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Please tell us where we can send payment.
We will process payment tomorrow.
After we finish sending money, we will email you the remittance receipt.
When you confirm the payment, please make products as in the operation sheet and mail them to Osaka.

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Please tell us your bank account to make a payment.
We will process the payment tomorrow.
After we finish the transfer payment , we will e-mail you the remittance advice.
When you confirm the payment, please make the products according to the operation sheet and send them to Osaka.

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Thank you for your reply.

We would like you to return the product and obtain the refund.
However, the product is now in Japan using a transfer service company called Myus.
Will you absorb the international shipping fee for returning the product?

We look forward to your reply.

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Thank you for your reply.

We would like you to return the product and accept the refund.
However, the product is now in Japan using the service provided by the package consolidation service company called Myus.
Would you please bear the international shipping fee for returning the product?

We look forward to your reply.

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Please kindly issue the refund for the cancellation of order that made through Paypal on 6 of January, 2015.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

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Please kindly refund for the cancellation of order that made through Paypal on 6 of January, 2015.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

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There are a lot of Ryokan (Japanese style hotel) in Hakone but I chose Fukuzumiro because I can have valuable experience of staying at heritage.

The nearest station is Tonosawa of Hakone Tozan Railway but if you don't have a lot of baggage you can walk for about 10 minutes from Hakone Yumoto station that Odakyu Romancecar stops. There's a but which stops in front of the Ryokan from Hakone Yumoto so it's really accessible.

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There are a lot of Ryokan (Japanese style hotel) in Hakone but I chose Fukuzumiro because I can have a valuable experience to stay at the registered tangible cultural property.

The nearest station is Tonosawa of Hakone Tozan Railway but if you don't have a lot of baggage you can walk for about 10 minutes from Hakone Yumoto station where Odakyu Romancecar stops. There's a bus service which stops in front of the Ryokan from Hakone Yumoto station so it's really accessible.

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Thank you for your reply.
I appreciate your understanding.

We are currently asking the investigation of the delivery status, we will sincerely proceed to forward upon receipt of the confirmation.

Could you kindly wait a moment?

Best Regards,

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Thank you for your reply.
I appreciate your understanding.

We currently inquire the delivery status. We will sincerely proceed to the next step upon receipt of the confirmation.

Could you kindly wait for a moment?

Best Regards,

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I think the procedure you did is not "Cancel Transaction", but "Unpaid item case". So could you check it again?
We cannot complete the procedure unless we proceed the cancellation with both satisfaction as there is no fitted category.

Best regards.

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I think the procedure you did is not "Cancel Transaction", but "Unpaid item case". So could you check it again?
We cannot complete the procedure unless we proceed the cancellation with mutual agreement as there is no fitted category.

Best regards,

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Thank you for your reply. I am Takahashi who contacted you a few days ago. The program that I am interested in the xx. I attached a document here, Is it enough?
At last, I would like to have some information about the program such as studying abroad. What should I do if I do not have the enough language ability.

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Thank you for your reply. I am Takahashi who contacted you a few days ago. The program that I am interested in is OO. I attached the document here. Is it enough?
At last, I would like to have some information about other program such as a language class . Do you have any advice if my language level is not high enough?

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I apologize for the late reply.
The product was shipped with the insurance.
I will send the investigation request again.
Could you please share the PDF you received?

And, you mentioned that you want the product as soon as possible
I will confirm my inventory and other sales people's inventory.
If there is the product, would you want me to ship it to you?
Or you want to get the money back?

Please let me know.

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I apologize for the late reply.
The product was shipped with the insurance.
I will send the investigation request again.
Could you please share the PDF you received?

And, you mentioned that you want the product as soon as possible.
I will confirm my inventory and the inventory of others in the same trade.
If there is the product, would you want me to ship it to you?
Or you want to get the money back?

Please let me know.

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I really enjoyed myself! Satisfying with everything indeed! As I hardly expected to be able to get on the sightseeing boat, I got so excited. Blue sky and white cloud, and there is no ripple on the lake; it was like a mirror world. It looked like Uyuni lake in Bolivia.
I crossed over to the port town by boat and the views were wonderful. After visiting a cheese factory, I hanged around the town while looking for a restaurant for lucnch(my own expense). I found fish&chips scrumptious here too! It was a dream-like trip. So satisfied.

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I really enjoyed myself! I was satisfied with everything indeed! As I hardly expected to be able to get on the sightseeing boat, I got so excited. Blue sky and white cloud, and there is no ripple on the lake; it was like a mirror world. It looked like Uyuni lake in Bolivia.
I crossed over to the port town by boat and the views were wonderful. After visiting a cheese factory, I hanged around the town while looking for a restaurant for lunch (which was not included in the tour). I found a fish&chips shop here as well and it was so yummy! It was a dream-like trip. So satisfied.

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Waterfall was amazing.
It was a tour in which we could enjoy the dynamic nature of Iceland. We joined this tour because my friend saw a review of it and felt like joining it. I recommend it to those who are going to Iceland. The tour was in the middle of September. The days are longer than in Japan still, and it was not so cold yet, but it was cold when we got to a glacier lake. So it was a good decision to take a thin down jacket of UNIQLO.
There was a description which said it would be better to sit down on the left side, so we sat on the seats on the left. I am grateful because there were more beautiful landscapes on the left side.

