sakura_1984 (sakura_1984) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
私たちは3ボックスしか封のされたままの未開封の物を持っていません。あなたにオファーしたように、それらもまた同じ価格で提供することをご提案します。
私はここで多くの方々と長く仕事をしていますが、あなたが私を信用してくれたこともまた、とても嬉しいです。
見ていてもすべてのblack上のボックスは1300でさえ現れません。

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封のされたままで未開封の物は3箱しか我々の手元に残っていません。以前提示したものと同じ価格でそれらを提供できます。
これから長きに渡って、皆様と仕事をしていくつもりなので、あなたが私を信用してくれたこともまた、とても嬉しいです。
見ていてもすべてのblack上のボックスは1300でさえ現れません。

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Thank you for your reply.
It's step of inquiry from customer, please let me know the price of one side lever for ABC.
I'm looking forward to your reply.

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Thank you for your reply.
Now it's a stage of an inquiry from customer. Please let me know the price of one side lever for ABC.
I'm looking forward to hearing from you.

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I'm really sorry to reply was late.
I confirm EMS tracking number, the package was arrived in your country and it now on customs clearance.
You can confirm it below site.
Sincerely yours,

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I'm really sorry for my late reply.
I checked the EMS tracking information and the package has already arrived in your country and is now undergoing customs clearance.
Please have a look on the site below.
Sincerely yours,

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Thank you for your contact this time.
And you order roses as gift, I'm so glad.
About the message that print the card, I accepted it. I check it double time.

The shipment of roses may be late because its growing was late by cold.
Please understand and pacience that case.
If you order, I'll confirm roses farm details.
Thank you in advance.

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Thank you for contacting me this time.
I'm so glad that you have chosen roses as gifts.
About the message that print the card [unclear], I accepted it. I check it double time [unnatural].

The shipment of roses may be late because its [antecedent?] growing was late by cold [awkward].
Please understand and pacience [spelling] that case [?].
If you order, I'll confirm roses farm details [unclear].
Thank you in advance.

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About AAA, do you sale this product only one side?
I'm looking forward your reply.

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About AAA, do you sale [spelling] this product only one side [awkward]?
I'm looking forward to your reply.

元の翻訳
I refund you because I trust you.
I told you past e-mail, I sent you Henkotsu's razor you bid originally on 29th Oct.
You may receive that several days after.
You don't need razor anymore?
If you need it, I sent you bill at £30.99.
You don't need it, please send it back to me.
I'll pay the shipping charge.

I'll refund you when I confirm the book.
It is very expensive book, so please send it to me by the compensation shipipng and has tracking number.
If you send it to me without compensation and it lost, I can't refund you.

I only sale Japanese products and I'm not expert so I don't know it.

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I refund you because I trust you.
As I told you in my previous e-mail, I sent you Henkotsu's razor you bid originally on October 29.
You may receive that several days later.
You don't need the razor anymore?
If you need it, I sent you [article] invoice [preposition] at £30.99.
If you don't need it, please send it back to me.
I'll pay the shipping charge.

I'll refund you when I confirm the book [awkward].
It is [article] very expensive book, so please send it to me by the compensation [word choice] shipipng [spelling] and with a tracking number.
If you send it to me without compensation and it lost [verb], I can't refund you.

I only sale [spelling] Japanese products and 砥石を使用した事がないし I'm not [article] expert so I don't know it.

元の翻訳
I have 2 communications.

1. My acquaintance woman wants to work at bar. She is 4th grade at university and good at English because she lived foreign countries before. I want to confirm that can she work a day a week without other stuff's workday (Mon. or Wed.). I told her about bar.

2. I couldn't confirm this month's salary. Please pay quickly, because I have to pay rent and the cost of living.

I'm looking forward to your continuing support.

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I have 2 communications.

1. My acquaintance woman [awkward] wants to work at [article] bar. She is 4th grade [seriously?] at university and good at English because she used to live [article missing] foreign countries before. I want to confirm that can she [word order] work a day a week without other stuff's [spelling] workday [doesn't make sense] (Mon. or Wed.). I told her about [article] bar.

2. I couldn't confirm this month's salary. Please pay quickly, because I have to pay rent and the cost of living [awkward].

I'm looking forward to your continuing support.

元の翻訳
I have 2 communications.
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1. My acquaintance woman wants to work at bar. She is 4th grade at university and good at English because she lived foreign countries before. I want to confirm that can she work a day a week without other stuff's workday (Mon. or Wed.). I told her about bar.

