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Please send an invoice by paypal.
You don't have to send an item.
I am going to pick it up at the account of my DHL.
Please be advised that the tracking number is 1 and pack them as
plural packages.
The address to which it is sent is Japan.
As we pay for the shipping charge, please list 123 as our account number on the label.
Then please draw up an invoice and hand it to DHL.
Please list ○○as buyer name at the consignee and buyer, which is similar to the
sample of the invoice attached.
You can use this invoice.

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Please send an invoice by paypal.
You don't have to send an item.
I am going to pick it up at my DHL account.
Please be advised that the tracking number is 1 and pack them as
plural packages.
The address to which it is sent is Japan.
As we pay for the shipping charge, please list 123 as our account number on the label.
Then please draw up an invoice and hand it to DHL.
Please list ○○as the buyer name at the consignee and buyer, which is similar to the
sample of the invoice attached.
You can use this invoice.

元の翻訳
Good day!
I purchased the item at Amazon.com. yesterday.
I did not find any problem about how it works, but I did not find a guarantee document and manual.
Could you send them to me?
The address is Japan.

How many years does it have the guarantee?

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Good day!
I purchased the item at Amazon.com. yesterday.
I did not find any problem about how it works, but I did not find a warranty certificate and insutruction manual.
Could you send them to me?
The address is Japan.

How long is the warranty good for?

元の翻訳
In Japan, facsimile is not authorized. I checked it. B is necessary for A for business and if he cannot obtain B, he cannot go to C. As the customers are angry at the cancellation of the hotel, etc., I decided to apply in place of him.

Please send the original immediately by express mail, and please let me know when I receive it. I ask you to send after adding the followings.
"○○" at Dear
Name of event and detaile purd overview (time and day, place, size, purpose of event and the fact that D must attend it).

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In Japan, facsimile is not authorized. I checked it. B is necessary for A for business and if he cannot obtain B, he cannot go to C. As the customers are angry at the cancellation of the hotel, etc., I decided to apply in place of him.

Please send the original immediately by express mail, and please let me know when I receive it. I ask you to send after adding the followings.
"○○" at Dear
Name of the event and the detailed overview (time and day, place, size, purpose of event and the fact that D must attend it).

元の翻訳
The Tokyo Big Site will hold a project mapping during the session of the "JIMTOF2014" from October 30th to November 4th in the building of conference.
The time to hold it is at 17:00, 17:30, 18:00 and 18:15 every day.

In the original contents that lasts about 10 minutes, a large clock appears in the building of conference. The music starts along with the sound of the bell that announces the time while the dance show all over the world starts.
As the newest film spectacle show appears in the sky in the evening, people can watch it from the neighboring hotels and Yurikamome, and it will be a new spot in Ariake area.

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The Tokyo Big Site will hold a projection mapping during the session of the "JIMTOF2014" from October 30th to November 4th at the conference building.
It is held 4 times daily at 17:00, 17:30, 18:00, and 18:15.

In the original contents that lasts about 10 minutes, a large clock tower appears at the conference building. The music starts along with the sound of the bell and the dance show of the world starts.
As the cutting-edge film spectacle show appears all around in a night sky, people can see it from the neighboring hotels and Yurikamome, and it is likely to be a new spot of Ariake area.

元の翻訳
Good day!
I am lookging for the belt of Bolt 0829. I would like to obtain the stainless belt, so I am looking for the belt that is compatible with the Bolt 0829. Which product number of the belt is compatible?

I appreciate your understanding.

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Good day!
I am lookging for a belt of Bolt 0829. I would like to obtain the stainless belt, so I am looking for one compatible with Bolt 0829. Which model number of the belt is compatible?

I appreciate your support.

元の翻訳
Let me ask a question once more.
The following error appears, so I cannot show the website sometimes.

Have there been the users to whom this kind of error appears?
The error is very rare, and I do not think that the data base is not set correctly.
(I assume that it is an error made by the setting of ABC).

Is the reason that I cannot drag and drop the picture in the following page the setting of CSS?(I am concerned that if I can customize it by myself).

Although it belongs to the very popular group, it is not included in the selection.

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Let me ask a question once more.
The following error appears and I cannot see the website sometimes.

Have there been users who encountered these kind of errors?
The error happens very rare, and I do not think that it is due to a data base error.
(I assume that it is an error made by the setting of ABC).

Is it due to CSS settings that I cannot drag and drop the picture on the following page? (I am concerned that if I can customize it by myself).

Although it belongs to a very popular group, it is not included in the selection.

