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元の翻訳
Hello.
Will you send us an authorization document for the order we placed yesterday?
Additionally, we appreciate it if you could issue authorization document as you confirm our order from now on.
By the way, we have faxed you several times but error occurred and we have not been able to complete sending out our message. Please confirm your fax number, 1234.

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Hello.
Will you send us an authorization document for the order we placed yesterday?
Additionally, we would appreciate it if you could issue an authorization document whenever you confirm our order from now on.
By the way, we have faxed you several times but error occurred. We have not been able to complete sending out our message since. Please confirm if your fax number, 1234, is correct.

元の翻訳
Ticket：
【 1SHOW 】 ↵
NTD1,200／JPY4,500 1show only
【 1DAY 】
[24日] NTD2,800／JPY10,000 3shows [3,500 Japan yen cheaper！ ]
[25日] NTD3,800 ／JPY14,000 4shows [4,000 Japan yen cheaper！ ]
【 2DAY VIP 】
NTD6,400／JPY23,000↵
7shows&7Greetings&Special Gift [8,500 Japan yen cheaper！ ]

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Tickets:
[1 SHOW]↵
NTD 1,200/JPY 4,500 1 show only
[1 DAY]
[24th] NTD 2,800/JPY 10,000 3 shows [Cheaper by 3,500 Japanese yen!]
[25th] NTD 3,800/JPY 14,000 4 shows [Cheaper by 4,000 Japanese yen!]
[2 DAY VIP]↵
NTD 6,400/JPY 23,000
7 shows & 7 Greetings & Special Gift [Cheaper by 8,500 Japanese yen!]

元の翻訳
* We only accept cash payments when you reserve a CD at the venue. Please kindly take note in advance that we will not be able to accept credit card payments.
* Please kindly take note in advance that we will not issue refunds for reserved products. We will replace defective products.
* We can make deliveries for the product that you have reserved. However, you will also pay a separate shipping charge together with the product price.
* Accompanying children who are 3 years old and above would require a ticket.

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* We only accept cash payments when you reserve a CD at the venue. Please take note in advance that we will not be able to accept credit card payments.
* Please take note in advance that we will not issue refunds for reserved products. We will replace defective products.
* We can make deliveries for the product that you have reserved. However, you will also pay a separate shipping charge together with the product price.
* Accompanying children who are 3 years old and above would require a ticket.

元の翻訳
Application service for smart phones
Free to download (Some items need to be paid)
App Store (iPhone・iOS)
https://itunes.apple.com/jp/app/line-play/id575147772
Google PLAY (Android)
https://play.google.com/store/apps/details?id=jp.naver.lineplay.android

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Application service for smartphones
Free to download (Some items need to be paid)
App Store (iPhone・iOS)
https://itunes.apple.com/jp/app/line-play/id575147772
Google PLAY (Android)
https://play.google.com/store/apps/details?id=jp.naver.lineplay.android

元の翻訳
OSAKA CITY HALL
YUMEBANTI OSAKA
06-6341-3525

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Osaka-Jo Hall
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Yumebanchi Osaka
06-6341-3525

元の翻訳
Osakajo Hall

Yumebanchi Osaka
06-6341-3525

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The Osaka-Jo Hall

Yumebanchi Osaka
06-6341-3525

元の翻訳
Sure, there are items available only at the venue, too, of course ♪
Don't miss this memorable opportunity!
The details of the items follow:

- Related items EC pre-sale -
Online pre-sale start date and time: From 16:00 on Wednesday, December 3 (plan)
Subject online shops: Koda Team official shop, playroom official shop, Koda Kumi x Koda Team SHOP, and mu-mo shop
※ Please note that the shipment is made after the performance.

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Sure, there are items available only at the venue, too, of course ♪
Don't miss this memorable opportunity!
The details of the items are as follows:

- Related items EC pre-sale -
Online pre-sale start date and time: From 16:00 on Wednesday, December 3 (tentative)
Subject online shops: Koda Team official shop, playroom official shop, Koda Kumi x Koda Team SHOP, and mu-mo shop
※ Please note that the shipment is made after the performance.

元の翻訳
"Smile!!"
11:30～14:55 on November 14th (Friday) O.A

・K-MIX
"RADIO KIDS"
15：07～18：55 on December 4th (Thursday) OA
※Comment

・Tokai Radio
"No idea!?"
20：30～21：00 on November 27th (Thursday) OA

"Nago Music"
5：10～5：25 on December 16th (Tuesday) OA

・CBC Radio
"Nagaoka × Scramble"
23:30～23:50 on November 20th (Thursday) O.A

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"Smile!!"
11:30-14:55 on November 14th (Friday) O.A

・K-MIX
"RADIO KIDS"
15:07-18:55 on December 4th (Thursday) OA
※Comment

・Tokai Radio
"No idea!?"
20:30-21:00 on November 27th (Thursday) OA

"Nago Music"
5:10-5:25 on December 16th (Tuesday) OA

・CBC Radio
"Nagaoka × Scramble"
23:30-23:50 on November 20th (Thursday) O.A

元の翻訳
"Charming Kiss" Cosmetic line went on sale on December 2014
Chiaki♡Chika "Charming Kiss" Music video was unveiled on November 2014

Chiaki♡Chika "Charming Kiss" Music Video
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cF-ZQI9UrpY

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"Charming Kiss" Cosmetic line went on sale in December 2014
Chiaki♡Chika "Charming Kiss" Music video was unveiled in November 2014

Chiaki♡Chika "Charming Kiss" Music Video
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cF-ZQI9UrpY

元の翻訳
This year, the Christmas present for Yuzua was a ballet bar.
She immediately installed it and is doing her best to practice every day.
Yuzua really love and admire ballet. So what about you Olivia? (#^.^#)

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This year, the Christmas present for Yuzua was a ballet bar.
She immediately installed it and is doing her best to practice every day.
Yuzua really loves and admires ballet. So what about you, Olivia? (#^.^#)

元の翻訳
Greetings.
Thank you very much for taking the time to respond.
I am extremely sorry that you were dissatisfied for the delayed arrival of the product.
When I think about how you feel on having the product be delivered as early as possible, I am very disappointed.
The feedback is fine as it is.
I will use it as reference for my future business transactions.

Thank you very much for patronizing my shop.
I shipped the product via EMS today.
This is a very popular product even among the Japanese people.
Please kindly wait for it's arrival.
Thank you.

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Greetings.
Thank you very much for taking the time to respond.
I am extremely sorry that you were dissatisfied for the delayed arrival of the product.
When I think about how you feel on having the product be delivered as early as possible, I am very disappointed.
The feedback is fine as it is.
I will use it as reference for my future business transactions.

Thank you very much for patronizing my shop.
I shipped the product via EMS today.
This is a very popular product even among the Japanese people.
Please kindly wait for its arrival.
Thank you.