eggplant (eggplant) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
No tracking number of USP is issued.
According to the guidance on the Amazon website, USP will come to pick up simply.
That's all regarding returning.

I will send labels needed for returning again, so please check it.
There no problem regarding a commission fee.
Please progress the process of returning.

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No tracking number of USP has been issued.
According to the guidance [word choice] on the Amazon website, UPS will come to pick up simply.
That's all regarding returning.

I will send labels needed for returning again, so please check it.
There no problem regarding a commission fee [no verb].
Please progress [word choice] the process of returning.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your checking the returned product.
I understood about 15% as a commission for keeping.

I hope for a refund of the balance.
I hope for receiving through Paypal.
I'm sorry to bother you.
I appreciate your cooperation.

Fukuyama

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Thank you for your checking the returned product.
I understood about 15% as a commission for keeping.

I hope for [word choice] a refund of the balance.
I would like to receive it through PayPal.
Sorry for the trouble this may cause you.
I appreciate your cooperation.

Fukuyama

元の翻訳
I tried to ship the items which I had purchased from your company the day before to Japan through a transportation company in U.S.

But the process needs documents due to importation control in U.S.

The following content is written in the e-mail from the transportation company.

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I provided the document in the attached file against the content.

Then I received the reply as following.

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There are more needed documents.

If the items continue to be kept more, they will be shipped back to your company.

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I tried to ship the items which I had purchased from your company before to Japan through a forwarding company in U.S.

But I need documents for the process due to export controls in U.S.

The following content is written in the e-mail from the forwarding company.

○○

I provided the document as an attached file to the email.

Then I received the reply as following.

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There are more documents required for the process.

If the items continue to be kept longer, they will be shipped back to your company.

元の翻訳
・If I want to add a logo to a product, should I pay additional charges?
・I want to use olive color in the sheet, then is there a sample picture of it?

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・If I want to add a logo to a product, do I need to pay additional charges?
・I'm considering making the sheet color olive. Do you have any sample pictures?

元の翻訳
Hon Haiは、Foxconnとしてよく有名だが、次世代の9.7インチのiPadの生産全てを扱うつもりで、PegatronとCasetekと共に、iPad mini 2に関して責任をを共有することになるでしょう。PegatronはiPad miniの生産シェアを、第二期の60~65%から、第三期には70~75%に、第四期には80~85%に向上させると見られています。

Kuoによれば、AppleはiPad mini 2とiPad 5のいずれも、詳細な日付の目処はまだ立っていませんが、年末までにはリリースすると見ています。

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Hon Haiは、Foxconnとして有名ですが、次世代の9.7インチのiPadの生産全てを扱うつもりで、PegatronとCasetekと共に、iPad mini 2に関して責任を共有することになるでしょう。PegatronはiPad miniの生産シェアを、第2四半期の60~65%から、第3四半期には70~75%に、第4四半期には80~85%に向上させると見られています。

Kuoによれば、AppleはiPad mini 2とiPad 5のいずれも、詳細な日付の目処はまだ立っていませんが、年末までにはリリースすると見ています。

元の翻訳
4)このレンズは違います。Sigma 28-80が送られてきましたが、絞りが閉じて固定されており、オートフォーカスが作動しません。

送られてきた4つのレンズの内、3つは間違っていたり、使い物になりません。既にそれらとS&Hに支払っていて、カスタムにもう60USDを払っているので、これらのレンズに208.50 USDとカスタムに60 USDも投資しています。内、3つは説明されたものではなく、ひどいものは使い物にならず、売却しました。

こうした理由で、3つはケースと使えないレンズ1つは開封しています。

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4)間違ったレンズが送られてきました。Sigma 28-80が送られてきました。絞りが閉じたまま動かず、オートフォーカスが作動しません。

送られてきた4つのレンズの内、3つは間違っていたり、使い物になりません。既に代金と送料＆手数料、更にカスタム（関税）60USDをそれらに対し支払っています。つまり、内３つは説明とは異なり、さらに悪い事に使用することも販売する事もできないそれらのレンズに対し208.50 USD（米ドル）とカスタム（関税）に60 USD（米ドル）を費やしたのです。

こうした理由で、使用不可能なレンズ一個につき一件ずつ、３件の申し立てをさせていただきました。

元の翻訳
I haven't received the product ordered on 29th May. I got the response that it had arrived in Japan by e-mail, but is it right?
I asked the distributor in Japan, but I couldn't confirm it. Also in website, a result of tracing was "On Board Aircraft".
Could you please tell me the tracing number with which I can confirm that it has arrived in Japan?

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I haven't received the product ordered on May 29th. I got an email stating that it had arrived in Japan, but is it true?
I asked the distributor in Japan, but I couldn't confirm it. Also the tracking website shows the status as "On Board Aircraft."
Could you please tell me the tracing number so that I can confirm that it has arrived in Japan?

元の翻訳
The ratio of inferior goods purchased from you is too high.
The possibility that the products in themselves are bad knockoffs is very high.
I'll return all the products to you, so please refund me.
All the products are unopened.

