Yoshie (yoshierum0605) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
The winner is group ○○, they finished ○○ in the first match, ○○ in the second match. Congratulations!

Unfortunately, the group that landed in the last place is gourp ○○, finished ○○ in the first match, ○○ in the second match. I am so sorry, but here we have a nice gift for you.

[During a penalty game]
Thank you very much for your cooperation!

Thank you very much for your active participation. Now we would like to conclude Fukuwarai game. Thank you very much again!!

修正後
The winner is group ○○, they finished ○○ in the first match and ○○ in the second match. Congratulations!

Unfortunately, the group that landed in the last place is gourp ○○, finished ○○ in the first match and ○○ in the second match. I am so sorry, but here we have a nice gift for you.

[During a penalty game]
Thank you very much for your participation!

Thank you very much for your active participation. Now we would like to conclude Fukuwarai game. Thank you very much again!!

元の翻訳
(Showing a blindfold), you have to put on this blindfod while you are making the face.

(Holding and moving one of the pieces in front of the board)
The other members of the group can help him or she, saying "Up! Up! Up!", "Down! Down! Down!", "Right! Right! Right!", "Left! Left! Left!", "No! No!", or "Good! Good!".

We would like to decide who's the winner by majority vote, which team put the pieces in place and how funny the face looks.

Ready?
(Put a blindfold on each representative)

修正後
(Showing a blindfold), you have to put on this blindfod while you are making the face.

(Hold and move one of the pieces in front of the face on the board)
The other members of the group can help him or she by saying "Up! Up! Up!", "Down! Down! Down!", "Right! Right! Right!", "Left! Left! Left!", "No! No!", or "Good! Good!".

We will see which team put the pieces in the right places and which one is the funniest and then decide who is the winner by majority vote

Ready?
(Put a blindfold on each representative)

元の翻訳
(Facing the representatives to the board and let them touch it) Here is the board.
(Talk to each group) You have one minute.

(Set a time with a timer)

(Passing a bag with the pieces of face parts inside to each representative)
Are you ready?
Let's make nice faces!
Let's start!

(Push a button of the timer)
[The first match]

(Stop the match when the timer rang)
(Take off the blindfold of each representative and ask "Do you like this face" or what they think.

修正後
(Letting the representatives face to the board and let them touch it) Here is the board.
(Talking to each group) You have one minute.

(Pick up the timer and set a time for one minute)

(Passing a bag with the face parts to the representative in front)
Are you ready?
Let's make a nice face!
Let's start!

(Push a button of the timer)
[During the first match]

(Saying "Stop" and let them stop when the timer rang)
(Take off the blindfold of the representative in front and ask their impression like, "Do you like this face" .

元の翻訳
I apologize for late notice that I have received the poster.
The poster got more severe damage than the photo you'd sent.
It is way too bad and am going to complain to the post office.
I am sorry for this trouble.
Please accpet my apology and would like to give

This poster is new, but it was handed without a tube, therefore got small scars when retured.

I think the first volume had an post card and a sheet of paper.

修正後
I apologize for the late notice that I have received the poster.
The poster had more severe damage than the photo you'd sent.
It is way too bad and I am going to complain to the post office.
I am sorry to have caused this trouble.
Please accept my apology and would like to give you something extra on your next purchase.

This poster was new, but it was handed without a tube, therefore got small scars when carrying home.

I think the first volume had a post card and a sheet of paper.

元の翻訳
しかし、この新アプリはソーシャルで、音楽ファンがイベントや、おそらく彼らの好きなアーティストを探す手段であることも目指している。このアプリを通じて、どんなライブに行く予定または検討しているかを友人に知らせることができる。また、地域内の音楽関連情報のページもある。

GigOutのSarah Verry氏は、当アプリGigOutは提携のチケット販売会社からはもちろん広告費からの収入もあるという。このアプリのチームは現在6人で構成されている。

GigOutのiPhoneアプリは無料で、ここからダウンロード可能である。アンドロイド版は現在開発中である。

修正後
しかし、この新アプリはソーシャルで、音楽ファンがイベントや、おそらく彼らの好きなアーティストを探す手段であることも目指している。このアプリを通じて、どんなライブに参加するかあるいは参加を検討しているかを友人に知らせることができる。また、地域内の音楽関連情報のページもある。

GigOutのSarah Verry氏は、当アプリGigOutは提携のチケット販売会社からはもちろん広告費からの収入もあるという。このアプリのチームは現在6人で構成されている。

GigOutのiPhoneアプリは無料で、ここからダウンロード可能である。アンドロイド版は現在開発中である。

元の翻訳
Another factory gives us the wholesale price, therefore proceed the purchase if they gives us the wholesale price as well.
They are the same condisions, but you insisted that you have to order from that factory.
By the way, they agreed that the pick-up cost will be covered by the warehouse.

修正後
Another factory gives us the wholesale price, therefore please proceed to placing orders if they can give us the wholesale price as well.
They are on the same conditions however, this is because you have insisted on ordering from the factory.
Also, we have agreed that the pick-up cost will be covered by the warehouse.

元の翻訳
こんにちは、
***を除き、商品はすべてよいです。現在***は品切れ中でございます。これら商品のご購入手続きを進められたいのでしたら、発送準備をはじめ、お客様に請求書をお送りいたします。本日中にお支払いただけましたら、発送も本日中にいたします。商品内容にご変更があれば承ります。

生憎ですが、最低価格でご提供しておりますので、さらに20％割引をすることはできかねます。

ＮＹへの発送でも対応いたします。送料は15ドル以下のはずです。

ご購入手続きを進められたい場合はお知らせください。

修正後
こんにちは、
***を除き、商品はすべてよいです。現在***は品切れ中でございます。これら商品のご購入手続きを進められたいのでしたら、発送準備をはじめ、お客様に請求書をお送りいたします。本日中にお支払いただけましたら、発送も本日中にいたします。商品内容にご変更があれば承ります。

生憎ですが、最低価格でご提供しておりますので、さらに2％割引をすることはできかねます。

ＮＹへの発送でも対応いたします。送料は15ドル以下のはずです。

ご購入手続きを進められたい場合はお知らせください。