAGE"技術を組み合わせました。"HIT"(高慣性クラブヘッド)とは、バランスポイントを後ろにズラす"スマートシャッピング"をするクラブヘッド内部の部分です。これにより、スウィングスピードと飛距離の向上を可能にしました。スウィング中の正確さと向上した感度のため、"CAGE"がクラブヘッドの極めて薄い層の安定性を保ちます。

修正後
フジクラ１

今回のプロシリーズは飛距離、感度、正確性を高めるために、前作のシャフトから"HIT"と"CAGE"技術を組み合わせました。"HIT"(高慣性クラブヘッド)とは、バランスポイントを後ろにズラす"スマートシャッピング"をするクラブヘッド内部の部分です。これにより、スウィングスピードと飛距離の向上を可能になりました。スウィング中の正確さと感度向上のため、"CAGE"がクラブヘッドの極めて薄い層の安定性を保ちます。

元の翻訳
YTGの講師陣ができるだけ多くの人にできるだけ多くの演技テクニックを割安でお伝えする日帰りのスペシャルイベントを開催しました。
AWでは”意図的な演技”について，GRでは発声について，TCでは肉体的な動作について，AUでは殺陣についてお教えしました。
母国語の異なる参加者が混合で指導を受けました。およそ30パーセントが日本語のネイティブスピーカーで，70パーセントが英語のネイティブスピーカーでした。

東京で二日間，生徒たちの発声の強化合宿を行いました。
GRの講師は普段6週間で行う内容を10時間（日に５時間）で網羅しました。
生徒にとっては学ぶ内容が多すぎましたが，今回の合宿で我々は多くの一般生徒に指導を行うことができました．

修正後
YTGの講師陣ができるだけ多くの人にできるだけ多くの演技テクニックを割安でお伝えする日帰りのスペシャルイベントを開催しました。
AWでは”意図的な演技”について，GRでは発声について，TCでは肉体的な動作について，AUでは殺陣についてお教えしました。
母国語の異なる参加者が混合で指導を受けました。およそ30パーセントが日本語のネイティブスピーカーで，70パーセントが英語のネイティブスピーカーでした。

東京で二日間，生徒たちの発声の強化合宿を行いました。
GRの講師は普段6週間で行う内容を10時間（日に５時間）で網羅しました。
生徒にとっては学ぶ内容が多すぎましたが，週末に合宿を行うことで我々は多くの一般生徒に指導を行うことができました．

元の翻訳
I shipped the item by EMS, which is the most fast and safe way, two days after the buyer deposited the payment of product price.
EMS usually arrives in about 5-7 days, but it was late this time. Postoffice explained me the reason as the political turmoil in Israel, which is the country of the buyer. I explained the buyer that the delay of delivery was caused by the Israel domestic problems and it wasn't my fault.
Then the products arrived at the buyer's home on May 8, but the buyer wasn't there. Three days later, the buyer, who did not notice that the product had arrived, gave me the negative feedback. I accept any evaluation if it is my fault.

修正後
I shipped the item by EMS, the fastest and secure way, two days after the buyer deposited the payment of product price.
EMS usually arrives in about 5-7 days, but it delayed this time. The post office explained me the reason was the political turmoil in Israel, where the buyer lives. I explained the buyer that the delay of delivery was caused by the Israel domestic problems and it wasn't my fault.
Then the products arrived at the buyer's home on May 8, but the buyer wasn't there. Three days later, the buyer, who did not notice that the product had arrived, gave me the negative feedback. I accept any evaluation if it is my fault.

元の翻訳
I have installed the new manual in the box. Please check it.

Since you taught me the code, it is simple for me to put up my goods on sell on eBay. However, I do not think it is owing to you because if you fail to find the merchandises on eBay, you will have to make a great effort finding them when making contracts with other Japanese sellers.

As a result, please tell me what you really have done concretely in this mission.

Although it is an good excuse for you that there are 5% chance that you cannot find a product no matter how hard you try, we cannot proceed if you always avoid what you do not want to face.

修正後
I have installed the new manual in the box. Please check it.

It is simple that I tell you the code and you get the goods up on eBay. However, I do not think it is owing to you because if you fail to find the merchandises on eBay, you will have to make a great effort finding them when making contracts with other Japanese sellers.

Please tell me concretely what did you struggle in this mission.

There are 5% chance that I may help you when you cannot find a product no matter how hard you try. But we cannot proceed if you always avoid what you do not want to face.

元の翻訳
We started the Internet rental service of SIM card and mobile WIFI. Instead of having an actual store, we offer our service at relatively reasonable price compared to the other companies, though our communication quality is as high as the others'. If you reserve it before coming to Japan, you can receive the rental service at the hotel or the post office in the international airport. I recommend the person who came to Japan should go there. /According to a survey conducted by Tourism Agency, the most common complaint from people visiting Japan is that they can't connect to the Internet.

修正後
We started the rental service of SIM card and mobile WIFI on the web. Instead of having an actual store, we offer our service at reasonable prices compared to the other companies, though our communication quality is as high as the others'. If you reserve it before coming to Japan, you can receive the SIM card/mobile WIFI at your hotel or the post office in the airport. I recommend the person who came to Japan should use it. According to a survey of Japan Tourism Agency, the most common complaint from the tourist is that they can't connect to the Internet.