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The defect rate is too high among the goods purchased from you.
The likelihood that your products themselves are bad knockoffs is very high.
I'll return all the products to you, so please give me a full refund.
All the products are unopened.

元の翻訳
I'm sorry for our failing.
We forgot to include postage in the price.
If you don't purchase the product yet,
I'll be grad that you decide to purchase it through other exhibitors.
I'm really sorry for the trouble.

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I'm sorry for our failure .
We forgot to include postage in the price.
If you haven't purchased the product yet,
I'll be great if you purchase it through other sellers.
I'm really sorry for this trouble.

元の翻訳
1.画面に問題があり、機械が正常につながりません。画面を軽く押し下げて下さい。軽くです。画面が壊れないようにお気を付け下さい。
2.ステップ1でそれを行なっても、まだ正常に作動しません。機械を取り外して下さい。画面と機械をつなぐ4つのねじをご確認下さい。そして、ねじを緩めて下さい。ねじが機械にそれほど固定されないようにします。

2.ステップ1を行なっても、まだ電源が入りません。機械内部の非常スイッチのワイヤーに異常があるかもしれません。機械を取り外して、非常スイッチと機械をつなげるワイヤーを確認して下さい。

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1.画面に問題があり、機械が正常につながりません。画面を軽く押し下げて下さい。軽くです。画面が壊れないようにお気を付け下さい。
2.ステップ1でそれを行なっても、まだ正常に作動しません。機械を取り外して下さい。画面と機械をつなぐ4つのねじを見つけて下さい。そして、ねじを緩めて下さい。ねじが機械にそれほど固定されないようにします。

2.ステップ1を行なっても、まだ電源が入りません。機械内部の非常スイッチのワイヤーに異常があるかもしれません。機械を取り外して、非常スイッチと機械をつなげるワイヤーを見つけて下さい。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your e-mail and pictures.↵
I'm sorry to be late for my response, too.

We're really happy to meet Kazuko and Machiko, could enjoy it.
Kazuko looked well, and I was surprised that Machiko was so youthful.
Thank you for giving various souvenirs.

I remember that my mother got cheerful and her face returned to be youthful and good in a moment when she met you in my house.
Now, she has a good appetite and can walk by herself.↵

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Thank you for your e-mail and pictures and sorry for my late response.

We are really happy we had a chance to meet Kazuko and Machiko.
Kazuko looked well, and I was surprised that Machiko was very young as I had expected.
Also, I appreciate your various souvenirs.

I definitely noticed that my mother got cheerful making a rally while she met you.
Now, she has a good appetite and can walk by herself.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your immediate response.
Is it correct that you couldn't understand?
A real loft is one of the most important information for customers in purchasing.
I'm afraid that you didn't write the loft down before shipping.
Please be careful not to do the same thing again after this.
Is it you who wrote the number of the specification sheet?
If you don't mind, I'll happy that you would write more politely.
I hope to continue to do business with you.

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Thank you for your immediate response.
Is it correct that you couldn't understand?
A real loft is one of the most important information for customers in purchasing.
I'm afraid that you didn't write the loft down before shipping.
Please be careful not to do the same thing again after this.
Is it you who wrote the number of the specification sheet?
If you don't mind, I'll be happy that you would write more politely.
I hope to continue to do business with you.

元の翻訳
Which is the product which I told you through the e-mail?

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Which is the product which I told you through the e-mail?↵
Which product is the one that I mentioned in my email?↵
↵
文脈がないので難しいですね。↵
文中のwhichは文法的に誤りです。↵
through the e-mail accountなどのように後に名詞が来るならthe e-mailもありですが、ここでは不可です。

元の翻訳
山原88102012様

ご返答ありがとうございます。そのヘルメットには不具合があるように思います、表面がはがれているのではないでしょうか。映りの良い商品の写真をいただけないでしょうか？

フォートレス114
「返答する」をクリックして、お問い合わせからか、電子メールでお返事下さい。

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yamahaya88102012様

ご返答ありがとうございます。そのヘルメットには不具合があるように思います。表面がはがれているのではないでしょうか。映りの良い商品の写真をいただけないでしょうか？

fortress114
「返答する」をクリックして、お問い合わせからか、電子メールでお返事下さい。

元の翻訳
Thank you for your polite answer.
I found it difficult to buy in from TourVan directly.
Please offer the list and the price of all the items which you have at the moment.
If there are items which you're going to receive after this, please offer the list and the price of them in addition.
I'm going to continue to purchase items from you, so I'll be grad that you contact with me regularly.

Have you shipped the items this Monday or Tuesday?
When will the items arrive? Please tell the number to trace the shipment.

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Thank you for your detailed reply.
I understand it is difficult to buy directly from TourVan.
Please send me the list of all the items and their prices you currently have in stock.
If there are more items to be added in near future, please send me the list for those at the same time.
I'm going to continue to purchase items from you, so I'll be glad if you could contact me regularly (how about once a week?).

Have you shipped the items on Monday or Tuesday of this week?
When will the items arrive? Please let me know the tracking number.