ヨウ Young (urnm46) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Free to be feeling cool everyday, and also the cute and adorable
And the commitment to offer playful, timing and quality goods
Jewelries are produced base on such concepts and commitments

修正後
Feeling free, fun, and cool everyday, and also the cute and adorable
And the commitment to offer playful, timing and quality goods
Jewelries are produced base on such concepts and commitments

元の翻訳
The following items has not been delivered after 20 days from my order.

After checking with UPS Tracking code, I assumed that the package was lost in delivery.
And time still passes day by by day from the original estimated date of arrival.
I would like to have substitutions as soon as possible. Please make sure to sent it before middle of this wek.

The order includes 5 Rugs, however I've only received one.
I checked the UPS tracking code which stated the package only weighs 4lbs.
The Rug cannot be shipped with only one, please maKe sure to sent 4 remains before middle of this week.

修正後
The following items has [s-v agreement: subject "items" third person plural] not been delivered, even though more than 20 days have passed since I placed my order.

After checking the UPS tracking code, I assumed that the package was lost in delivery [good].
1週間前から And time still passes day by by day from the original estimated date of arrival [unnatural].
I would like to have substitutions [plural] as soon as possible. Please make sure to sent it [singular: unclear antecedent] this wek [spelling].

The order includes 5 rugs, [comma splice] however, I've only received one [good].
I checked the UPS tracking code, which stated the package only weighs 4lbs [good].
The rug cannot be shipped with only one [unclear: the translator does not understand the original], [comma splice] please maKe sure to sent 4 remains [usage] this week.

元の翻訳
The following items has not been delivered after 20 days from my order.

After checking with UPS Tracking code, I assumed that the package was lost in delivery.↵
And time still passes day by by day from the original estimated date of arrival.↵
I would like to have substitutions as soon as possible. Please make sure to sent it before middle of this wek.

The order includes 5 Rugs, however I've only received one.↵
I checked the UPS tracking code which stated the package only weighs 4lbs.↵
The Rug cannot be shipped with only one, please maKe sure to sent 4 remains before middle of this week.

修正後
The following items have not been delivered after 20 days from my order.

After checking with UPS Tracking code, I assume that the package was lost in delivery. The ETA is extended every day since one week ago. I need substitutions as soon as possible. Please make sure to ship them out by the end of this wek.

The order includes 5 Rugs, however I've only received one. I checked the UPS tracking code which stated the package only weighs 4lbs. It obviously means that only one rug was shipped. Please make absolutely sure to send the four remainders by the end of this week.

元の翻訳
Thanks for your offers. However the bidding price is incorrect, please do not hesitate to bid for another chance, I will be glad to have your offer.

修正後
Thank you. I have bid with the incorrect bidding price, but I may be bidding for the item later on.↵
Best regards,↵
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