MIMOIDOLOGIST (mimoidologist) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you for your messsage.
I must apologize for our delaying reaching this message.

Regrettably, All items we had sent to you were returned to us.
Therefore, we will refund the full amount that you have paid.
Thank you.

修正後
Thank you for your messsage.
I must apologize for our delaying reaching this message.

Regrettably, the item we had shipped to you were returned to us.
Therefore, we will issue a refund for the full amount that you have paid.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
I am planning to purchase your Tour Issue items on regular basis. Would you bring up me some good ideas to put it into action?
(1) I’m going to let you know about the items which have already acquired higher popularity in Japan.
Would you reach me when you become to enable to ship them to us?
(2) Would you let me know the present information about Tour Issue items you have purchased or during shipping from the manufacturer?

修正後
I would like to purchase your Tour Issue items on regular basis. I propose you the following method, which I believe is efficent:
(1) I’m going to let you know about the items which have already acquired higher popularity in Japan.
Would you reach me when you become enable to ship them to us?
(2) Would you let me know the present information about Tour Issue items you plan to purchase or have purchased and are waiting for the shipping from the manufacturer?