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Waterfall was amazing.
It was a tour in which we could enjoy the dynamic nature of Iceland. We joined this tour because my friend saw a review of it and felt like joining it. I recommend it to those who have a plan to go to Iceland. We joined the tour in the middle of September. The days were longer than in Japan still, and it was not so cold yet at Reykjavik, but it was cold when we got to a glacier lake. So it was a good decision to take a light down jacket of UNIQLO.
The review said it would be better to take a seat on the left side of the bus, so we did. I am grateful because there were more beautiful landscapes on the left side.

元の翻訳
こんばんは。あなたのレンズに興味があります。出荷文章の中で一番安い物を教えてください。敬具

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こんばんは。あなたのレンズに興味があります。出荷書類では、安い価格で申告して発送してもらうことは可能でしょうか？敬具

元の翻訳
こんにちは。あなたのレンズに興味があります。輸送ですが、低価格で送っていただけませんでしょうか？
よろしくお願いします。

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こんばんは。あなたのレンズに興味があります。出荷書類には安い価格を申告して送っていただけませんでしょうか？
よろしくお願いします。

元の翻訳
こんばんは。あなたのレンズに興味を持ちました。出荷文書のなかで最低値のものを記載した上で配送していただけませんか？よろしくお願いします。

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こんばんは。あなたのレンズに興味を持ちました。出荷書類では安い価格を申告して配送していただけませんか？よろしくお願いします。

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To celebrate the new product launch, we decided to hold a hand shake event at Don Quijote Nagoya store on Saturday February 14.

The tickets will be distributed from Saturday January 17, 15:00 pm at the intended stores.

For more information, please click the link below
http://www.love-perfume.jp/special/index.html

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To celebrate the new product launch, we decided to hold a handshake event at Don Quijote Nagoya store on Saturday February 14.

The tickets will be distributed from Saturday January 17, 15:00 pm at the stores participating in the project.

For more information, please click the link below
http://www.love-perfume.jp/special/index.html

元の翻訳
Just Wonderful.
I joined this tour without any knoledge about Montserrat, so I was impressed by the wonderful scenary and vigorous rocky hill. We had enough free time, so we could go sightseeing at our own pace. The guide explained kindly with a smile. I repeatedely talk with my husband that we were happy to join this tour.

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Just Wonderful.
I joined this tour without any knoledge about Montserrat, so I was impressed by the wonderful scenary and vigorous rocky hill. We had plenty of free time, so we could go sightseeing at our own pace. The guide explained kindly with a smile. I repeatedely talk with my husband that we were happy to join this tour.

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It was satisfying tour.
The tour guides give an explanation in Spanish and English.
Since they explain in easy English, I think you can enjoy this tour without complains if you can understand English to some extent.
And it is so good because you can visit the Church of Colònia Güell and Montserrat where you may hesitate to visit alone.
You have a enough time to see the Statue of Maria in Montserrat.

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It was a satisfying tour.
The tour guides give an explanation in Spanish and English.
Since their English is easy to understand, I think you can enjoy this tour without trouble if you can understand English to some extent.
And it is also good because you can visit the Church of Colònia Güell and Montserrat where you may hesitate to visit alone.
You have plenty of free time to see the Statue of Maria in Montserrat.

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As there are a number of things that we cannot understand unless we manage, we would like to do business with you even if you have not carried out the business much.
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What we should do to provide the high quality musical instruments in Japan to customers in Hong Kong and other countries by being ahead of rival sellers that you listed.
How we should develop the "strength" that only we have.
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We would like to manage by cooperating with you.

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As there are a number of things that we are not sure without any experiences, we would like to have a go with you even if you don't have much business experiences.
What we should do to provide the high quality Japanese musical instruments to customers in Hong Kong and other countries by being ahead of competitors?
How we should develop our own "strength"?↵
As you mentioned, these are what we need to find out.
We would like to find out how we can achieve them with your support.

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As I was busy by preparation for participating in the NAMM Show 2015 that takes place in Anaheim in USA, I delayed in responding to you.

I saw all the documents you had sent to me.
I list our ideas.

1. We can arrange not only the musical instruments manufactured by Ishibashi but also all the ones we have in the Japanese market as an inventory. We would like you to pay at least 100 dollars as a fee or the fee corresponding to the price of the musical instrument you purchase.

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As I was busy at the preparation for the NAMM Show 2015 at Anaheim in USA, I was not able to respond to you soon.

I checked all the documents you had sent to me.
I would like to mention our ideas as follows:

1. We can arrange not only the musical instruments sold at Ishibashi Music but also all the ones available in the Japanese market. We would like to charge at least 100 dollars as a commission or the commission according to the price of the musical instrument you will purchase.

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Thank you for your contacting us. I'm writing to inform you regarding the status of tracking the shipment. we were allowed to export items and we confirmed the item shipped out to the U.S. from the Tokyo customs on January 12. It was our mistake that we informed you it would arrive on March 12.
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The product should arrive on January on January 24-27. Please note that it could arrive a few days later than the expected date depending on the traffic condition.

We are hoping it will make it on your parent's birthday.
Thank you.

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Thank you for your contacting us. I'm writing to inform you regarding the status of tracking the shipment. ↵
We got a permission for export . We confirmed the item was shipped out to the U.S. from Tokyo Customs on January 12. It was our mistake that we informed you it would arrive on March 12.
The product would arrive between January 24 and 27. Please note that it may arrive a few days later than the expected date depending on traffic conditions.

We are hoping you will receive it on time for your parent's birthday.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
If the functions I listed above were featured, this template would be sold twofold. At the same time, you wouldn't receive the inquiry that ABC function didn't work.

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If the functions I listed above were featured, this template would be sold twice as much as current. At the same time, you wouldn't receive the inquiry that ABC function didn't work.