萩原祥平 (shoheihagiwara) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
We are sorry that the shipment was delayed.
We have shipped the goods. Please confirm.
Sorry for the inconvenience.
Thank you!!

修正後
We are sorry that the shipment was delayed.
We have shipped the goods. Please confirm.
We apologize for any inconvenience this may cause.
Best regards,

元の翻訳

エクセルに商品の一部をリストにしたものがあります。特別な長さやデザインを必要としないかぎり、シンプルな発注システムをとってるので、多くのディーラーはサイトをみて価格を知ることが出来ます。
ここにあるものをお送り出来ますし、全てをエクセルに入力した方がよければお知らせください。
"転売者欄"は、30%引です。一種類につき4つ以上のケーブルを購入した場合、さらに10%引です。
繰り返しになりますが、これは我々の商品の本の一部です。情報が必要であれば、確かに追加をさせていただきます。
ハイファイ愛好家のための機器ケーブルも取り扱っています。どのような長さ、コネクターにも対応可能です！

修正後

エクセルに商品の一部をリストにしたものがあります。特別な長さやデザインを必要としないかぎり、シンプルな発注システムをとってるので、多くのディーラーはサイトをみて価格を知ることが出来ます。
ここにあるものをお送り出来ますし、全てをエクセルに入力した方がよければお知らせください。
"転売者欄"は、30%引です。一種類につき4つ以上のケーブルを購入した場合、さらに10%引です。
繰り返しになりますが、これは我々の商品のほんの一部です。情報が必要であれば、もちろん追加をさせていただきます。
ハイファイ愛好家のための機器ケーブルも取り扱っています。どのような長さ、コネクターにも対応可能です！

元の翻訳
It's time to say good-bye to LA. I'm leaving to New York from LA tomorrow. I'll never forget this 6 weeks that I spent in LA.

修正後
It's time to say good-bye to LA. I'm leaving for New York from LA tomorrow. I'll never forget this 6 weeks that I spent in LA.

元の翻訳
UK
Thank you for your message. Please be assured as this is a model gun and no problem.
This is very high quarity!

FU
Thank you for youre message.
I will send it today.
Best Regards,

修正後
UK
Thank you for your message. As this is a model gun, it is no problem.
This is of very high quality.

FU
Thank you for youre message.
I will send it today.
Best Regards,

元の翻訳
First of all, we will build the website of this product in Japanese.
We will explain the advantage of the conventional anti-mosquito stickers, and we will create the website which tell the product image by telling the terrific acts that you sent this product to Uganda and saved people from malaria.

We will ask for the retail shops in the website.

After we build the website, we will ask for the retail shops which we want to sell this product in Japan by sending direct mails.

We are planning to exhibit this to the big exhibition if we have the chance.
I am sure we can find a lot of retail shops.

修正後
First of all, we will build the website for this product in Japanese.
We will explain the advantage of your produt over the conventional anti-mosquito stickers, and we will create the website which conveys the product image by telling that you are saving the people in Uganda from malaria by sending your product there.

Then in the website, we will advertise for retail shops.

After we build the website, we will try sending DMs to well-known retail shops in Japan, which we would want to have a partnership with, to see if they are interested in selling your product.

We are also planning to showcase the product at big exhibitions if we have a chance.
I am sure we can find many promissing retail shops.