Trans_Lega (tsukie) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
The reason why I cannot ship the guitar yet is because I have not been able to confirm your payment. The person in charge at Paypal said to me
"Please do not ship until you confirm payment."
However, please do not worry. You are able to pay by wire transferring to my bank account as well. I will ship it as soon as possible after confirming it and then ship with complete packing.

修正後
The reason why I cannot ship the guitar yet is because I have not been able to confirm your payment. The person in charge at Paypal said to me
"Please do not ship until you confirm payment."
However, please do not worry. I will ship it as soon as I confirm it and then ship with complete packing [awkward].

元の翻訳
I called your company and confirmed with the operator that there is no problem regarding papers. However it still has not been shipped and I am wondering why. Although He/she said she would take care of it as soon as possible I have not heard anything from him/her until this point. It passed one week since I requested the shipping. Please let me know when you did it. I cannot wait any longer. Please ship it according to what we talked on the phone yesterday.

I am asked to give the information by forwarding agent, which is essential to ship to Japan. I also need EIN code. In case you are not taking care of this case I will have to send it back to you.

修正後
I called your company and confirmed with the operator that there is no problem regarding papers[documents]. However, it still has not been shipped and I am wondering why. Although he/she said she would take care of it as soon as possible I have not heard anything from him/her [as yet] until this point. It [has been over]passed one week since I requested the shipping. Please let me know when [it was done]you did it. I cannot wait any longer. Please ship it accordingly as we [discussed] talked on the phone yesterday.

I am [being] asked [by the forwarding agent] for the information by forwarding agent, which is essential to ship to Japan. I also need [the] EIN code. [If do not ] take care of this case [I will be forced to] send it back to you.

元の翻訳
1.　いかなる輸出契約の締結に関しても、その前受け金の支払いがなされなければ契約締結はしないものとする、といのがインド輸出法に準拠した当社のポリシーです。当社は貴社と前受金に関し $ ****とすることで話し合いの合意に達しました。

2.　送料を含めた金額で製品を調達するおつもりでしたら、つまり原価で調達し利益が出るようでしたら、そちらの入手先から仕入れる方が理にかなっているように思えます。

ですから、貴社が当社と送料に関しての交渉をしている間貴社は利益を損ねてしまいますので、当社はそちらから引き続き仕入れることをお勧めし、どうか当社との契約を見送ってください。

修正後
1.　いかなる輸出契約の締結に関しても、その前受け金の支払いがなされなければ契約締結はしないものとする、というのがインド国輸出法に準拠した当社のポリシーです。弊社で見直した結果貴社からの前受金を $ ****と決定いたしました。

2.　送料を含めた金額で製品を調達する、つまり原価で調達するのでしたら、商業的にみてもそちらの入手先から仕入れる方が理にかなっているように思えます。

ですから、貴社が当社と送料に関しての交渉をしている間にも貴社に損失が生じてしまいますので、そのルートから引き続き仕入れになり、当社との契約を見合わせていただくようお願い申し上げます。