石塚靖夫 (yasujazz) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
トモヤさん、返信をありがとう。

とても興味がわいてきました。

履歴からもあなたは誠実でこの分野に通じている方のようなので、値段から考えてもその時計はオリジナルかつ公式の新品だと思います。

でも、確認させてください。保証書はついていますか。ほかの店は公認代理店であることをうたっていますが、私はまずあなたの商品を目にしたので、そこはきちんとさせたいと思います。

あなたは信頼できそうだと思っています。別にあなたを疑っているわけではありません。ただネットで高価な商品を取引するのには危険を冒さないほうが賢明だということです。

返信をお待ちしています。

これは日本人の目をした日本版ですか。それとも映画に出てきた女優に似せたアメリカ版ですか。また、ブラジルに送って27.85ＵＳドル相当のサンプルとして申告することができるか知りたいのですが。

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トモヤさん、返信をありがとう。

とても興味がわいてきました。

履歴からもあなたは誠実でこの分野に通じている方のようなので、値段から考えてもその時計はオリジナルかつ公式の新品だと思います。

でも、確認させてください。保証書はついていますか。ほかの店は公認代理店であることをうたっていますが、私はまずあなたの商品を目にしたので、あなたから是非購入したいと思います。

あなたは信頼できそうだと思っています。別に悪気があるわけではありません。ただネットで高価な商品を取引するのには危険を冒さないほうが賢明だということです。

返信をお待ちしています。

これは日本人の目をした日本版ですか。それとも映画に出てきた女優に似せたアメリカ版ですか。また、ブラジルに送って27.85ＵＳドル相当のサンプルとして申告することができるか知りたいのですが。

元の翻訳
The size says "S." Is it designed for women?↵
Or does it simply mean that it is just one size below "M" size?
I'm a male myself. If it is for women, I just can't wear it.↵
Please try to be precise on that.

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The size says "S." What does that means?↵
Does it mean it's designed for women, or does it simply mean one size below "M" size?
I'm a man and would not be able to wear it if it is designed for women.↵
So I would appreciate if you could give me precise answer on that.

元の翻訳
The photo in black and white was taken in Tsukudajima, Chuo Ward in 1990.
The building under construction on the background is Okawabata Rivercity, which was built on the site of old Ishikawajima-Harima Heavy Industry Co. Ltd. The color phot was taken in February in 2012.
A row of apartments were built on the site of the factory while many small residents still remain with old downtown atomosphere on the south side of the Sumiyoshi Shrine.
You can see the rail in the photo, covered with rust after over twenty years.

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The photo in black and white was taken in Tsukudajima, Chuo Ward in 1990.
The building under construction on the background is Okawabata Rivercity, which was built on the site of old Ishikawajima-Harima Heavy Industry Co. Ltd. The color photo was taken in February 2012.
A row of apartments was built on the site of the factory while many small residents still remain with old downtown atomosphere on the south side of the Sumiyoshi Shrine.
You can see the rail in the photo, covered with rust after over twenty years.

元の翻訳
After the Kyobashi-Shibaura route was completed in 1962, it was extended to the Haneda Airport in time for Tokyo Olympics in 1964. The Shinkansen, the bullet train, started its service on October 1st, just ten days ahead of the opening ceremony. Both of them were looked as a symbol of the recovery from the World War 2. The photo of the highway at night can be seen here as of now. It looks far more beautiful on film than the real thing and seems like Si-Fi comics we read in childhood come true.
Snapshot:"A quickly-taken photograph of an instantaneous action or expression in people and others. A snap." Taken from Daijirin, Japanese Dictionary.

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After the Kyobashi-Shibaura route was completed in 1962, it was extended to Haneda Airport in time for the Tokyo Olympics in 1964. The Shinkansen, the bullet train, started its service on October 1st, just ten days ahead of the opening ceremony. Both of them were looked as symbols of the recovery from World War II. The photo of the highway at night can be seen here as of now. It looks far more beautiful on film than the real thing and seems like Sci-fi comics we read in childhood come true.
Snapshot: "A quickly-taken photograph of an instantaneous action or expression in people and others. A snap." Taken from the Daijirin Japanese dictionary.

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The video clip shows how a Japanese high school baseball player batted in one of the last National Championship Tournament Games held at Koshien Stadium. He has an excellent batting skill to slam pitches. He forces pitchers to throw more pitches by hitting them into foul balls. This is something called "cutting style." The style, however, was considered against the rule by the umpires of the High School Baseball Federation and was forbidden.

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Video clip showing Japanese high school baseball player batting in one of the last National Championship Tournament (Japan) games held at Koshien Stadium. He has an excellent batting skill to slam pitches. He forces pitchers to throw more pitches by hitting them into foul balls. This is something called "cutting style." The style, however, was considered against the rules by the umpires of the Japanese High School Baseball Federation and was forbidden.

元の翻訳
アップルがうわさの製品iWatch用として使える曲がるバッテリーパックの詳細を発表

アップルの時計については様々なうわさが飛び交い、今までにもその製品用として曲げることのできる部品の特許が同社から出されました。その中には曲がるディスプレイや曲げると機能に変化が出る仕掛けなどがあります。今日はアップルから出願されたさらに別の特許をご覧に入れましょう。今度は腕時計のようにしなやかで曲げることのできる製品にうってつけのバッテリーデザインです。

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アップルがうわさの製品iWatch用として使える曲がるバッテリーパックの詳細を発表

アップルの時計については様々なうわさが飛び交い、今までにもその製品用として曲げることのできる部品の特許が同社から出されました。その中には曲がるディスプレイや曲げると機能に変化が出る仕掛けなどがあります。今日はアップルから出願されたさらに別の特許をご覧に入れましょう。今度は腕時計のようにしなやかで曲げることのできる製品にうってつけのバッテリーデザインです (PatentlyApple より)。

元の翻訳
Some of the features we will never copromise.
1. It's simprle.
We make it so impressive by just a single message.
2. It's the trend.
We are always concious of a new expression..
3. It's an appearance stimulative to our instinct.

Their problem:
They are one of the home building companies in Japan which deals with North European style products. But too much emphasis on its function and design makes it difficult to differentiate them from others. The client is asking us to create a good message to spread their originality and uniqueness

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もSome of the features we will never conpromise.
1. It's simple.
We make it so impressive by just a single message.(意味が少し違うと思います。メッセージそのものを印象づけたいのであって、メッセージは印象づける手段ではないのでは。）
2. It's the trend.　(theの使い方あってますか？）
We are always concious of new ways of expression.
3. It's an appearance stimulative to our instinct.

Their problem:
They are one of the home building companies in Japan which deals with North European style products. But too much emphasis on its (このitsは何をさしていますか？仮にproductsだとするとtheirになるはずで、itsの指すものが見当たりません）function and design makes it difficult to differentiate them from others. The client is asking us to create a good message (クリエイティブを求めているのであって、メッセージを作ることそのものを求めているのではないと思います)to spread their originality and uniqueness