2. I couldn't confirm this month's salary. Please pay quickly, because I have to pay rent and the cost of living.

I'm looking forward to your continuing support.

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I have two things to confirm.
1. My female acquaintance wants to work at the bar. She is a senior college student and very good at English because she lived overseas. I am writing to you to check if she can work once a week when other staffs don't work (Mon. or Wed.). I told her about the bar.

2. I couldn't confirm this month's salary deposit. Please pay quickly, because I have to pay my rent and other living expenses.

I'm looking forward to your continuing support.

元の翻訳
Thank you for purchasing my product.

By my mistook, I forgot sending the item add registered.
I'll refound $5 as register fee.

If problems happen, for example the item was missing, I take full responsbility for the matter.

I really apologize about this matter.

I'm loking forward to your understanding and patience.

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Thank you for purchasing my product.

By my mistook [parts of speech confusion], I forgot to send the item add [?] registered.
I'll refound [spelling] $5 as [article] register fee.

If problems happen, for example, the item was [tense confusion] missing, I take full responsbility [spelling] for the matter.

I really apologize about [wrong proposition] this matter.

I'm loking [spelling] forward to [wrong usage] your understanding and patience.

元の翻訳
I just found out today that the person who instructed me at watch store that I worked at part time has passed away.
I learned a lot.
Thank you from whole my heart. Please rest in peace.

And I will live that can stay someone's memory, and I will be person that someone feel happy to meet me.

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I just found out today that the person, who instructed me at watch store when I was working at a part time job, has passed away.
I learned a lot from him/her.
Thank you with the whole of my heart. Please rest in peace.

And I will live so that someone shall long remember me, and I will be a person that someone feel happy to meet.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your speedy dealing.

We got contact from entruster that cope with peyment until at the end of this month is in time.
Thank you for everything.

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Thank you for your prompt action.

We were informed from entruster that the payment due at the end of this month was settled in time.
Thank you for everything.

元の翻訳
Dear Richard,
This is contact about payslip.
I said it the othe day, please sent last month's salary detail (for example, base wage, benefits for midnight and transportation fee) to my mail.
And we transfer salary the bank as below.
I'm looking forward to your continuing support.

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Dear Richard,
This is [article] contact [word choice] about your payslip.
As I said it the othe day, please sent [tense confusion] last month's salary details (for example, base wage, benefits for midnight and transportation fee).
And we transfer salary the bank as below [unclear].
I'm looking forward to your continuing support.

元の翻訳
This is ○○. I'm a person that deal with customers. We apologize for causing trouble by our mistake. First, we controled an amount of money at auction because we want to prevent it sold, not exchange with anyone. We spend that time creating your exclusive page format of "buy it now" same guitar. Actually, we finished creating the page and offer you, we closed page format of auction at the same time. It's Saturday in Japan and we couldn't contact the person in charge at warehouse is fact, but we have a reason.

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This is ○○. I'm a person who deal [s-v agreement] with customers. We apologize for causing trouble by our mistake. First, we controled the amount of money at [article] auction because we want [tense] to prevent it from being sold to someone lese, not exchange with anyone [unclear]. We spend [tense confusion]that time creating your exclusive page format of "buy it now" [?] the same guitar. Actually, we finished creating the page and offer [tense] you, we closed [article] page format of auction at the same time. It's Saturday in Japan and we couldn't contact the person in charge at [article] warehouse is fact [?], but we have a reason.

元の翻訳
This week, I sick in bed because caught a cold and I absence from work. Cough is not stopped, It is very hard. At last, fever went away and I recovery. Finally, I can resume study English.
Please take care you too.

I habit to watch a movie every week, but I waver what to see next time.
I want to know your country "~", and I searched by Google. I think "~" seems good. Do you know it? If you know, is it recommend?

And if you know other recommend movies, please tell me.

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This week, I [verb] sick in bed because caught a cold and I [verb] absence [parts of speech confusion] from work. Cough is not stopped [tense confusión]. It is very hard [unclear]. At last, fever went away [tense confusion] and I recovery [parts of speech confusión]. Finally, I can resume study [parts of speech confusion] English.
Please take care [proposition] you too.

I habit [word choice] to watch a movie every week, but I waver what to see next time [awkward].
I want to know [proposition] your country "~", and I searched [wrong proposition] Google. I think "~" seems good. Do you know it? If you know [subject], is it recommend [use active]?

