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Can I ask you to do a registration test for 2 products? Please let me know once you have completed it. I will do the confirmation. I will pay for the work once all the requests have been completed.

I received approval to obtain the confirmation from the support center using the login of another person. The account is being audited as of current. Please login using the following ID and password. Please mail me when you start logging in and after you have logged out.

ID: XXX
PW: XX

If there are no problems with the registration contents then I will notify you on the URL of the remaining 36 products.

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Could you please complete a registration test for 2 products? Please let me know once you have completed it. I will confirm it. I will pay for the work once all the requests have been completed.

I received approval to obtain the confirmation from the support center using the login of another person [needs to be revised]. The account is being audited as of current. Please log in using the following ID and password. Please mail me when you start logging in and after you have logged out.

ID: XXX
PW: XX

If there are no problems with the registration contents then I will notify you on the URL of the remaining 36 products.

元の翻訳
Can I ask you to do a registration test for 2 products? Please let me know once you have completed it. I will do the confirmation. I will pay for the work once all the requests have been completed.

I received approval to obtain the confirmation from the support center using the login of another person. The account is being audited as of current. Please login using the following ID and password. Please mail me when you start logging in and after you have logged out.

ID: XXX
PW: XX

If there are no problems with the registration contents then I will notify you on the URL of the remaining 36 products.

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Can I ask you to do a registration test for 2 products? Please let me know once you have completed it. I will do the confirmation. I will pay for the work once all the requests have been completed.

I received approval to obtain the confirmation from the support center using the login of another person. The account is being monitored now. Please login using the following ID and password. Please mail me when you start logging in and after you have logged out.

ID: XXX
PW: XX

If there are no problems with the registration contents then I will notify you on the URL of the remaining 36 products.

元の翻訳
The payment has been made and it seem that you have not receive it from your end.
Please confirm the settings urgently.

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The payment has been made but it seems that you haven't accepted it on your end.
Please confirm your settings as soon as possible.

元の翻訳
The payment has been made and it seem that you have not receive it from your end.
Please confirm the settings urgently.

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The payment has been made, but it seems that you have not received it.
Please confirm the settings urgently.

元の翻訳
Thank you for showing interest in the products of our store.

Unfortunately the product you are asking about is unaltered. The language is in Japanese.

If you want to buy this then I will send a new unopened product instead of a second-hand.
Please reconsider. Thank you.

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Thank you for showing interest in our products.

Unfortunately, the product you are asking about is not unaltered. The language is in Japanese.

If you want to buy this, then I will send a new unopened product instead of a second-hand one.
Please consider purchasing it. Thank you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for showing interest in the products of our store.

Unfortunately the product you are asking about is unaltered. The language is in Japanese.

If you want to buy this then I will send a new unopened product instead of a second-hand.
Please reconsider. Thank you.

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Thank you for showing interest in the products of our store.

Unfortunately, the product you are asking about is altered and the language is in Japanese.

If you want to buy this item, then I will send a new unopened product instead of a second-hand one.
Please consider purchasing it. Best regards.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your response.

I have listed the required sections for the wholesale contract.
Please confirm the PDF file attachment.

My company does not have a website so my store page URL is listed in my main outlet at Amazon.co.jp.↵
Please also confirm that.

So I request your help for the creation of my account.

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Thank you for your response.

I have entered the required fields in the wholesale contract.
Please check the attached PDF file.

My company does not have a website, so I have entered the URL to my store page on the major on-line retailer Amazon Japan; please take a look at that also.

Now, please kindly create my account.

元の翻訳
Yes, there are no shift boot for both sides.
I am attaching a photo of the label that is being reflected.↵
I am attaching a photo of the shift boot included in the previous order just to b sure.
I think it is not possible to remove the shift boot alone so was this mistaken with a product that does not have a shift boot?

Do you a a product that has a shift boot in your stock?Please ship it urgently if you have it in stock as the customer is currently waiting for it.

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No, neither of them has a shift boot.
I am attaching a photo of the label and just in case I'm also attaching a photo of the product with a shift boot which I ordered last time.
I think it is impossible to remove a shift boot from the product so doesn't it mean you have mistaken it for the product with a shift boot?

Do you have any product with a shift boot in your stock? Please ship it urgently if you have it in stock as the customer is currently waiting for it.

元の翻訳
Can you sell it at 460 dollars since I am buying 2?
In addition, I would like to but products from you every month.
Is it possible to purchase every month?

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Can you sell it at 460 dollars since I am buying 2?
In addition, I would like to buy products from you every month.
Is it possible to purchase every month?