元の翻訳
What you can do at Rirekino

By registering your profile and experiences, you can create your brief profile easily.
It is different from other SNS, and you can summarize the achievement that you would like to show↵
and personality.

With whom have you worked on the profile and experiences? You can register them on the Rirekino.
The portfolio where you are highly reliable is completed.

By the profile, you can communicate by means of comments. I am sure that the Rirekino will be the open and truly live resume on the website.

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What you can do at Rirekino

By registering your profile and experiences, you can create your brief profile easily.
[You can easily register your career history and experiences by registering a profile]↵
↵
It is different from other SNS, as you can summarize the achievements that you would like to show together with personality attributes.

With whom have you worked on the profile and experiences? ↵
[Where have you worked? With whom did you work? ]↵
You can register them on the Rirekino.
The portfolio where you are highly reliable is completed.
[Complete a CV portfolio, showing yourself as a highly trusted reliable employee.]↵

In your profile, you can communicate by means of comments.↵
↵
I am sure that the Rirekino will be the open and truly live resume on the website.↵
[Rirekino will be your 'go to' web based Live CV!]

元の翻訳
It is just after 4 o'clock in Tokyo, and it is a nice day in the fall. The clothes I washed are dried well.

Almost all the Japanese people understand the expression ～that you wrote in the email, but the expression ～ is better.

As for ～, thank you for yoru detailed explanation. The example that you specified is also very easy to understand. You must be a teacher who are good at teacher.

If I do not understand some expressions while I am learning English, may I ask you a question? If the items are in regard with Japan, I can answer them. If you have a question, please do not hesitate to ask.

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It is just after 4 pm in Tokyo, and it is a nice day in the fall. The clothes I washed are dried well.

Almost all the Japanese people understand the expression ～that you wrote in the email, but the expression ～ is better.

As for ～, thank you for your detailed explanation. The example that you specified is also very easy to understand. You must be a teacher who are good at teacher.

If I do not understand some expressions while I am learning English, may I ask you a question? If the items are in regard with Japan, I can answer them. If you have a question, please do not hesitate to ask.

元の翻訳
The invoice that I received a couple of days ago says that the routing transit number is 123456789.Then does it mean that the items listed in the invoice was wrong?
Is the accounting number 1111111111 all right as it is?

If it is necessary to replace the invoice, the payment might be made later than the schedule I made in the beginning.

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The invoice I received a few days ago says that the routing transit number is 123456789. Then does it mean that the items listed in the invoice was [subject-verb agreement] wrong?
Is the accounting number 1111111111 all right [informal] as it is?

If it is necessary to replace the invoice, the payment might be made [use active voice] later than the schedule I made [awkward] in the beginning.

元の翻訳
I apologize that I am delayed in responding you.

First, I do business in Tokyo.
Our company accepts the items of the seller who sells on the Internet and sell them in place of it.
In Osaka, we have a customer who accept the items.
He or she is proficient in English, and can be of your help.
If you are interested in him or her, I can introduce him or her to you.

Regarding the item that you are looking for, I searched by network.
1,500 dollars for 2 pieces are still expensive a little.
As I gave you an inconvenience, please give me a little more time. I will negotiate it again.

They seem to have its inventory.

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I apologize for my late reply.

First, I do business in Tokyo.
We do our business as a sales agent for internet retail businesses. We accept products from the retailers and sell for them.
In Osaka, we have a customer who accept the items.
He or she is proficient in English, and can be of your help.
If you are interested in him or her, I can introduce him or her to you.

Regarding the item that you are looking for, I searched by our network.
The price is 1,500 dollars for 2 pieces, and it might be still a little expensive.
As I gave you an inconvenience, please give me a little more time. I will negotiate it again.

They seem to have its inventory.

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting us.
As for the panel of MX110, as it is made of acryl, I do not purchase this time.
I hate to ask you, but could you tell me the total by the following 2 panels again?
(1) MCD7000 135 dollars
(1)C34V 140 dollars

I am looking for the glass panel of the MCD7008. Please let me know when you receive it.
I am looking forward to your reply.

I completed the payment. I ask you to ship it after the checking.
As it is easy to be broken, I ask you to pack it with strict care.

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Thank you for contacting us.
As for the panel of MX110, as it is made of acryl, I do not purchase this time.
I hate to ask you, but could you tell me the total by the following 2 panels again?
(1) MCD7000 135 dollars
(1)C34V 140 dollars

I am looking for the glass panel of the MCD7008. Please let me know when you receive it.
I am looking forward to your reply.

