スミス　マーク Mark Smith (ozsamurai_69) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for the proposal.

However, the selling price will be further reduced by matching the price.
It is currently at 1040 yen and we can assume that it would be further reduced.

And for example, even by accepting the difference in the desired purchasing price of approximately 6NZD,
we can assume that it would become a deficit upon reducing the price immediately.

That would lead to non-profitability for both our company and your company.

We are grateful for the proposal, but can you support for the return of the product?

Sorry for the inconvenience but I request for your support.

修正後
Thank you very much for the proposal.

However, the selling price will be further reduced by matching the price.
[However, if the price is reduced further, the selling price will also go down]↵
It is currently at 1040 yen and we can assume that it would be further reduced.

And for example, even by accepting the difference in the desired purchasing price of approximately 6NZD,
we can assume that it would become a deficit upon reducing the price immediately.

That would lead to non-profitability for both our [companies] company and your company.

We are grateful for the proposal, but can you support for the return of the product?

Sorry for the inconvenience but I request for your support.

元の翻訳
One hour south from Tokyo by car, there's a famous place called Sagami South that's good for surfing and such. Maru was raised over there. Every morning on the beach, together with the sunrise, he'd play make-believe with me like a golden-retriever. I'd show off my buff legs on the sandy beach. He was a friendly dog, and the first time people met him, they were surprised. "He doesn't seem like a shiba-inu, he has a sociable personality, huh?" The shiba-inu breed is primarily known for being loyal, never for being the kind of dog that you can hold and pet. Like with humans, if you have a hundred dogs, there will be a hundred different kinds of personalities.

修正後
One hour south from Tokyo by car, there's a famous place called Sagami South that's good for surfing and such. Maru was raised [XoverX] there. Every morning on the beach, together with the sunrise, he'd ( pretend wrestle like he was a Golden Retriever) [Xplay make-believe with me like a golden-retrieverX]. [ He shows off his beach hardened muscular legs] [X I'd show off my buff legs on the sandy beachX]. He was a friendly dog, and the first time people met him, they were surprised. "He doesn't seem like a shiba-inu, he has a sociable personality, huh?" The shiba-inu breed is primarily known for being loyal, never for being the kind of dog that you can hold and pet. Like with humans, if you have a hundred dogs, there will be a hundred different kinds of personalities.