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I happen to have bought breakfast from McDonald's.
I am not good in English so I always ask my colleague to translate.
So I cannot speak because of it.
Thank you for contacting me about the sale.

Thank you for the status report.
Please let me know the tracking NO once the product has been shipped.
I am looking forward to it.

The site is undergoing a renewal now.
It is scheduled to be back online from MM/DD.
Please wait for a while.
(The words will be used for the home page notification)

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I happen to have bought breakfast from McDonald's.
I am not good at English so I always ask my colleague to translate.
So I cannot speak because of it.
Thank you for contacting me about the sale.

Thank you for the status report.
Please let me know the tracking NO once the product has been shipped.
I am looking forward to it.

The site is undergoing a renewal now.
It is scheduled to be back online from MM/DD.
Please wait for a while.
(The words will be used for the home page notification)

元の翻訳
I used the auction software to make a bid reservation in your auction. Last night, when I was checking the item being reserved, I was bothered by the concave part of the unit in the photo so I made a cancellation of the bid reservation so why was there a successful bid when I woke up this morning? Apologies for this but can you cancel this? I am very sorry to trouble you. Thank you.

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I used the bidding software to make a bid reservation in your auction. Last night, when I was checking the item being reserved, I was bothered by the concave part of the unit in the photo so I made a cancellation of the bid reservation so why was there a successful bid when I woke up this morning? Apologies for this but can you cancel this? I am very sorry to trouble you. Thank you.

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HEMS or better known as Home Energy Management System is a technology to provide ecology and comfortable living.
By centralizing the equipment at home with a control panel, it promotes energy saving rather than "visible" energy.

In the end, the energy consumption at home is the total consumption of home appliances.
If home appliances constitutes the energy at home, than wouldn't it make sense to connect them all with the home appliance controller HEMS?

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HEMS or better known as Home Energy Management System is a technology to provide ecology and comfortable living.
By centralizing the equipment at home with a control panel, it promotes energy saving rather than "visible" energy.

In the end, the energy consumption at home is the total consumption of home appliances.
If home appliances constitutes the energy at home, then wouldn't it make sense to connect them all with the home appliance controller HEMS?

元の翻訳
The new sellers were probably surprised to the drastic price drop of the product, and they are trying to sell it as soon as possible even if it means losing money. This trend is higher for sellers who are not familiar on how to sell in Amazon. They would withdraw themselves once they run out of stock. You can increase your sales numbers if you lowered the price, and that would mean it won't be long until they disappear right?

Thank you for sending me the manual. I will not pass this to others.

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The new sellers were probably surprised at the drastic drop in the product price, and they are trying to sell it as soon as possible even if it means losing money. This trend is higher for sellers who are not familiar with how to sell in Amazon. They would withdraw themselves once they run out of stock. You can increase your sales numbers if you lowered the price, and that would mean it won't be long until they disappear right?

Thank you for sending me the manual. I will not pass this to others.

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for responding to the email.
In addition , Thank you very much on answering a lot of questions.

My doubts were cleared after receiving the answers.

I will contact you if there is anything that i don't understand.

I sincerely thank you for your kind support.

Thank you and regards.

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Thank you very much for responding to the email.
In addition, thank you very much for answering a lot of questions.

My doubts were cleared after receiving the answers.

I will contact you if there is anything that i don't understand.

I sincerely thank you for your kind support.

Thank you and regards.

元の翻訳
I am sorry to have kept you waiting.
However, there was a formal announcement from the Japan Post on a delay with the SAL postage going to France.

To be honest, We hope that you could wait for a little bit more since the product will arrive very soon. But if you say otherwise, we will ship the same product once more.

You can confirm it through the internet since it will be shipped with a tracking number.

Is this arrangement okay with you?

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I am sorry to have kept you waiting.
However, there was a formal announcement from the Japan Post on a delay with the SAL postage going to France.

To be honest, We hope that you could wait for a little bit more since the product will arrive very soon. But if you say otherwise, we will ship the same product once more.

You can confirm it through the internet since it will be shipped with a tracking number.

Is this arrangement okay with you?↵
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お待たせして申し訳ありません。↵
しかし、Japan Postから正式にフランス宛SAL便の遅延が発生しているという知らせがありました。↵
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本音を言えば、もう商品到着まで少し待って頂きたいとことですが、↵
あなたがそこまで言うのでしたら、同じ商品を再度、発送させて頂きます。↵
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追跡番号をつけて発送しますので、↵
インターネットから確認することができます。↵
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これでよろしいですか？