I completed the payment. I ask you to ship it after checking.
As it is easy to be broken, I ask you to pack it with strict care.

元の翻訳
We prohibit that you stay overnight around the hall on the previous day of the event since it is a nuisance for those in the neighborhood.
We appreciate your understanding and cooperation.

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We prohibit that you stay overnight around the hall from the previous day of the event since it is a nuisance for those in the neighborhood.
We appreciate your understanding and cooperation.

元の翻訳
We strictly prohibit that you leave the wastes and garbages in the hall or near it. Be sure to discard it in the each designated dumping place or you bring it back with you.
When you come to the hall, we ask you to use the nearest public transportation.
In case where you take an action such as breaking the equipment in the hall, the sponsor is not responsible for it. We ask you to keep it on your mind.
Please do not make an inquiry to the hall regarding the event.
The hours of shaking hands are limited. We ask you to understand it in advance.
The number of the participation ticket of the shaking hands is limited. We ask you to understand it in advance.

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We strictly prohibit you from leaving the wastes and garbages in the hall or near it. Be sure to discard it in the each designated dumping place or you bring it back with you.
When you come to the hall, we ask you to use the nearest public transportation.
In case where you take an action such as breaking the equipment in the hall, the sponsor is not responsible for it. We ask you to keep it on your mind.
Please do not make an inquiry to the hall regarding the event.
The hours of shaking hands are limited. We ask you to understand it in advance.
The number of the participation ticket of the shaking hands is limited. We ask you to understand it in advance.

元の翻訳
(Notes)
Although we manage the event hall by preparing perfectly, please let a guard know when you find a suspicious person or items.
We ask you to remove the accesories such as rings and bracelets, etc. when you participate in shaking hands.
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In case where the sponsor decides that it is not appropriate to partcipate in the event for managing this event safely, we might refuse participation of some customers. We ask you to understand it in advance.

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Notes:
- Although we manage the event hall carefully, please let a guard know if you find suspicious people or items.
- We ask that you remove accessories such as rings, bracelets, etc. when shaking hands.
- In order to manage events safely, in cases where the sponsor decides that it is not appropriate to participate in the event, we may refuse participation to some customers. We ask that you understand this policy in advance.

元の翻訳
貴社は、該当範囲のどの区域が担当ですか。
貴社は、民営ですかそれとも官営ですか。
貴社の主要な再販会社はどこですか。小売、イーテール、システムインテグレーターまたはサブディストリビュータ。
小売へ販売する場合、どの顧客またはセグメントが主要なマーケットですか。
現在、全事業に占める時計の割合はどれくらいですか。
貴社が流通を許可されている大手の製造会社はどこですか。
何社の顧客及び小売店へ販売していますか。このうち、大手はどこですか。
貴社の小売はどの類のマーケットについてのサポートを製造会社から求めていますか。
貴社は、貴社の担当地域へのベンダーのレコード輸入業者ですか。

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貴社は、該当範囲のどの区域が担当ですか。
貴社は、上場企業ですかそれとも非上場（非公開）企業ですか。
貴社の主要な再販会社はどこですか。小売、イーテール、システムインテグレーターまたはサブディストリビュータ。
小売へ販売する場合、どの顧客またはセグメントが主要なマーケットですか。
現在、全事業に占める時計の割合はどれくらいですか。
貴社が流通を許可されている大手の製造会社はどこですか。
何社の顧客及び小売店へ販売していますか。このうち、大手はどこですか。
貴社の小売はどの類のマーケットについてのサポートを製造会社から求めていますか。
貴社は、貴社の担当地域へのベンダーの登録輸入業者ですか。

元の翻訳
Good day!
We hate to say, but item that you purchased was sold out by lump sum↵
in other store, so it is out of stock.
↵
As I do not give you an inconvenience, we would like to refund immediately.
What is your opinion about it?
We do not want to give you an extra work, but would you please reply us?
We appreciate your cooperation.

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Good day!
We hate to say [object], but [article] item that you purchased was sold out by [article] lump sum in another store, so it is out of stock.
As I [singular] do not give you an inconvenience [?], we [plural] would like to refund immediately.
What is your opinion about it?
We do not want to give you an extra work, but would you please reply [proposition] us?
We appreciate your cooperation.