And if you know other recommend movies [mistranslation], please tell me.

元の翻訳
This week, I sick in bed because caught a cold and I absence from work. Cough is not stopped, It is very hard. At last, fever went away and I recovery. Finally, I can resume study English.
Please take care you too.

I habit to watch a movie every week, but I waver what to see next time.
I want to know your country "~", and I searched by Google. I think "~" seems good. Do you know it? If you know, is it recommend?

And if you know other recommend movies, please tell me.

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This week, I was sick in bed because I caught a cold and I was absence from work. Cough is not stopped, It is very hard. At last, fever went away and I recovered. Finally, I can resume my study of English.
Please take care you too.

I make a habit of watching a movie every week, but I wonder what to see next time.
I want to know your country "~", and I searched by Google. I think "~" seems good. Do you know it? If you know, is it recommend?

And if you know other recommend movies, please tell me.

元の翻訳
Please send item back to me. I paid item's charge. And you didn't refound me. To say, item's ownership is mine. If you send item me again, I will pay you shipping charge $20. Shipping address is same as before.

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Please send the item back to me. I paid item's charge. And you haven't refounded me. To say, the item's ownership is mine. If you send it to me again, I will pay you shipping charge $20. Shipping address is same as before.

元の翻訳
Is this the product that you want?
Please let me know product size that you want just in case.
I made produnt's page.

I can preparate this product.
You purchased it before, so you have to pay only shipping charge especially.
But if you receive the product, please feedback to me.
I'm looking forward to your reply.

How many products do you need?

I will look for product that you want. Please give me a little time.
I'll contact you as soon as I can.

You don't need this ○○ anymore?

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Is this the product that you'd like?
Please let me know product size that you'd like just in case.
I made product's page.

I can preparate this product.
You purchased it before, so you have to pay only shipping charge especially.
But if you receive the product, please feedback to me.
I'm looking forward to your reply.

How many products do you need?

I will look for product that you want. Please give me a little time.
I'll contact you as soon as I can.

You don't need this ○○ anymore?

元の翻訳
The bank of we transfer money is below, isn't it?
If it's right, we think SWIFT CODE is following. Is that correct?
If our understanding is wrong, please point out our mistake.

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The bank of [?] we transfer money is below, isn't it [ungrammatical]?
If it's right, we think the SWIFT CODE is as follows. Is that correct?
If we are wrong, please point out our mistake.

元の翻訳
I'll bid. Do you have the items shortened? I'm looking forword your reply.

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I'll bid. Do you have the item shortened? I'm looking forward to your reply.

元の翻訳
I'll bid. Do you have the items shortened? I'm looking forword your reply.

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I'll bid. Is it hemmed up? I'm looking forward to your reply.

元の翻訳
Dear ○○

Hello.

I understand I don't have to pay any more.
Moreover, thank you for your discount.
I'm looking forword to receiving item.
I look forword to your continued support.

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Dear ○○

Hello.

I understand, so I don't have to pay any more.
Moreover, thank you for your discount.
I'm looking forword to receiving the item.
I look forword to your continuing support.

元の翻訳
You can order ticket here! ※It's first come, first served.
Ticket pia:http://ticket-search.pia.jp/pia/search_all.do?kw=URATA%20NAOYA
yahoo ticket:https://y-tickets.jp/urtny14-ip2

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You can order tickets here! ※It's first come, first served.
Ticket PIA:http://ticket-search.pia.jp/pia/search_all.do?kw=URATA%20NAOYA
yahoo ticket:https://y-tickets.jp/urtny14-ip2

元の翻訳
Alibabaによって開発された製品は滅多にeコマースを軽視しない。そのボックスと同じようなサービスはPCやモバイル上で多く提供されている。他のチャンネルとの相違点は、Tmall Box 2はコントローラ上のeコマースサービスと打ち込むMagic Key（M Key）に登録される。M Keyを押したときに、ユーザはTmall Boxのユーザのみに公開されるプロモーションイベントに参加することができる。

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Alibabaによって開発された製品は滅多にeコマースを軽視しない。そのボックスと同じようなサービスはPCやモバイル上で多く提供されている。他のチャンネルとの違いを出すために、Tmall Box 2にはコントローラにeコマースサービス専用のMagic Key（M Key）が追加されている。M Keyを押すと、ユーザはTmall Boxのユーザのみに公開されるプロモーションイベントに参加することができる。