元の翻訳
お問い合わせありがとうございました。はい。弊社は米国に所在していますが、日本へは出荷しません。弊社が提供するのは、優先郵便による外国への出荷であり、これは、１００ドル以上の注文に対し送料が８ドルしかかかりません。本出荷では、通常の所要日数は４日から８日ですが、追跡システムが具備されています。
チェックアウトにおいて利用可能な他の出荷方法もあります。これらは、３日から６日を要する送料が２０ドルのグローバルエクスプレス及び５日から１０日を要する１００ドル以上の外国からの注文の場合送料が無料の航空便ですが、これらには、追跡システムは具備されておりません。
海外への全出荷において、弊社は、大まかな到着日しかお知らせできません。その理由は、税関において、たびたび、遅れが発生し、これにより、荷物の到着が遅れるからです。

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お問い合わせありがとうございました。はい。弊社は米国に所在していますが、日本へも出荷しております。弊社が提供するのは、優先郵便による外国への出荷であり、これは、１００ドル以上の注文に対し送料が８ドルしかかかりません。本出荷では、通常の所要日数は４日から８日ですが、追跡システムが具備されています。
支払時利用可能な他の出荷方法もあります。これらは、３日から６日を要する送料が２０ドルのグローバルエクスプレス及び５日から１０日を要する１００ドル以上の外国からの注文の場合送料が無料の航空便ですが、これらには、追跡システムは具備されておりません。
海外への全出荷において、弊社は、大まかな到着日しかお知らせできません。その理由は、税関において、時折、遅れが発生し、これにより、荷物の到着が遅れるからです。

元の翻訳
シャッターは作動せず、新たに入れた電池もカメラを起動しません。Aにセットしても、電池の確認機能が作動しません。修理費は５３ドルとなるでしょう。しかし、返品したくもありません。その理由は、送料及び貴方の送料３０ドルが、商品の値段とほぼ同一だからです。貴方へ注文したのは、貴方のフィードバックが良かったこと及び広告には稼働可能であると掲載されていたからです。２０ドルだけ返金していただけますか。

時計についての履歴を教えていただきたかったです。購入前には、写真には時計のダイヤルに汚れが見えましたが、それが何であるかよく分かりませんでした。ダイヤルがどのように汚れたかご説明いただけますか。枠も汚れが付着しているようです。その他は、問題ありません。

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シャッターは作動せず、新品電池を入れてもカメラが起動しません。Aにセットしても、電池の確認機能が作動しません。修理費は５３ドルとなるでしょう。しかし、返品したくもありません。その理由は、送料及び貴方の送料３０ドルが、商品の値段とほぼ同一だからです。貴方へ注文したのはフィードバックが良かったことと、稼働に問題はないと広告に掲載されていたからです。少額、例えば２０ドル返金していただけますか。

時計についての履歴を教えていただきたかったです。購入前、写真には時計のダイヤルに汚れが見えましたが、それが何であるかよく分かりませんでした。ダイヤルがどのように汚れたかご説明いただけますか。ベゼルも汚れが付着しているようです。その他は、問題ありません。

元の翻訳
I purchased ○○ a couple of days ago.

I checked the item after I had received it,
and found some round decorations had been removed.

May I return it?
If I can, please let me know the address to which I should return.

Do I have to pay for the shipping charge?
I appreciate your understanding.

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I purchased ○○ a couple of days ago.

I checked the item after I had received it,
and found some round decorations were missing.

May I return it?
If I can, please let me know the address to which I should return.

Do I have to pay for the shipping charge?
I appreciate your understanding.

元の翻訳
I purchased ○○ a couple of days ago.

I checked the item after I had received it,↵
and found some round decorations had been removed.

May I return it?
If I can, please let me know the address to which I should return.

Do I have to pay for the shipping charge?
I appreciate your understanding.

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I purchased the ○○ a couple of days ago.

I checked the item after I received it, and found some round decorations had been removed.

May I return it?
If I can, please let me know the address to which I should return.

Do I have to pay for the shipping charge?
I appreciate your understanding.

元の翻訳
1. Thank you for giving a discount.
I do not have the number.
I would like to ask you in detail, so could you please contact here?

2. We cannot find your Japanese agency.
In other words, does it mean that the Japanese agency cannot increase the sales in the Japanese market?
We can increase the sales of your items by using the online marketing.

Could you please give us a chance for a half year?
We are going to expand the volume that you are investing in the Japanese market.

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1. Thank you for giving a discount.
I do not have the number.
I would like to speak with you in detail, so could you please contact me here?

2. We cannot find your Japanese agency.
In other words, does that mean that the Japanese agency cannot increase sales in the Japanese market?
We can increase the sales of your items by using online marketing.

Could you please allow us this opportunity for half a year?
We will expand the scale in which you are investing in the Japanese market.